War.

Clayray · 01-28-2014, 05:26 PM

The Art of War
A carnivores repertoire
The battle cry, a yearn for more
Rattled lives, families torn..
..But I love it so much
Bloodlust makes me cold to touch
Hold no trust as I clutch a grudge
My sword won't budge. A infinite instrument.
Intricate penmanship shows ignorant diligence
Belligerent misfit with a knack for killing shit
Imminent vigilant.. Creep in the night shade
My knife slittin your throat till your light fades
Last seconds as he searching for the right aide
No savior not your friendly "hi neighbor!"
There's a certain taste to killin & i like the flavor

Quick little something. Wanting to expand but I seem to have hit a wall.

Concrete · 01-29-2014, 06:49 AM

First 3 bars are fresh, "clutch a grudge" sounds a bit forced.

This following set was quite aight imo

A infinite instrument.
Intricate penmanship shows ignorant diligence
Belligerent misfit with a knack for killing shit
Imminent vigilant.. Creep in the night shade
My knife slittin your throat till your light fades

Overall a bit short but nice lil read.

01-28-2014, 05:26 PM	#1
Clayray 6ft of Seperation Join Date: Aug 2010 Posts: 1,541 Battle Record: 3-5 Champed - Faggot of the Year (2015) Rep Power: 0	War. The Art of War A carnivores repertoire The battle cry, a yearn for more Rattled lives, families torn.. ..But I love it so much Bloodlust makes me cold to touch Hold no trust as I clutch a grudge My sword won't budge. A infinite instrument. Intricate penmanship shows ignorant diligence Belligerent misfit with a knack for killing shit Imminent vigilant.. Creep in the night shade My knife slittin your throat till your light fades Last seconds as he searching for the right aide No savior not your friendly "hi neighbor!" There's a certain taste to killin & i like the flavor Quick little something. Wanting to expand but I seem to have hit a wall. __________________ GraveyardShift Last edited by Clayray; 01-28-2014 at 08:13 PM.

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01-29-2014, 06:49 AM	#2
Concrete Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2013 Location: Oslo Posts: 179 Battle Record: 5-0 Rep Power: 2158974	First 3 bars are fresh, "clutch a grudge" sounds a bit forced. This following set was quite aight imo A infinite instrument. Intricate penmanship shows ignorant diligence Belligerent misfit with a knack for killing shit Imminent vigilant.. Creep in the night shade My knife slittin your throat till your light fades Overall a bit short but nice lil read.