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Old 09-09-2018, 06:48 PM   #1
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couches and coke. shower and soap. music and speech
living in history i've been doomed to repeat
behavior stays cyclical, for humans we are
2-fold between your attitude / who's at the bar
stupid as art in theory, keep my eulogy brief
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every moment you're talking i'm going fucking insane
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many years past i left myself on the road
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Old 09-10-2018, 10:45 PM   #2
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Old 09-11-2018, 04:03 PM   #4
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stupid as art in theory, keep my eulogy brief
i've built palaces and turned them into ruins in weeks
booze in his sheets, poolside suite, puking relief
ginger ale and Tullamore the new aperitif


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Old 09-21-2018, 12:35 PM   #5
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Loved this. Read it twice.

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streetlight sycophantom, interactions often are strange
every moment you're talking i'm going fucking insane
dial back a bit, allow parameter change
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vomit out a person that survives this entanglement

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Old 09-24-2018, 12:45 AM   #6
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I thought this was a good read. Everything syncopated correctly, with synchronicity and proficiency. It had had good-vivid imagery, with good metaphors and similes. I enjoyed the good flow and rhyme scheme. Felt natural and well-put. I don't really see anything wrong with this piece. It's quite good, and established. This was a nice written, keep writing.

I enjoyed this piece of writing very much. When you can, may you leave feedback on 'Solemn Sun' it would be greatly appreciated. You're a gifted writer. Thank you, Dead Man.
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Old 09-24-2018, 12:47 AM   #7
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but was t good and did u like it
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 09-25-2018, 04:17 AM   #8
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Safe behind his clever ways of turning a phase

That was such a neatly placed line, everything rolled smoothly like usual. Always an interesting read, your shit
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Old 10-21-2018, 09:04 AM   #9
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Really enjoyed this one. Butter flow. Will run thru it again shortly
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