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Old 02-08-2013, 01:25 PM   #1
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another re-post from netcees

My sound's ridiculous, got it down to a synthesis
Push that rock on the block, around town im crowned Sisyphus
Hit the ground with a grip, on the prowl hittin licks
take they clout if they flip; lay em out n make they house into crypts
Im all about the click clack till I collect big stacks
Checks get cashed exempt with tax to graft and protect kick backs
In pitch black I hustle quick fast, my muscle gets that
so there's never trouble on the double up for the cut or pinched bags
I stop and fantasize when I plot to plan my grinds
cops get handed bribes to stand in line like they wanna pantomime
I dont drop nann in dimes with a hot frantic mind
When I got grams to pies cramped inside of my pants grand design
I let them cannons fly, a quick burst gets em sick hurt
Done did dirt, grab a tricks purse n stomp em out till I kick curbs
Let that whip work while the wrist stirs with a sifter
my mixtures blister on the bubble up and comes to a tinctured simmer
I re-up like an anagram with all the back and forth
When I handle grams its ambulance crash'n course on path to court
I've ran the dance with plants, coke, crack and horse
all leaving tracks and sores, and fiends with long sleeves grabbin more

Shit...believe I give em what they askin for.
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Old 02-08-2013, 08:41 PM   #2
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....DEAD.

*daps*

that was crazy! the rhyme schemes was exceptional
vocab was great but the whole verse had a gritty
street feel, vivid as fuck, this shit extra my nigga!!!

When I got grams to pies cramped inside of my pants grand design
I let them cannons fly, a quick burst gets em sick hurt
Done did dirt, grab a tricks purse n stomp em out till I kick curbs
Let that whip work while the wrist stirs with a sifter

CRACK!^^^
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Old 02-08-2013, 10:04 PM   #3
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Old 02-09-2013, 12:38 AM   #4
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lol split this aint the type of sht u like, I am aware of that....

thnx for the feed though.
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Old 02-09-2013, 01:57 AM   #5
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yo don't play me like that homie
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Old 02-09-2013, 08:13 PM   #6
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Very nice flow and nice multis but I wasn't seeing any real content here imo but maybe that's just me. But all in all I was diggin it man. Props
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Old 02-16-2013, 09:40 AM   #7
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Seriously.


This needs more reads.



This is one of the best examples of NATURAL flow i've read in a hot minute, Rawn.


Fuck ya... was really refreshing - old school vibe, had me reflecting on some of the dopest battle writers in the day. I've seen the emphasis on flow have ups and downs throughout the years --- and while the emphasis is high these days for alot of battlers it seems, it doesn't read naturally to me as it did in the day. alot of dudes force words together, to make sure it rhymes, even if the sentence dont quite make sense. You didn't do that.

I can say that this generation is more attentive to syllable counting than some other phases - which makes for a rhythmic read, which is dope -- and which you did as well -- but I just thought the flow was great.

Strong flow - a cool steeze, gutta theme...some cool concepts sprinkled throughout too - really solid flex drop brotha, i like your swagger and look forward to peepin more of your shit.
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Old 02-16-2013, 09:34 PM   #8
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Oh i remember reading this one on nc. Really sick flow on this. I thought it was dope as fuck then and sti ll think its dope as fuck now. Always a pleasure.reading ur work. I think ill drop some old stuff here too.
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