01-09-2014, 07:54 PM | #1 |
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It's been awhile
just a few quick lines.. it's been like a year atleast
I haven't forgot how to write, My words echo louder than 1000 Mic's, I'm not crazy because God spoke to me, WZA and Hip Hop meant to be together like Hov & B, Up and down, like the sun than thunder clouds, But now I never frown, buzzed off life like i'm a dozen down, See i'm cold as being frost bit, keep most emotions locked in a closet, Reap what I sow because motion leads to the causes, My pride's a black fist, And i'm the first to admit that personality overrides attractiveness, There's good in bad, people always asking why I look so mad, When really i'm happy? Maybe dig into the book for facts, Always think before you speak, I'm using pencil before ink when it comes to looseleaf, Just turned 24, hoping for many more, So i'll say peace like the Middle East forgetting war, |
01-09-2014, 09:53 PM | #2 |
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Reap what I sow because motion leads to the causes,
My pride's a black fist, And i'm the first to admit that personality overrides attractiveness, There's good in bad, people always asking why I look so mad, When really i'm happy? Maybe dig into the book for facts, ^^Cool. Nice little flex to shake some of the rust off man...didn't really like the way you ended things and that frost bit line is played at best but the rest was decent, thought how you opened things up and what I quoted were your sweetest sections...I'll be on the look out for more of your shit bro. Stay uppity. |
01-09-2014, 10:02 PM | #3 |
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Good stuff WZA nice multiple rhymes (Enigma is here from svw also, my username was reverse there). Battles are different here, OM section is pretty good, also there are usually some good topical tournaments and leagues from the homepage. All the best.
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01-09-2014, 10:26 PM | #4 |
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Flowed smooth.
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01-11-2014, 05:33 PM | #5 |
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Thanks for the critique. What's good catfish?! Long time no talk!
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01-11-2014, 11:51 PM | #6 |
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this was alrite...nothing too stand out but a good getting your feet back in the water type of deal. nice little drop
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01-12-2014, 01:54 AM | #7 |
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Sup Mace, solid flex good to see you still active in these parts. Me and Lit dropped a collab not too long ago. Felt that the little drop was consistent. No bars stood out in a good or bad way, a success for getting back unto the rhyming mindset. Nice multis too, stay up
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01-12-2014, 02:18 AM | #8 |
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this is MaCe from HF?
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01-12-2014, 10:10 AM | #9 |
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I liked it, it was smooth flowing the whole way through
My favorite part, I find this to be very true. Keep keying! "My pride's a black fist, And i'm the first to admit that personality overrides attractiveness,"
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01-12-2014, 07:43 PM | #10 |
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I'm mason.. But what's HF? Lol
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01-13-2014, 08:31 AM | #11 |
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They mean HollaFront.
This was straight though, solid little flow to it and the shorter lines help in that sense. Welcome aboard!
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