06-15-2015, 11:51 AM | #1 |
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Coming to terms
the poltergeist of quarter-life crises washed ashore tonight
searching for quarter, life, a coroner, sight, and other mortal blights rearview recorder psychic, a moralizing hoarder of "I wish" morbid magi of peripheral sleight - fortified as my cornea's pilot he scythes,writhing into my mind - his unmooring asylum lording the lines blinding my cortex from its hippocampus - his grip is tantric - bordering tyrant. holding me tight I listen in panic As He whispers me a melody: a prisoners anthem "Kid, understand your glistening plans for the future are sinking in quickening sand, Give into demands, get your hands on some lucre, crash then maneuver permission to land." He finished and vanished, residual shadows still ringing in echoes To cling or to let go? The epitaph of my past Memories sting till they get cold The final laps of my lapse To be forgetful - on purpose Forget what piety has purchased And refunded, a merchant's Only good as his ending budget So fuck it Sometimes I get racked with nostalgia - paralysis Anxiety from tryin to see if the past exists - In the present moment, I've never spoken truer thoughts than to say I'm destined to be broken I'll never be as open as this, a ghost that persists to live Can I have some validation? Can I get some witnesses? The veneer of my experiences is golden, a worthy crown That shines bright enough to show the wrinkles forming from my furrowed-brow To turn around or burn it down - another potential eulogy I used to be half the man I wished I was, now I wish I was half the man I used to be It's foolery, I know. I've traded callowness for callouses Hallowed rest for hollowness; what happened to my palaces? (For the love of god don't mention happiness) In my analysis: The past exists. I hold it in focus till it's real to me in doing so I block out everything in immediacy to live there just a little more, feel the wilderness of hope and excitement - And fear. The moments I felt closest to life when My reflection beamed so bright it eclipsed any cynicism The adolescent confidence that birthed electricity from indecision I wanna go back, please let me go back, to when the winds and the waves were the soundness in my sleep. Before I felt the weight of the ground beneath my feet
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06-15-2015, 04:27 PM | #2 |
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don't really gotta say much.
(For the love of god don't mention happiness) subject matter aside, i feel like that line was the icing on the cake. great lyrics. |
06-18-2015, 12:52 AM | #3 |
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Oats! Good shit bruh its been a long time since I've seen you drop in here
its always nice to see some of the older heads drop in here. What can I really say though. your skill is based on the structure mostly the rhymes connect in the right places and you present some nice imagery breh Either way this is pretty dope man. keep dropping I feed off this kind of stuff nice use of 'paralysis' too...yea...thats dope
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06-25-2015, 03:32 AM | #4 |
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appreciate it, both of you. had a crazy busy week, but I'll return some feed soon. hit me with a link in particular if you'd like
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07-02-2015, 03:26 PM | #5 |
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no need to thank me....let's hope this helps on your views breh
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07-09-2015, 10:58 AM | #6 |
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here's another bump...
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