BROKE LESNAR vs Defiant - Broke Wins

[Orc]

Rules

Due Dates:

• Verses are due Thursday Jan 4th and will be open until Sunday.
• Battles that lack votes may close later.
• One sided battles may get closed early.
• Extensions are 24 hours

Line Limit:

• Minimum of 8, maximum of 16
• If not agreed upon, second drop must match length of the first.

Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ

FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE!

[BROKE LESNAR]

Wtf @Orc.

Going 12.

[Defiant]

Gonna need that ext 2,

[BROKE LESNAR]

Originally Posted by my feedback for his battle a few weeks ago

back to basics forcefully..... today is the date your behind
punch so many brain cells outta u, u can call it a great weight off your mind

nah

involved in so many bitch fights, no fool will ever quote ya
there's so many tears when the purse split.....hed be a terrible boxing promoter

nah

Ya girls gives head to 10s at a time, when u arrive u hit
Such a line up for a turn a DMVs, it resembles gettin a driver's permit

cool

Ya sexuality is questionable....i can see it in ya fuckin face G
When the only thing a date with Tony awards.....is a night with Kevin Spacey

nah

Checked ya audios out, n there's no money from the start B
even said theyd be 'free for all' n just got muted from a call of duty party

cool

i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood
#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack
cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense
it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u
seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen
want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant

[Defiant]

He's gotta pay to get laid, always been trouble without doubt
Got a sex life like a darts match....even with the hookers he needs double to check out
Ya girls known as a slut, there's no foreplay or chase
Ya boys are so quick to tag in each other, they call it a relay race
Avoids the top 25, battling the wack heads for all the duration
He's only known to rape an extra on site, he's like a Steven seagal allegation
Dudes a terrible mod, beat a nobody with his past rhyme
Your comeback will only last a week, which is the same time you killed the NBL last time
Plus he's killing RB, boring everyone with the lyrics he'll find and dispatch
He didn't just put the nail in the coffin over there, he wrote 30 lines in that final match
Oh that site battle u ran.... a disaster with the crowd that knew
I'm not just saying you're a cancer to these sites, I'm saying Dia would be proud of u

[Basic M]

Broke was consistent. Style can get predictable from time to time but it works. The 1st 2 bars were my fav. Defiant wasnt good. Wording was awful. I dont think he tried. Verse seemed as if he just threw some shot together. He's dropped better.

Winner/Broke

[Saint]

Defiant didnt like the wording here, read sloppy at times.
But you were rushed, so ok.
relay race- aight
personals were aighh

Broke- cool verse, smoother and wp was creative.
some of the terminology is different/left field,
sometimes can be a lil formulaic.
but ran some where, flapdoodle, star was not bad.

vote Broke

[Profit]

i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood

Crazy wp, awkward usage of words tho

#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack

Ok


cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense

Ok

it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u

Lol! Assuming aero is starfaggot? Cool shit

seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen

Nice

want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant

Ok



He's gotta pay to get laid, always been trouble without doubt
Got a sex life like a darts match....even with the hookers he needs double to check out

Ok

Ya girls known as a slut, there's no foreplay or chase
Ya boys are so quick to tag in each other, they call it a relay race

Ehh


Avoids the top 25, battling the wack heads for all the duration
He's only known to rape an extra on site, he's like a Steven seagal allegation

Ooooook

Dudes a terrible mod, beat a nobody with his past rhyme
Your comeback will only last a week, which is the same time you killed the NBL last time

Ehhh

Plus he's killing RB, boring everyone with the lyrics he'll find and dispatch
He didn't just put the nail in the coffin over there, he wrote 30 lines in that final match

Ehh, coulda made this hot

Oh that site battle u ran.... a disaster with the crowd that knew
I'm not just saying you're a cancer to these sites, I'm saying Dia would be proud of u

Ehh


Broke landed heavier shit here.. like deviants personal approach just thought u needed better execution.. broken wp's crazy just feel his verse could use a little more variety but still nice shit.. vote broke

[Clout]

i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood

nice

#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack

Eh kind of a corny joke here bud.

cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his
nonsense

Ok

it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u

nice

seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen


ehh throats peen isn't really a harsh way to end a punch.

want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant

Nah pipe dream/mario is a old played concept man.




He's gotta pay to get laid, always been trouble without doubt
Got a sex life like a darts match....even with the hookers he needs double to check out

Aight

Ya girls known as a slut, there's no foreplay or chase
Ya boys are so quick to tag in each other, they call it a relay race

Ok

Avoids the top 25, battling the wack heads for all the duration
He's only known to rape an extra on site, he's like a Steven seagal allegation


Ehhhh


Dudes a terrible mod, beat a nobody with his past rhyme
Your comeback will only last a week, which is the same time you killed the NBL last time

Don't like the wording here.

Plus he's killing RB, boring everyone with the lyrics he'll find and dispatch
He didn't just put the nail in the coffin over there, he wrote 30 lines in that final match

im 1-0 against broke lesnar he ain't kill nothing =). Yea was a bit lengthy but you're not really dissing him that badly here. Nothing really scathing about this punch more so a statement.

