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Old 01-24-2013, 11:43 AM   #1
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I dont give a fuck if u feed it or not.. Not tryin to please anyone with this just wanted to throw it out there n vent.



I wanted to care for you, show u how to be treated
But you got scared n mistook all those feeling for weakness
Said you dont know what had happened but were movin to fast
a week ago.. Those words were "feel like ive known you in the past"
See im holdin it back, these emotions to tell you the truth
How i think your really just playin me n you think im a fool
They say honesty's the best policy, n they're probably right
But lets be honest with ourselves n how we felt the first night
The way i held you so tight... opened up n let you in
But u shut me out now because, well i think you're scared of it
But i was prepared for this, all good things come to an end
Now we're at that stage where it's "lets just be friends"
And without lying, i could say im down as hell for that
But honestly it was like visiting heaven, n now my hell is back
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Old 01-24-2013, 04:00 PM   #2
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....wish there was more. Good read, seems like you may be going through it with the Wifey! Either way, good shit man
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Old 01-24-2013, 04:07 PM   #3
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I like to read pieces like this cause I write a lot of em. You have a really cool way of expressing what you're feeling.

And without lying, i could say im down as hell for that
But honestly it was like visiting heaven, n now my hell is back

This is how I feel about this chick. like if she said she tryna get somethin together, I know I'd be there quicker than you can say it's not worth it.

I dig it tho, stay up
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Old 01-24-2013, 04:25 PM   #4
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sucks man. not the verse but whatever your situation is.

Said you dont know what had happened but were movin to fast
a week ago.. Those words were "feel like ive known you in the past"

interesting way to express this.

i fucked witit.
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Old 01-24-2013, 08:52 PM   #5
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this was cool. some real emotions. tell her ya we could still be friends, if you still let me hit it. real life. anyway ya almost everything ive read from you has been about your life experiences. which is cool. but id like to see you do something else. not sure which verse was yours on the marvel piece but im guessing professor x. which was dope. do more of that.
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Old 01-26-2013, 06:51 PM   #6
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you defiantly grasp emotion ever so vivid but that just reflects sometimes your personal situation so whatever ya going through homie stay up and gresh cause men always going fishing homie and there is HELLA fish out there to reel on in fam. anyways the content was simplistic but the emotion tendered it in a assonance sway to be creative as the wording made the metaphor a clean cut man..

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This was a pretty cool verse, I like how you put some real emotions in there. Keep it up! & you brought some Creativity.
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Old 01-29-2013, 06:54 AM   #8
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Nice drop there Nice.

Friends zone... Fucking load of crap that is.

No need for me to analyze like you said you aint looking for the feed - It was an enjoyable read even if the content isn't enjoyable for you.
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Old 01-29-2013, 10:12 AM   #9
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Yea thanks man.. Bitches be stupid as fuck lol
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