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Old 03-06-2019, 06:22 AM   #1
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Exclamation ADONIS vs MASTER ROCK

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Old 03-07-2019, 06:51 PM   #2
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Check kiddo.

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Old 03-07-2019, 06:58 PM   #3
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How many lines you want to do?....since you know I'll push it to the limit every time.
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Old 03-07-2019, 11:05 PM   #4
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Memory banks are priceless, like watching film of our lives
From connections to fights, both are simple and right
Correcting anger with wanderlust, breaking frames resting under us
We could argue and fuck, or fucking argue and pummel fuck
Lovingly hate, steady pounding away
What happened to days where we’d rattle the cage
Kick up dust bending corners on Diamond Backs of our ways
Creating tracks where each path gained the traction to mate
Junior high built foundation, high school was the roof
The in-between was a dream we constructed and mused
Kids were abrupt but its cool, cause our love was a fuse
The ignition was livin’, each reel; what a view
They watched us wither away, each wrinkle a story
We’d fold our love in a capsule and mingle if boring
We’d travel through time, reminisce and adore being
Just two peas in a pod, wrapped in a gift of two courting
True love is of grief, cause I wore my heart on my sleeve
Then one day I awoke, and you let my dial tone beep
I was sad for a second, then I remembered each crease
We built this fire together, and each seed produced seeds
I’d drop a tear filled with joy, but if I’m honest I’d weep
Until the next time we meet, know each day is a week
I love you Esther, new flowers nightly,
Just please, keep…Resting in Peace

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Old 03-12-2019, 07:42 PM   #5
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Master req. Ext until Saturday, I'm fine with it if king Lars is
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Old 03-16-2019, 11:55 PM   #6
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the weight of the world is on my shoulders
in tears, I just can't believe that its actually over
lost in the deepness of shadows as the cold grows over
skys grey...and so is this day
time flies as well as your spirit has passed away
I'm in disbelief of the present this day
yet I feel that I had so much left to say
I swore I could of seen your shadow in the door way
I got up and I really didn't know what to say
but tell me really what is left to say?...
yet it trying make sense if this is how it needs to play
out I'm searching for anwsers to figure this out
pointing fingers on who's to blame
pass the numbness and the pain
someone has got to pay
was there any foul play?
In their last breath what did they say?
I'm at the end of my rope
how do I climb? when all is gone as well as my hope
for you brought me through difficult times
its too much to bear
every time I think of you my heart just tears
apart your still in my dreams
I attempt to make sense of what it all means
the chapter ends leaving me hanging on that scene
This is how it should be
your breaths gone away rest in piece
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Old 03-18-2019, 07:37 PM   #7
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adonis:
very poetically driven with high emotion.. def digging the rhyme structure as well, it unfolded with a heart beat type pulse.. the vocab was strong and well used.. the topic play on it was on point and all in all a dope verse..

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was cool, i slightly smaller made to seem stretched verse when compared against adonis but cool none the less.. story wise it had alot more action in direction but was failing on the description, though dont get me wrong it was choc full of it.. vocab was nice and delivery was on point..good drop

vote= adonis

just a more compact verse imo, good battle guys and g/l
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