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Old 03-26-2013, 12:57 AM   #1
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Old 03-26-2013, 01:00 AM   #2
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you're probably the best writer on this site.

your writing personality leaves a fuckton to be desired, though.
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Old 03-26-2013, 01:02 AM   #3
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What you say rings true...

am I too emotionless?
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Quote:
"I see Lazarus baring his teeth in a palace disparaged, collapsed in the barracks
While progressing your interesting train of thought through this portion of the verse, this line, in the midst of it, was a very suiting moment of imagery

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Keep your top hats on, my brothers from a number of troubling tribes
Please take your prayer beads out and raise 'em up to the discomforting sky
My point to make is that the age of accountability doesn’t apply;
if we don’t live in an age of accountability, but that‘s the crux of this lie.
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The first steps that they take…stamping on the human face forever, in baby shoes.
Interesting extending metaphor. Lines like these really made this an enjoyable piece.
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