01-23-2013, 10:53 AM | #1 |
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slightworkk..just fucking 'Round
..checkk the method, no crash-test imm wreckless,
professing lessons of mad-discretion in the direction of adolescent wretches and peasants steady-progression my only objective eject'n simps in every section ending pathetic-efforts, imm on the edge, vicious-intentions of a menace, the rebel skillfully shreds the oppressors, ..with these wicked-sentences its my penmanship thats etching the swiftest-brilliance within next-level sketchings..quickly-drawn imm beyond weakened legions of legends.. hawking-vision with the sharpest-lenses eagle-eye on my opposition while im commence'n to strike and then hit'em stealth-precision'll rid'dem, general-lieutenant, my reign limitless.. reducing all the irrelevant, to less than sediment no remnants, 'cause my empire endless, telling my enemies vacate the premises while erasing all of their illegitimate-prescence. my schedules violent-profession, applying pressure setting fire to these failed-agendas. wimps missing grit, not-likely to make appearances bitches only timid @ safe-distances, and this is the university of rigidness all yall punk prissy kids faked yall attendances. 1beligerant-degenerate, fuckk all the yapping and bickering ill jump right off on into it. vivid-symphony, soon as the matchh begins imm deliberate, and trying to finishh 'em!.. on the offensive, your frail-attempts effectless, unmatched-physics render'em defenseless. ..the king-cobra strickened 'dem criminals claiming theyre innocent my bars imprisoning venomous sharp blades indent throught their ligaments like i don't care 'bout symmetry lay vessels raid temples wherever the hell terrain i claim im roaming allover then through it iron-sentinel hell bent on keeping little-fools minimal..read rights in the sense youre illiterate soft crews break down, no mineral. gyms lacking competition theyre not tryna get physical. ..definition of shear-wrath, the simplest-math, interfere with my ca$h ill outlashh, slash dash and then drag the left-halves through the path. hot-metal baths, blasst steel allover a lames jacket &fittedcap leave'em like pittsburgh stans. these faggots styles quite bland always under the lowest brands never learned to overstand supply&demand whack clans should disband..ill step on your poor thoughts, trampled-plans. nomadic-chants start the avalanche, collateral-damage all of you bastiids faggot homelands. saps cant hold their own weight they always collapse..weak grips never could catchh a grasp counter-measure attacks whenever these brats overeact theyll never last if they cant adapt its hard to taking away from bummy-slacks..eliminate'em since theres Nothing to subtract
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01-23-2013, 11:02 AM | #2 |
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cool. There were a shit ton of syllable lines and slanty end rhymes, and not a lot of clean multis. The inners helped tie it together. a couple nice metaphors, but if you edited them down (there were a lot) they'd hit a lot harder.
can't pull quotes on my phone tho, sorry
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01-23-2013, 11:40 AM | #3 |
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good look on that.
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01-23-2013, 12:09 PM | #4 |
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to strike and then hit'em stealth-precision'll rid'dem, general-lieutenant, my reign limitless..
reducing all the irrelevant, to less than sediment no remnants, 'cause my empire endless, telling my enemies vacate the premises while erasing all of their illegitimate-prescence. my schedules violent-profession, applying pressure setting fire to these failed-agendas. wimps missing grit, not-likely to make appearances bitches only timid @ safe-distances, and this is the university of rigidness all yall punk prissy kids faked yall attendances. ^^Fuckin loved that shit. Long as hell but badass throughout holmes. Like Split said some of the multis were a little forced but shit it didn't matter to me man you made it work. Dope shit I enjoyed that shit forreal |
01-23-2013, 12:17 PM | #5 |
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i liked this but i thought it dragged on to the point i wanted to stop reading.
it was ran together also, your lines. which i had to figure where they ended but overall it was cool fam! http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...pe-How-are-you http://artofbattling.com/forum/showt...e-and-Campbell
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