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Old 03-11-2013, 07:56 PM   #1
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Hey just something thrown together, I needed a little feed back from people who actually write since I don't get that much around here. Probably not alot of your guys style, But this isn't the only stuff I write, It's unfinished but yeah. Feed back would be much appreciated, thank-you all! :D

I'm dreamin my destiny, An it has got the best of me
Feelings like ecstasy, Get stressed knowin' it can be
Fuck the distance, Feelings so real no time to miss it
Gettin messages so consistent, Waitin for us just to admit it
Than I dream!, Cause the time there usually ends up going quicker
Instantly slowing in our prime when I get the chance to get her
I know I ain't the best with my words but ya've got my heart flowin
Every step I take towards ya, it feels like Christmas but it ain't snowin
Feels like love at first sight, So I'm gonna show you
Cause these guys lining up but I'mma break through!
Never had butterflies gettin' so swirled in my stomach
These ain't some busterlies, Bitin my lip to say some of it
Havin you is Glamour, Was frustrated but ya've taken away my anger
The beginning of my New Year, An I just flipped the chapter

Feelings feeling so real, An all I can hope she feels the same way
Cause man, this girls flowin through my thoughts like songs on replay
So ya messages becomin my weakness, Clickin em open, havin me speechless
But that ain't no secret, An I cant get ya off my mind even when Im sleepless
Just so you know that doesn't bother me, Moods Up, Even my mother can see
An she'd agree, That the happiness can't stop flowin through her baby D
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