Oh that site battle u ran.... a disaster with the crowd that knew
I'm not just saying you're a cancer to these sites, I'm saying Dia would be proud of u

Ok


I got lesnar here, he had more Oomph to his lands and less misses. He just can be a bit soft on his punches but clever with wording. Which will cost him vs the Vets on this site. Who are just as if not more clever yet pack the harshness he lacks.


good job both!

[For Battling]

i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood
ok
#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack
pretty cool
cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense
nah this was forced
it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u
lmao nice
seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen
ehh
want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant
played

Nausea, ransomware & starfaggot

Vs



Join Date: Jan 2013
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Battle Record: 28-39


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whatever
He's gotta pay to get laid, always been trouble without doubt
Got a sex life like a darts match....even with the hookers he needs double to check out
decent
Ya girls known as a slut, there's no foreplay or chase
Ya boys are so quick to tag in each other, they call it a relay race
decent/borderline ok
Avoids the top 25, battling the wack heads for all the duration
He's only known to rape an extra on site, he's like a Steven seagal allegation
creative concept but could have been done better. Decent at best
Dudes a terrible mod, beat a nobody with his past rhyme
Your comeback will only last a week, which is the same time you killed the NBL last time
good personal
Plus he's killing RB, boring everyone with the lyrics he'll find and dispatch
He didn't just put the nail in the coffin over there, he wrote 30 lines in that final match
nah
Oh that site battle u ran.... a disaster with the crowd that knew
I'm not just saying you're a cancer to these sites, I'm saying Dia would be proud of u
didnt like this either

kill nbl, relay race barely


I got broke here

Vote Broke

[Letterman]

#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack
cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense
it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u

Vs

nothing really hit to me.

I’ve seen much better from def, he didn’t bring it this week. Broke got this clear

v/Broke

[WRATH]

Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood

Okay

#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack

Solid

cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense

Okay

it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u

Lol okay

seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen

Okay

want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant

Ok

He's gotta pay to get laid, always been trouble without doubt
Got a sex life like a darts match....even with the hookers he needs double to check outfat wife

Heh

Ya girls known as a slut, there's no foreplay or chasefat wife
Ya boys are so quick to tag in each other, they call it a relay racefat wife

Missed this it was a good concept

Avoids the top 25, battling the wack heads for all the durationfat wife
He's only known to rape an extra on site, he's like a Steven seagal allegation

Okay

Dudes a terrible mod, beat a nobody with his past rhymefat wife
Your comeback will only last a week, which is the same time you killed the NBL last time

Lol okay

Plus he's killing RB, boring everyone with the lyrics he'll find and dispatch
He didn't just put the nail in the coffin over there, he wrote 30 lines in that final match

Lol

Oh that site battle u ran.... a disaster with the crowd that knew
I'm not just saying you're a cancer to these sites, I'm saying Dia would be proud of u

Okay



V broke

[Diablo]

Originally Posted by BROKE LESNAR

i bet he mad @ my vote still, boy sketch as a fluke dub
he earned them nausea slouch at text, i'll work this retch til he puke blood
#truth: ain't nobody fond of u, fact is u viewed as wack
should of ransomware far away worm, u been confirmed as a stupid hack
cool brought a maggie along, pop when this don vents
if the loser gums flapdoodle get slain, the .357 put a stop to his nonsense
it's dumb to get extra w/ me, rave n get clowned a few
ur personals aren't worth a starfaggot, even if aero gave that account to u
seen the queer dickride vets, pleasure the goats mean
he probably got a diphtheria bout that...acts up whenever he throats peen
want to champ the nbl huh?, i'll fall what ur llama can't
up the chopper to end ur pipe dreams, the mario bros. call it pirahna plant

LOL @ nausea slouch, that didn't work for me tbh, too far a stretch even though i see what you were doing with it. Ransomware was dope to me though, and fresh, don't think I've seen that done. Flapdoodle again was kind of original to me BUT I didn't feel like the line really had enough impact to really sting as it landed, it could have been harsher. StarFaggot was an okay personal with wordplay but again it could have been worded to hit harder. I didn't feel the diphtheria line but the closer was cool. I think when your wordplay is on, it's ON but other times it can also work against you man and this verse has highs and lows where that happens at diff points. It's a solid verse, just maybe a little inconsistent in terms of wording to really damage your opponent and fuck them up lol

Defiant: I thought the darts match line was cool and funny, I wasn't so keen on relay race as again I like harsh sounding punches that seem to destroy the opponent. To be honest I wasn't feeling a great deal from the rest of your verse, I understand they're personal punches and whatnot but they're very statementish with no real sting to them, you know? The nail in the coffin/30 line finals was a bit of clowning but it needed more from you and it just kind of tailed off toward the end for me here. Broke got it on consistency.

[BROKE LESNAR]

Broke wins 8-0