Time thief

Gina · 07-13-2015, 09:58 AM

The day was as cloudy, as my judgment. The only condensation coming from my pores. Cold heart, smoldering veins. Wanting nothing more, than to pack up my years, and be here no more. Sneak off with my stolen time like an heirloom watch. I inherited these wounds, when your heart wouldn't tick to my rhythm.. Buried in your plot to turn me to ashes. Absent me from matter. Unwind me before you stop.

In love since, my heart was as rowdy, as the loveless. Questioned intentions, leave lingering sentiments in your passing mist so thick it makes me choke on your presence. Trying to purge this unpleasant essence from the depth of me. But, no way to rebuke my inner demons without evicting the rest of me. So the best of me sits in purgatory haunted by my flaws. No hope for escape when, my guilt is down for the cause.
Touchless friction. Tensions rising, blood be boiling, yet love, love be missing. Not seeing the bigger picture, much less my vision. Unrest. Division. My chest is giving, caving. Restless mission, impossible to continue its beating. Beginning, unfolding, retreating. Ending, in senseless collision.
Hate is finding cracks and breaks to squeeze into the empty shell of our passion. Not particular to what you put into it, passion just wants to be filled. Made to feel real. This gloveless fitting. Patiently gripping this watery substance we are ground into. Love's recoiling, unforgiving? We must...might just be trippin.

sral · 07-13-2015, 10:13 AM

that you, Nane? @Gina

Gina · 07-13-2015, 11:20 AM

Oh lawd. I certainly hope I don't have to endure another welcoming committee. :(

Ghost1 · 07-13-2015, 01:05 PM

Tits or gtfo

Geno · 07-16-2015, 08:11 PM

Lol. Dont listen to them. Keep posting

Witty · 07-16-2015, 08:40 PM

I enjoyed this a lot.

That's all I have to say.

It was honestly very good.

I would leave some constructive feedback but it's almost 2am and i don't wanna.

I really enjoyed the read tho.

Inno · 07-17-2015, 08:42 PM

Fucking savages.

Leep posting brah

big baby · 07-18-2015, 03:02 PM

r u gorl

Gina · 07-18-2015, 09:38 PM

I don't know what a girl is, but I am female, a woman, if that's what you mean.

BROKE LESNAR · 07-18-2015, 11:18 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Bags

Tits or gtfo

lmaoooo

Pharaohs Army · 07-20-2015, 03:38 AM

i laughed at most of the gender-related comments. that being said, this is well done. impressive sentence structure and syllables.
you personalized it. in my humble opinion, as cool as it is, the "mus-b-trippin"..i like the ending from a rhyme perspective,but i was expecting something more spectacular or descriptive based on what you had written previously up to that point.

big baby · 07-20-2015, 05:04 PM

sucked thx

07-13-2015, 09:58 AM	#1
Gina Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 129 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Time thief The day was as cloudy, as my judgment. The only condensation coming from my pores. Cold heart, smoldering veins. Wanting nothing more, than to pack up my years, and be here no more. Sneak off with my stolen time like an heirloom watch. I inherited these wounds, when your heart wouldn't tick to my rhythm.. Buried in your plot to turn me to ashes. Absent me from matter. Unwind me before you stop. In love since, my heart was as rowdy, as the loveless. Questioned intentions, leave lingering sentiments in your passing mist so thick it makes me choke on your presence. Trying to purge this unpleasant essence from the depth of me. But, no way to rebuke my inner demons without evicting the rest of me. So the best of me sits in purgatory haunted by my flaws. No hope for escape when, my guilt is down for the cause. Touchless friction. Tensions rising, blood be boiling, yet love, love be missing. Not seeing the bigger picture, much less my vision. Unrest. Division. My chest is giving, caving. Restless mission, impossible to continue its beating. Beginning, unfolding, retreating. Ending, in senseless collision. Hate is finding cracks and breaks to squeeze into the empty shell of our passion. Not particular to what you put into it, passion just wants to be filled. Made to feel real. This gloveless fitting. Patiently gripping this watery substance we are ground into. Love's recoiling, unforgiving? We must...might just be trippin.

07-13-2015, 10:13 AM	#2
sral Shrewd as evearthed Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: Wolverhampton, England Posts: 8,255 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899391	that you, Nane? @Gina __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

07-16-2015, 08:11 PM	#5
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Lol. Dont listen to them. Keep posting __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

07-16-2015, 08:40 PM	#6
Witty Lime Life Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 16,794 Battle Record: 30-41 Accomplishments - Only Slightly Retarded Champed - Lyric Olympics - Summer Classic Rep Power: 82986458	I enjoyed this a lot. That's all I have to say. It was honestly very good. I would leave some constructive feedback but it's almost 2am and i don't wanna. I really enjoyed the read tho. __________________ He listens to voices inside of his mind Explicit and poisonous violent crime.

07-13-2015, 11:20 AM	#3
Gina Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 129 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	Oh lawd. I certainly hope I don't have to endure another welcoming committee. :(

07-17-2015, 08:42 PM	#7
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,005 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899400	Fucking savages. Leep posting brah

07-18-2015, 09:38 PM	#9
Gina Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2015 Posts: 129 Battle Record: 0-1 Rep Power: 0	I don't know what a girl is, but I am female, a woman, if that's what you mean.

07-20-2015, 03:38 AM	#11
Pharaohs Army Banned Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 2,962 Battle Record: 6 - 14 Rep Power: 0	i laughed at most of the gender-related comments. that being said, this is well done. impressive sentence structure and syllables. you personalized it. in my humble opinion, as cool as it is, the "mus-b-trippin"..i like the ending from a rhyme perspective,but i was expecting something more spectacular or descriptive based on what you had written previously up to that point.