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Old 08-21-2015, 01:56 PM   #1
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"The Dream Builder"



She lived alone
a simple soul with simple needs;
but no-one to fulfil those needs
or build a dream with.
Incompleteness filled the empty void.
Her head was poisoned;
A smorgasbord of morbid thoughts
crawled the halls
and dormant walls of her psyche
to talk to her nightly.
Its haunting calls were inviting,
always inciting her further.
Supplying the fervour to drive her to murder.
The silence usurps her as she waits for a victim.
Playing by instinct having made her decision.
She tails from a distance- preparing to strike.
The glare of a knife cuts through the air of the night.
She stares in his eyes, watching the colour drain.
Unafraid.
Unadulterated.
Unashamed.
Love and hate's double-date with destiny
as she cuts away incessantly,
removing the skin from his face.
A single mistake and everything had been wasted.
Time pitted against them.
The scissors are shaking.
Her fingers are flailing in the crass light of the moon.
Wild-eyed she resumes her maniacal operation.
Trying her concentration
and violent loss of patience as she slices in two.
The silence consumes her as she works tirelessly through
the night to remove the former face of the man.
Placing her hands at his forehead before gently scraping them back.
Her fingers prise it away from his scalp in a single try.
Misty-eyed she lifts the prize to her lips.
Driving a kiss into the facial mask comprised from his skin.
She tastes the iron within every drop of his blood.
The top of her tongue displaying blotches that run
as she's lost in the lust of finally having somebody to love.
"You might not be the one that I want," she quaffs in between
stopping to breathe a sigh "...but you're the one that I need."
She left the body to bleed.
Cold and lifeless over night without a second thought.
She heads indoors with the flesh she's forged from the dishevelled corpse.
Careful to stretch it taut so it keeps elasticity.
She needs that affinity.
It's key to her misery's end and she feels he's the missing piece.
A living being may have intervened to spill the beans.
Dead liars kept quiet.
That's why she killed in secret.
The jilted seamstress had nobody to build her dream with
instead the killer reasoned on decapitating a million pieces to literally build her dream with.
A sense of deep fulfilment awed her from fulfilling her prospect.
The thrill of accomplishment weighing heavier on her heart
than his death ever will on her conscience.


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Old 08-27-2015, 11:59 PM   #2
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