01-22-2013, 10:46 AM | #1 |
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Think I'm Crazy
Tryin to find some peace to get my mind at ease
But theres crime in the streets as they hang behind the scenes Sayin it will heal in time, it seems noone's got the answers But we all got the questions, Shit I'm just guessin Looking for signs in dreams Propaganda, Proper slander is fillin the news They demand us to stand up and enjoy killin the brutes Bombs drop and knock the ceiling in two Until the building is through, I don't know what I'm feelin, do you? They say nation building but that's just sheilding the truth We just committed mass murder without wieldin a clue As to why or how many of the poor must die in their youth Because of this holy war, when I don't even have Christian Roots All my life I been told that this road is tough And you gotta keep on walkin till you're soles get rough But lately I don't know how I'm even holding up Can't get no education because I'm broke as fuck Is Uncle Sam dead or does he just not care? Or did the fuckin bankers just smell blood in the air And capitalized on capitalism? While all my people meet their demise from malnutrition Am I the only one feelin lost and confused without a purpose? Feelin worthless bossed and abused? If you do speak the truth and help save me Because lately, I just think I'm crazy |
01-22-2013, 05:16 PM | #2 |
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wow. i like insightful drops that have real meaning or purpose but flows smooth cuz my shit tends to be rhyme heavy and wild bars. this shit was crack tho...all around good shit but my faves tho..
Propaganda, Proper slander is fillin the news They demand us to stand up and enjoy killin the brutes Bombs drop and knock the ceiling in two Until the building is through, I don't know what I'm feelin, do you? They say nation building but that's just sheilding the truth We just committed mass murder without wieldin a clue As to why or how many of the poor must die in their youth Because of this holy war, when I don't even have Christian Roots
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01-22-2013, 06:07 PM | #3 |
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They say nation building but that's just sheilding the truth
We just committed mass murder without wieldin a clue All my life I been told that this road is tough And you gotta keep on walkin till you're soles get rough But lately I don't know how I'm even holding up Can't get no education because I'm broke as fuck those were the lines i found to be most enjoyable. had a good overall piece here, some slacking in a few lines as far as falling off flow wise. think your message still came through clearly though, good drop. keep posting and staying active!
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01-22-2013, 06:58 PM | #4 |
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Very inspiring drop Zen.
As to why or how many of the poor must die in their youth Because of this holy war, when I don't even have Christian Roots All my life I been told that this road is tough And you gotta keep on walkin till you're soles get rough But lately I don't know how I'm even holding up Can't get no education because I'm broke as fuck ^^^Awesome section here. Provocative and deep. I'm feeling pieces like this. Peace. |
01-22-2013, 07:27 PM | #5 |
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Appreciate the feed guys. Much love
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01-23-2013, 08:50 AM | #6 |
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Some dope lines I can't quote on mobile
my suggestion is a lot of your lines have end rhymes that don't have any syllable rhymes with the rest of your line... sometimes you can really run the flow if you do and it helps tie your piece together instead of having it feel a bit broken up Good stuff tho
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01-23-2013, 04:44 PM | #7 |
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Appreciate the advice there split
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01-23-2013, 06:36 PM | #8 |
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I honestly really have nothing bad to say about this.. I was diggin the whole thing man. Read off really nice for me and i appreciate the content. Props
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01-25-2013, 01:52 PM | #9 |
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Appreciate that Nice and good battle btw. I like open mics much more than battling, I honestly hate battling lol, so I'll stick to droppin open mics consistently
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