07-07-2015, 04:53 AM | #1 |
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07-07-2015, 11:04 AM | #2 |
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The last verse was dope. Wasnt feeling the first one brah. Too much and it went no where? Rap god interpretation? Dunno but like i said that last verse you seemed to catch a fire lol Thanks |
07-08-2015, 09:40 PM | #3 |
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planets advance stance is angled distinctive discordance spangled aroma
natural coma under willow trees i capture pnuemonia.... sulfuric shorelines on low tide i walk beside em staring at the sun my laughter is slaughter to leviathans son found a way home from a zone where i begun thunderdome electric fences beyond the clouds of legends shrouded henchman phantasm style pull them guns out this was dope, I liked these sections the most...and that closing line the rest kind of threw me off, it was a lot to take in at once I suppose... maybe I'll come back & edit more in once I process it, either way... as quoted above...dope
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