Off to Neverland..

Wise Wiggles · 02-09-2013, 02:47 PM

Today Tinkerbell's stinger fell & she couldn't fly
As my finger smelt like pussy pie
Which took me by surprise, it lingered well
Devil's music? Watch me sing to hell
Just a shadow of what's inside, I bleed the shell
Dripping blood like pixie dust, using wings to spell..
My purpose, flows precise, cursive. Use to fly perfect,
But you lost your faith- I'm deserted, god it's great
What a tragedy. Witness 2nd coming if you clap for me
Something's grabbing me around the waist
This the betrayal found in hate. You gave this clown his face
Count to eight, as Tiger Lily drowns w/haste
Last gurgle similar to sounds in rape.(now deflate)
The balloon is fucked, Too soon or what?
Wounded duck for the hounds to chase
You're My Boy, Blue- A track for the clouds to race
Outbreak. Hell's coming. 12 monkey's to spread virus
Evil drifts. See thru ships full'a dead pirates
Dress like it's a costume game, as I walk the plank
To splash or not to splash? I'll leave that option blank
Odd, insane.. Should I just lounge on my birthday?
Or dive.. & breathe life thru the mouth of a mermaid?
Someone give him a hand, it seems he lost his..
As the crocodile clock ticks, YOU BETTER YELL 'IM A CODFISH'
Always more than just one drink, Sup Tink?!
I pump ink- My heart is a pen
No light. But the darkness'll end
When he remembers.. & Peter starts to pretend..

Wise Wiggles · 02-14-2013, 08:46 AM

Awesome yo. This was probably some of the dopest shit I've ever read cuz it was sprinkled w Peter Pan references and shit nigga..

zygote · 02-15-2013, 11:00 PM

Good writing kept focus to the topic throughout. Only line that seemed off was the CODFISH line but then again not seen this cinema, but am familiar enough with it to understand and appreciate it.

02-09-2013, 02:47 PM	#1
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,507 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788019	Off to Neverland.. Today Tinkerbell's stinger fell & she couldn't fly As my finger smelt like pussy pie Which took me by surprise, it lingered well Devil's music? Watch me sing to hell Just a shadow of what's inside, I bleed the shell Dripping blood like pixie dust, using wings to spell.. My purpose, flows precise, cursive. Use to fly perfect, But you lost your faith- I'm deserted, god it's great What a tragedy. Witness 2nd coming if you clap for me Something's grabbing me around the waist This the betrayal found in hate. You gave this clown his face Count to eight, as Tiger Lily drowns w/haste Last gurgle similar to sounds in rape.(now deflate) The balloon is fucked, Too soon or what? Wounded duck for the hounds to chase You're My Boy, Blue- A track for the clouds to race Outbreak. Hell's coming. 12 monkey's to spread virus Evil drifts. See thru ships full'a dead pirates Dress like it's a costume game, as I walk the plank To splash or not to splash? I'll leave that option blank Odd, insane.. Should I just lounge on my birthday? Or dive.. & breathe life thru the mouth of a mermaid? Someone give him a hand, it seems he lost his.. As the crocodile clock ticks, YOU BETTER YELL 'IM A CODFISH' Always more than just one drink, Sup Tink?! I pump ink- My heart is a pen No light. But the darkness'll end When he remembers.. & Peter starts to pretend..

02-14-2013, 08:46 AM	#2
Wise Wiggles nok Su kow Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,507 Battle Record: 1-1 Rep Power: 51788019	Awesome yo. This was probably some of the dopest shit I've ever read cuz it was sprinkled w Peter Pan references and shit nigga..

02-15-2013, 11:00 PM	#3
zygote Senior Member Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 502 Battle Record: 33-12 Accomplishments - OM HOF (2x) Champed - Art of Writing League (3x) Rep Power: 737825	Good writing kept focus to the topic throughout. Only line that seemed off was the CODFISH line but then again not seen this cinema, but am familiar enough with it to understand and appreciate it.