06-27-2022, 07:52 PM | #1 |
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06-27-2022, 10:04 PM | #2 |
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06-28-2022, 03:00 PM | #3 |
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06-30-2022, 05:55 PM | #4 |
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These bullets blow your ass to smithereens, not heeding any calls for peace Predictions say it’s All Saints Day, tell that to whatever pieces that the Hallows Eve Sharp’s voice - cuz when I go live with that mag it’ll blow you away Family affair, auto tear your babies up like I ain’t heard of Roe v Wade Overstuffed confusing bars to compensate for the fact what he’s spittin is average Audience guaranteed to see old dude soar over their head like they bought tickets to Maverick Maybe my NBL run was a fluke, but when’s the last time you seen a final four? Probably after the meteor hit and you were one of the last living dinosaurs You on the road to the championship, I pull up beside you and peel clips He be peeling too...the feds pulling Saint off the seat like Will Smith |
06-30-2022, 10:01 PM | #5 |
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Your girl i'm seeing
Told me you're a small text guy. & shown the breakup while streaming Talk about a 'Pinch to Zoom': She's upscale, had me grab her ass in the live meeting Goes down astounding; likes it rough beggin 'hit me in the mouth please' Jesus!....Way she lick balls before the strike rivals John Turturro in Big Lebowski I went deeep in her private area. Smashed til it black & sore Finally saw eye to eye when i slid in right.. u'd think i’d need a password at the door Fatty. Your idea of Ranch Hand is dip without chips clown Ad a Binge-eater. That face a Porcine after a loss cuz we see a Pig Out U backmasking up!? Speak of the Devil- punches NEVER sway me 'Verse plays are so backwards he sends mixed messages like metal records in the 80s Last edited by Saint; 07-01-2022 at 02:15 AM. |
07-01-2022, 09:51 AM | #6 |
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These bullets blow your ass to smithereens, not heeding any calls for peace
Predictions say it’s All Saints Day, tell that to whatever pieces that the Hallows Eve All Saints Day was a good name flip concept but either the flip was quite bad or I didn't get it - was it supposed to be 'whatever pieces that the hollows leave'? Sharp’s voice - cuz when I go live with that mag it’ll blow you away Family affair, auto tear your babies up like I ain’t heard of Roe v Wade OK current event line Overstuffed confusing bars to compensate for the fact what he’s spittin is average Audience guaranteed to see old dude soar over their head like they bought tickets to Maverick BLAOW. Nice one Addy. Solid personal punch + current event flip + good delivery. Good line. Maybe my NBL run was a fluke, but when’s the last time you seen a final four? Probably after the meteor hit and you were one of the last living dinosaurs Ehhhh. I like the personal angle and tone in the set up, the second line didn't move me You on the road to the championship, I pull up beside you and peel clips He be peeling too...the feds pulling Saint off the seat like Will Smith OK punch/nameflip. Had to google the reference. Told me you're a small text guy. & shown the breakup while streaming Talk about a 'Pinch to Zoom': She's upscale, had me grab her ass in the live meeting It's a cool wp idea but you as the writer had to work too hard to make it work and I as the reader had to work too hard to understand it Goes down astounding; likes it rough beggin 'hit me in the mouth please' Jesus!....Way she lick balls before the strike rivals John Turturro in Big Lebowski LOL. Watched this semi recently. This is pretty good. I went deeep in her private area. Smashed til it black & sore Finally saw eye to eye when i slid in right.. u'd think i’d need a password at the door private area/need a password OK OK. Saw eye to eye when I slid right in - ?? I've tried for more than a couple mins to puzzle it out and I don't get it. Fatty. Your idea of Ranch Hand is dip without chips clown Ad a Binge-eater. That face a Porcine after a loss cuz we see a Pig Out Describing someone's face as a "poor scene" is weird. The rest of it works well. U backmasking up!? Speak of the Devil- punches NEVER sway me 'Verse plays are so backwards he sends mixed messages like metal records in the 80s The 'verse plays backwards'/devil wp concept was dope. "he sends mixed messages" is not much of a punch though. Adverse had the LOTB, next best was Saint's Big Lebowski line. Besides that it's pretty much Adverse having simple/OKish concepts that were delivered well enough vs Saint having better and more creative ideas but with flaws in the execution. It's pretty close in that sense and will prob just come down to voter preference. Adverse's Maverick line was made stronger by the fact that 2 out of 5 of Saint's bars were too convoluted for me here lol... I think for that reason I'm gonna edge this to him. V/ Adverse
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07-02-2022, 12:31 AM | #7 |
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Ad: Overstuffed confusing bars to compensate for the fact what he’s spittin is average Audience guaranteed to see old dude soar over their head like they bought tickets to Maverick haha, enjoyed that. didnt get the hallows eve or will smith line? dm me, maybe im dumb? Saint: Goes down astounding; likes it rough beggin 'hit me in the mouth please' Jesus!....Way she lick balls before the strike rivals John Turturro in Big Lebowski LOTB probably - i got the reference, and the imagery was funny lol U backmasking up!? Speak of the Devil- punches NEVER sway me 'Verse plays are so backwards he sends mixed messages like metal records in the 80s this was cool too - a little wordy, but i liked the tie in with the setup. V/ Saint by a smidge
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07-03-2022, 01:07 PM | #8 |
