01-20-2013, 01:31 AM | #1 |
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fetus in straw
lets see what kind of tutor the clown makes
a loser the town hates, scuba thru cloud shapes just your every day boozer w/pout face always serious, no bloopers or out takes the future, it now fades w/ every single breath wrinkles. stress. I've felt it all, not a tingle left the ink'll dress this lingo better than I can in the dumps forever, not to mention a lifespan oh karma! why you always messing w/my plans? it really a rest? cuz when I'm arrested, the time ran sly rants I scribble w/ the soul screaming it's all apart of me. a portion of my whole being ghost writes- all those nights it stole feeling no healing. never tell, but the secrets dissolve hopeless fast- floor of broken glass. pleading, I crawl creep w/the walls, sucking life like a fetus in straw |
01-20-2013, 11:05 AM | #2 |
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Wise Ways? MORE LIKE WISE ASS hahahahahahaha
sly rants I scribble w/ the soul screaming it's all apart of me. a portion of my whole being Favoritest bar. Cool rhymes for the opener. 'Scuba thru cloud shapes'. That was nice. It's weird how your good at rhyming diff-er-ent words together. Fetus in straw. Gross. You should write about lily white flowers and lollipops and lillipads and Lily Thai. No, but this was a cool little drop. I like how you used w/ and thru to make it seem all nonchalant. That's cool beans. Good job.
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01-20-2013, 03:42 PM | #3 |
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i knew this was wise ways after the first two bars lol, cool little drop here, u have a unique style, not saying its abstract but the way you keep short bar style with getting powerful messages with bigger hidden deeper meaning is impressive and something i envy. stay up man.. like the new name lol
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01-20-2013, 07:39 PM | #4 |
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Sick as usual wise.
Had a nasty flow and use of syllables. The piece really ran a hard rhythm until about 10 lines in. Then it seemed to differ. But the closeer was ill as hell. That fetus through straw line is crazy. Nice drop
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01-22-2013, 07:22 PM | #5 |
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the future, it now fades w/ every single breath
wrinkles. stress. I've felt it all, not a tingle left the ink'll dress this lingo better than I can in the dumps forever, not to mention a lifespan word. me gusta that flow
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