05-27-2015, 12:30 PM | #1 |
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grave labor
i feel like im talkin to myself
and hearing you speak is me reflected threw somebody else how lonely is that the only fact to know everything is phony once your back to O..threw another state of perception i see the creation of my thoughts forming in lapse of lapping dimensions fragmented dreams the solar angel beams the upgrade raise the eyes on the agency's wise new earth the place to be my rhymestyle different parallel universe verse bend your light parallax no end in sight diamonds melt when i set my pen to write carbonated dark matter on the tender chicken finger witchcraft style fast food for cannibal kids to linger ill string up the tree lights these nights it always seems bright my halo broke so i learn to dream right... be nice theres flys on the wall and clocks with 3 mice there lies in her soul but yours aint any better...wedding's of sweet rice balance the goals build talents suttle hints make the flowers grow old watch your mold a fathers sin takes alot of toll no easypass to pass no more past to remember let the radon glow shade on the weak we phaze on discreet shades on like sara o connor terminator creator of the data to mutate the rap flavor nikkaz is soft like tomb raiders grave labor robbing graves for artifacts that date back to the makers that made us ... Last edited by brokenhal0; 02-21-2021 at 06:22 PM. |
05-31-2015, 07:36 PM | #2 |
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That intro though..
I like the concept of how you opened this piece The rest flowed together pretty good to the tell the truth Halfway through it may have seemed confusing to me But when the mood strikes I also dont follow the rules the second half was a stronger showing of how it should end and your internals are very impressive. good show my friend
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