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Old 01-20-2013, 01:31 AM   #1
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lets see what kind of tutor the clown makes
a loser the town hates, scuba thru cloud shapes
just your every day boozer w/pout face
always serious, no bloopers or out takes
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creep w/the walls, sucking life like a fetus in straw
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Old 01-20-2013, 11:05 AM   #2
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Wise Ways? MORE LIKE WISE ASS hahahahahahaha

sly rants I scribble w/ the soul screaming
it's all apart of me. a portion of my whole being

Favoritest bar. Cool rhymes for the opener. 'Scuba thru cloud shapes'. That was nice. It's weird how your good at rhyming diff-er-ent words together. Fetus in straw. Gross. You should write about lily white flowers and lollipops and lillipads and Lily Thai. No, but this was a cool little drop. I like how you used w/ and thru to make it seem all nonchalant. That's cool beans.

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Old 01-20-2013, 03:42 PM   #3
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i knew this was wise ways after the first two bars lol, cool little drop here, u have a unique style, not saying its abstract but the way you keep short bar style with getting powerful messages with bigger hidden deeper meaning is impressive and something i envy. stay up man.. like the new name lol
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Old 01-20-2013, 07:39 PM   #4
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Sick as usual wise.

Had a nasty flow and use of syllables. The piece really ran a hard rhythm until about 10 lines in. Then it seemed to differ. But the closeer was ill as hell. That fetus through straw line is crazy. Nice drop
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Old 01-22-2013, 07:22 PM   #5
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the future, it now fades w/ every single breath
wrinkles. stress. I've felt it all, not a tingle left
the ink'll dress this lingo better than I can
in the dumps forever, not to mention a lifespan

word. me gusta that flow
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