Sour Joog vs Letterman - JOOG WINS

Orc · 01-15-2018, 02:15 PM

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Due Dates:

Verses are due Thursday Jan 4th and will be open until Sunday.
Battles that lack votes may close later.
One sided battles may get closed early.
Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.

Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE!

Letterman · 01-16-2018, 12:33 AM

Lol you’re not the real Joog/Sour Cig. Who are you?

Enbombz · 01-16-2018, 10:38 AM

No, I am sour joog.

Enbombz · 01-17-2018, 05:51 PM

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge

Letterman · 01-19-2018, 12:29 AM

I need the ext if it’s cool

Enbombz · 01-19-2018, 10:38 AM

Hurry da fuck up then.

For Battling · 01-19-2018, 09:52 PM

@Letterman you have until midnight pst

King Karaoke · 01-20-2018, 08:36 AM

Hi...

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
this has probably been done before but i still liked it...
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
dope...
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
not bad...
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
this was cool but couldve been worded better...
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
This was another cool line that couldve had more sting...
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
Nah stop forcing the wordplay...
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge
this was kinda weak...

This was a good verse which probably wouldve won...
All your wordplays have to work both ways tho...
I like Letterman so I wouldve loved to see this battle...

Bye...

Pinot Grij · 01-20-2018, 09:55 AM

Seems like some stretched wp -- some that worked, some that didn't

Bulimia line is pretty dope cuz I've never seen it before -- but I thought the dialysis and accordion shit was too much of a stretch, even though the 'squeeze' and 'change that tune' connected, I guess you just need to reword it.

I wish Letterman showed -- look forward to reading what you got next week.

For Battling · 01-20-2018, 12:29 PM

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
pretty cool
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
alright
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
too generic
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
bulimia bit forced but the bar was cool overall
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
decent
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
alright
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge
alright not bad

Flow · 01-20-2018, 03:17 PM

Legit that orc scraping line was used last week i am sure.also whilst i liked the wording the star wars bar ive seen recently. Bulemia line was sick, i put creativity over forced sometimes its gotta be done an this was one of those times. Rest was solid. Nice work

Schadenfreude · 01-20-2018, 04:05 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Sour joog

You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave
Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days
Seems familiar, plus you could've said bodily fluids instead of just blood
This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact
Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add
I have no idea who Gill is..lol, but this is nice regardless
Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don
This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from
DOPE
Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown
I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground
Forced wp
I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick
The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit
Clever
Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude
If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune
Maybe if his name start w/ D - 'accord D an idiot'
You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished
Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge
Personal, but super light

Overall good verse, no major problems.

01-15-2018, 02:15 PM	#1
Orc Certified Mother’s Boy Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 5,165 Battle Record: 5-1 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - NBL Season 4 - GBL Season 1 - Lyric Olympics - Fight Night LXVI - Fight Night LX - Fight Night (3x) - NBL Picture Roast - Netcees Battle League (8x) - NBL Picture League - Gimmick Battle League - BA Tag Team - 1-2 Punch League - NBL Cypher (3x) - Battle Arena League - OM HOF (2x) Rep Power: 85899390	Sour Joog vs Letterman - JOOG WINS Rules Due Dates: Verses are due Thursday Jan 4th and will be open until Sunday. Battles that lack votes may close later. One sided battles may get closed early. Extensions are 24 hours Line Limit: Minimum of 8, maximum of 16 If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first. Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE!

01-20-2018, 08:36 AM	#8
King Karaoke Stackin' wins... Join Date: Mar 2013 Posts: 1,515 Battle Record: 61-20 Accomplishments - 50 Wins Champed - Survivor Tournament - Netcees Battle League (6x) - Netcees Gimmick Tournament Rep Power: 10353693	Hi... You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days this has probably been done before but i still liked it... This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add dope... Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from not bad... Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground this was cool but couldve been worded better... I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit This was another cool line that couldve had more sting... Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune Nah stop forcing the wordplay... You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge this was kinda weak... This was a good verse which probably wouldve won... All your wordplays have to work both ways tho... I like Letterman so I wouldve loved to see this battle... Bye... __________________ the Outsiders Orc \| ill nik-A \| Sn00p \| King Karaoke

01-20-2018, 09:55 AM	#9
Pinot Grij Senior Member Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 863 Battle Record: 23-19 Accomplishments - OM HOF Champed - Fight Night 2 - Write Week V - Netcees Battle League (2x) - Winter Topical II - 1-2 Punch league Rep Power: 29195060	Seems like some stretched wp -- some that worked, some that didn't Bulimia line is pretty dope cuz I've never seen it before -- but I thought the dialysis and accordion shit was too much of a stretch, even though the 'squeeze' and 'change that tune' connected, I guess you just need to reword it. I wish Letterman showed -- look forward to reading what you got next week. __________________ Topical C.R.E.A.M.

01-16-2018, 12:33 AM	#2
Letterman Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 344 Battle Record: 15-11 Rep Power: 374701	Lol you’re not the real Joog/Sour Cig. Who are you?

01-16-2018, 10:38 AM	#3
Enbombz Not Joog Join Date: Nov 2016 Posts: 769 Battle Record: 9-5 Rep Power: 5907769	No, I am sour joog.

01-17-2018, 05:51 PM	#4
Enbombz Not Joog Join Date: Nov 2016 Posts: 769 Battle Record: 9-5 Rep Power: 5907769	You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge

01-19-2018, 12:29 AM	#5
Letterman Senior Member Join Date: Aug 2014 Posts: 344 Battle Record: 15-11 Rep Power: 374701	I need the ext if it’s cool

01-19-2018, 10:38 AM	#6
Enbombz Not Joog Join Date: Nov 2016 Posts: 769 Battle Record: 9-5 Rep Power: 5907769	Hurry da fuck up then.

01-19-2018, 09:52 PM	#7
For Battling Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2017 Posts: 3,986 Battle Record: 11-6 Rep Power: 5633912	@Letterman you have until midnight pst

01-20-2018, 12:29 PM	#10
For Battling Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2017 Posts: 3,986 Battle Record: 11-6 Rep Power: 5633912	You cookin flames? nah that stuff you say just dug ya grave Since you wanna dialysis.. I'll be cleaning up that blood for days pretty cool This ain't rb you ain't shit here, nothing changed it still remains a fact Remember 'gainst Gillette, the man put the blade to ya face like a shaving add alright Gun in ya face, u aint even worthy to face the don This Boy at the bottom of the barrel..same place Orc scraped him from too generic Dude ain't got the appetite for this, he act up i'm cutting this clown I take him trying to bulimia's a joke, that ends with his guts on the ground bulimia bit forced but the bar was cool overall I was bread for this, one punch this mans deaded quick The force'll project that body so far it trashes that last Jedi shit decent Finger on the trigger, shit it's a breeze to take this dude If he here off his own accordion idiot, one squeeze will change that tune alright You used to pack some weight, now you look down trodden and famished Back then you used to throw down, this gauntlet don't even offer a challenge alright not bad

01-20-2018, 03:17 PM	#11
Flow Upset Champion Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: West Mids Posts: 3,861 Battle Record: 57-49 Accomplishments - 50 Wins Champed - BA Rookie Tourney - 1-2 Punch League (x2) - Pandemonium Cypher - 1-2 Punch league Season 9 Rep Power: 24894578	Legit that orc scraping line was used last week i am sure.also whilst i liked the wording the star wars bar ive seen recently. Bulemia line was sick, i put creativity over forced sometimes its gotta be done an this was one of those times. Rest was solid. Nice work