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Old 01-22-2013, 10:46 AM   #1
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Tryin to find some peace to get my mind at ease
But theres crime in the streets as they hang behind the scenes
Sayin it will heal in time, it seems noone's got the answers
But we all got the questions, Shit I'm just guessin
Looking for signs in dreams
Propaganda, Proper slander is fillin the news
They demand us to stand up and enjoy killin the brutes
Bombs drop and knock the ceiling in two
Until the building is through, I don't know what I'm feelin, do you?
They say nation building but that's just sheilding the truth
We just committed mass murder without wieldin a clue
As to why or how many of the poor must die in their youth
Because of this holy war, when I don't even have Christian Roots
All my life I been told that this road is tough
And you gotta keep on walkin till you're soles get rough
But lately I don't know how I'm even holding up
Can't get no education because I'm broke as fuck
Is Uncle Sam dead or does he just not care?
Or did the fuckin bankers just smell blood in the air
And capitalized on capitalism?
While all my people meet their demise from malnutrition
Am I the only one feelin lost and confused without a purpose?
Feelin worthless bossed and abused?
If you do speak the truth and help save me
Because lately, I just think I'm crazy
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Old 01-22-2013, 05:16 PM   #2
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wow. i like insightful drops that have real meaning or purpose but flows smooth cuz my shit tends to be rhyme heavy and wild bars. this shit was crack tho...all around good shit but my faves tho..

Propaganda, Proper slander is fillin the news
They demand us to stand up and enjoy killin the brutes
Bombs drop and knock the ceiling in two
Until the building is through, I don't know what I'm feelin, do you?
They say nation building but that's just sheilding the truth
We just committed mass murder without wieldin a clue
As to why or how many of the poor must die in their youth
Because of this holy war, when I don't even have Christian Roots
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Old 01-22-2013, 06:07 PM   #3
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They say nation building but that's just sheilding the truth
We just committed mass murder without wieldin a clue

All my life I been told that this road is tough
And you gotta keep on walkin till you're soles get rough
But lately I don't know how I'm even holding up
Can't get no education because I'm broke as fuck


those were the lines i found to be most enjoyable.

had a good overall piece here, some slacking in a few lines as far as falling off flow wise. think your message still came through clearly though, good drop. keep posting and staying active!
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Old 01-22-2013, 06:58 PM   #4
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Very inspiring drop Zen.

As to why or how many of the poor must die in their youth
Because of this holy war, when I don't even have Christian Roots
All my life I been told that this road is tough
And you gotta keep on walkin till you're soles get rough
But lately I don't know how I'm even holding up
Can't get no education because I'm broke as fuck

^^^Awesome section here. Provocative and deep. I'm feeling pieces like this. Peace.
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Old 01-22-2013, 07:27 PM   #5
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Appreciate the feed guys. Much love
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Old 01-23-2013, 08:50 AM   #6
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Some dope lines I can't quote on mobile

my suggestion is a lot of your lines have end rhymes that don't have any syllable rhymes with the rest of your line... sometimes you can really run the flow if you do and it helps tie your piece together instead of having it feel a bit broken up


Good stuff tho
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Old 01-23-2013, 04:44 PM   #7
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Appreciate the advice there split
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Old 01-23-2013, 06:36 PM   #8
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I honestly really have nothing bad to say about this.. I was diggin the whole thing man. Read off really nice for me and i appreciate the content. Props
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Appreciate that Nice and good battle btw. I like open mics much more than battling, I honestly hate battling lol, so I'll stick to droppin open mics consistently
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