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Old 07-18-2013, 08:18 PM   #1
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Old 07-18-2013, 08:33 PM   #2
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Earth shakes to the core, mountains topple in fear.
Oceans boil as asteroids rain from the atmosphere.
A thousand years have passed, God's law is stowed.
The black sea dry's, Satan... arise from bellow.
Turmoil and panic, death blows from granite.
The soil we stand on has vanished, martial law disbanded.
Live branded, or die tortured by the hands of the beast.
The weak parish, slowly, breath recedes from the sheath.

Mount olives brought forth the end that we asked for.
Lucifer's home, Earth his throne, as he's laughing the last word.
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Old 07-18-2013, 08:36 PM   #3
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Track you in this darkness. With a buzzing laser. Sparking violet grids
A frozen chamber; dozen dangers. Pompous psychic kid.
Doppler radar. tracking your Doppelgänger. it doesn't take a rocket scientist
The homing beacon, glowing in a billion golden pieces.
Seeking to implode once reaching. Fill you. With such corrosive features.
Take refuge in Agartha. Cause honestly. You'd hardly escape the wind
In your bedroom. In a mosque with Arabians. Followed. embraced by it.
The stalker. Deranged. In mask, and at nightime. Hear the sound of your name
In the farthest parts of your brain. A holler. It's rage. You can call it insane.
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Old 07-18-2013, 08:38 PM   #4
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Darth yoda you really proving ya value man seriously fucking dope writing

Adonis clean and crisp as always with the emotion being key and content just prospers

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worrrdddd, ill battle

adonis had the cool flip on satan coming forth, which by round one you can all tell i love that type of shit.

but i feel like darth came out fucking nasty in this with the inner turmoil flip and the style he used was nuts. straight dope verse darth

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dope battle, got yoda here
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Liked his approach better
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adonis. better imagery to me. yoda's was hard to follow
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v/ Adonny

since it's round two I shall explain voting

A came with a vivid count of Revelations 12, and a fluid 10 lines that all were unity with one another, maximizing her limits...good imagery, nice pace and some food for thought. Enjoyed reading...

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I like the dark, almost murder-ball sport you gave us...the violet grids with the laser slice imagery...representing the homing beacon....I was jarred a bit when you started to through in specific references like Agartha, Arabians, the bed room, the mask and the night time sounds of the brain insanity....the time space and how why this all went down was blurred and was not too sure why this was happening...like trying to watch a movie 1/3 of the way done...
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