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Predictions say it’s All Saints Day, tell that to whatever pieces that the Hallows Eve really cool idea but Hallows Eve/Leave doesn't work for me, and the fact that I'm scratching my head going 'leave? Sieve? See?' tells me this doesn't do it for me. Low key props to Inf in rotating the aka for stuff like this Sharp’s voice - cuz when I go live with that mag it’ll blow you away Family affair, auto tear your babies up like I ain’t heard of Roe v Wade both punches are solid but a little basic. This definitely hits, but would've liked to see you try to flesh them out more fully with their own setups. Setup was better than the punch imo, and that takes away from the punchline Overstuffed confusing bars to compensate for the fact what he’s spittin is average Audience guaranteed to see old dude soar over their head like they bought tickets to Maverick lmao. Nice Maybe my NBL run was a fluke, but when’s the last time you seen a final four? Probably after the meteor hit and you were one of the last living dinosaurs cool idea but the wording is awkward You on the road to the championship, I pull up beside you and peel clips He be peeling too...the feds pulling Saint off the seat like Will Smith two small gripes. I had to google this one because I assumed it was will Smith the actor, even though you made it obvious in the setup that's an old reference. Also, changing from second to third person between the setup and punchline can get distracting or make it convoluted (didn't happen here but generally good to watch out for). Still works. Losing a lot of impact for me on second read tbh Told me you're a small text guy. & shown the breakup while streaming Talk about a 'Pinch to Zoom': She's upscale, had me grab her ass in the live meeting there's a lot going on here and it just makes it feel convoluted by the third read Goes down astounding; likes it rough beggin 'hit me in the mouth please' Jesus!....Way she lick balls before the strike rivals John Turturro in Big Lebowski lmao. I fuck with it I went deeep in her private area. Smashed til it black & sore Finally saw eye to eye when i slid in right.. u'd think i’d need a password at the door I feel like I get this but also like I don't get this Fatty. Your idea of Ranch Hand is dip without chips clown Ad a Binge-eater. That face a Porcine after a loss cuz we see a Pig Out had to google the pronunciation and got 'poor sign'. Poor sign after a loss is weird to me Just read Doms vote. It's poor scene? It works on a technical level but the idea is hard to find dope U backmasking up!? Speak of the Devil- punches NEVER sway me 'Verse plays are so backwards he sends mixed messages like metal records in the 80s this is a great concept, execution is solid, but you're kinda infamous for having harder to understand bars I'm going to reread this later cause it's really close to me. Ad more consistent, Inf hit harder. EDIT: Ad I have the gunbars and maverick. Inf I have the lebowski and closer. Will Smith and porcine kinda cancel each other out for me as bars that were good in a technical sense but conceptually DOA. Shits a real toss up but I have Inf with slightly stronger hits. Good battle, close, honestly expecting this takes forever to close so fuck you guys for that Jk <3 V/Inf by a nose |
07-04-2022, 10:52 AM | #9 |
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Sharp’s voice - cuz when I go live with that mag it’ll blow you away
Family affair, auto tear your babies up like I ain’t heard of Roe v Wade Overstuffed confusing bars to compensate for the fact what he’s spittin is average Audience guaranteed to see old dude soar over their head like they bought tickets to Maverick vs Goes down astounding; likes it rough beggin 'hit me in the mouth please' Jesus!....Way she lick balls before the strike rivals John Turturro in Big Lebowski Other than that bar Inf didn't really bring anything else up to par. I got Ad barely edging another close one. Vote - Adverse |
07-04-2022, 12:16 PM | #10 |
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Inf won
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07-04-2022, 12:24 PM | #11 |
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07-04-2022, 12:41 PM | #12 |
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Vote Saint.
I think both were pretty good, not nearly as good as rod tha text god...but both were good, I just thought saint was aittle more clever and more consistent throughout the verse I did like adverse opener though |
07-04-2022, 12:59 PM | #13 |
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These bullets blow your ass to smithereens, not heeding any calls for peace
Predictions say it’s All Saints Day, tell that to whatever pieces that the Hallows Eve Had to think about this for far too long to be sure you were going for hollows leave. Still not sure tbh. Good effort tho Sharp’s voice - cuz when I go live with that mag it’ll blow you away Family affair, auto tear your babies up like I ain’t heard of Roe v Wade I guess everyone had one of these this week. Wording kindve doesn’t make sense? Overstuffed confusing bars to compensate for the fact what he’s spittin is average Audience guaranteed to see old dude soar over their head like they bought tickets to Maverick Nice NBL run was a fluke, but when’s the last time you seen a final four? Probably after the meteor hit and you were one of the last living dinosaurs This isn’t it You on the road to the championship, I pull up beside you and peel clips He be peeling too...the feds pulling Saint off the seat like Will Smith Don’t get the reference and Google isn’t helping, repetition on peel/pull makes it clunky too our girl i'm seeing Told me you're a small text guy. & shown the breakup while streaming Talk about a 'Pinch to Zoom': She's upscale, had me grab her ass in the live meeting Cool but kindve awkward Goes down astounding; likes it rough beggin 'hit me in the mouth please' Jesus!....Way she lick balls before the strike rivals John Turturro in Big Lebowski Nice I went deeep in her private area. Smashed til it black & sore Finally saw eye to eye when i slid in right.. u'd think i’d need a password at the door Don’t like Fatty. Your idea of Ranch Hand is dip without chips clown Ad a Binge-eater. That face a Porcine after a loss cuz we see a Pig Out Creative but not overly amazing U backmasking up!? Speak of the Devil- punches NEVER sway me 'Verse plays are so backwards he sends mixed messages like metal records in the 80s Another cool concept kinda left field I’ve definitely read better from both of you but I think saint just about takes this V/ saint
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