[Round 3] 2. Advanced Placement vs (N/A) JaysonFresh/evaD — AP Advances

[Answer]

8 lines per PERSON. That's 16 lines per TEAM no more & no less
If both teams agree to it, you can do more than 16 lines. 16 is the absolute minimum.
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Check in by 1/29/2022 at 11:59 p.m. EST
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Verses due Friday, 2/4/2022 at 11:59 p.m. EST (yes, Eastern)
It's a lot of time and not a lot of lines, don't ask for extensions
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@Dominate @Aero @JaysonFresh @evaD

[Dominate]

Good luck fellas.

[Aero]

Gluck 16.

[evaD]

Check

[JaysonFresh]

I'm ready

[Answer]

I have 16 from evaD/Fresh

[Dominate]

Small ext please. Won’t even be 8hrs from deadline

[evaD]

Look,

we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas
beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters.
while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow
shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >>
& every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me
my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny
yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author
Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater.
More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch
Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz
Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip
You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss
& Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem?
Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin
The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume
Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room

[Dominate]

No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking
Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin
You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen
She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square
Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer”
& look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest
I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest
I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon
Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him
My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud
Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too
Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard
Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard
People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it
If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents

[dull boy]

Bullet point, wordle and weak in the knees

Small circle and mastercard

Thought Nanny and castaway were bad. Strayaa was a no for me and Ayers Rock was a nice reference but didn’t like the way you used it as a hard dick and they’re gay concept. Lesser stars was a nice idea but fell flat.

Wack 9mm small dick joke. Fresh aer was a good concept but who says ‘get that breath of fresh’? Fuck is that supposed to mean? Maybe it’s some new slang idk about but I’m going to assume it’s just dumb. Dead to rights boring. Turn down for what kind of funny but eh.

It’s close. I’ll come back.

[Resin M-I-C]

d&b was aight, clever idea
bulletpoint was ok
like the nanny idea but somethin with execution
castaway was cool
wordle is good but had to google and lost some luster
weak knees was funny, solid bc generics were gettin a lil tiresome
last two fell off

vs

didnt like 9mm
so we doing big butthole lines now huh haha nahhh
fresh aer ehhh
dead to rights aight, missing some harshness
turn down for what was funny
avy was alright.. clever but missing somethin for me
mastercard was good..wasnt thrilled ab the execution
hooray was a throwaway


close, but dom/aer had more misses.. both had execution issues for me but dave/fresh had better ideas and more shit i liked

v dave/JS

[Saint]

Look,

we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas
beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters.
I wanted to like this & thought Dave& Busters was a good idea if reworded, but its a miss as it

while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow
shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >>
cool, havent seen this aero flip but im sure similar have been done.. this was a creative hit tho imo but not a heavy hit

& every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me
my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny
lol. nah here, decent attempt

yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author
Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater.
this reminds me of the castaway lines when that tom hanks film came out, this wasnt it imo

More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch
Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz
This was alright.. good for initial flip, had looked it up..

Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip
You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss
lol. i liked this one.. broke the monotony w humor, best line so far imo

& Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem?
Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin
Ok. seen this on Dom before.. not that its played or anything but Ok as is,

The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume
Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room
Didnt feel this so much.. maybe its a regional thing

No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking
cmon now.. lol

Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin
You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen
this was better but i can tell Aero is doing these

She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square
Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer”
I liked this, wouldve liked to see it revised a lil bit but cool

& look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest
I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest
This was Ok. Nothing crazy

I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon
Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him
Same as above.. feels like its missing something.. wording so far helped, still decent

My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud
Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too
Aight.

Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard
Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard
Hmm, one of those i liked the concept, the contacts list as mastercard feels like it coulda been something different, still thought it was decent and good idea.

People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it
If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents
so so.. felt lazy

This could go either way, depending on preference.. i have Dom/Aero here in a close one mostly bc of execution and havin less misses imo
vote AP

[UPN Zuch]

Dave and fresh

Wordle, crouching to kiss


Rest of verse was pretty average


Dom aero

Small circle, Mastercard (LOTB), turn down for what was cool too

LOVED the Mastercard bar.


I got dom and aero here



Good battle y’all


Vote D and A

[sral]

[QUOTE=evaD;819221]Look,

we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas
beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters.

I don’t get the Dave&busters thing, maybe I’m missing something but oh well. This was a miss for me as I don’t get it. Sorry.

while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow
shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >>

Ehhhh, I get it but it’s really light to me. Just okay, lacks any real sting to it.

& every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me
my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny

Again here it’s kind of light in its execution, lacks punch power of anything either humorous or cold blooded. It just feels a bit flat in its payoff.

yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author
Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater.

I did feel this was better conceptually, for sure, but again here the wording made it sort of easy to telegraph where it was going as soon as you read castaway and then it doesn’t have a misdirection to the execution so there’s no real zing or anything to it come the punchline, it’s just sort of statementish but doesn’t feel like it does any damage to the opposition.

More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch
Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz

This was better conceptually, kind of wordy I guess but I’ve been playing Wordle too recently so I fuck with it

Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip
You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss

This was nice again, worded well and with humour to it.

& Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem?
Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin

Nah, this one was a huge miss for me personally. Not a fan.

The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume
Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room

Concept was absolutely brilliant, never seen that done before, execution maybe lacked some of your usual humour for me but what a blinding idea to tie in the two of them. I liked the creativity of this.

[sral]

[QUOTE=Dominate;819222]No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking

LOL worded very clean, reminded me of Killing Spree’s stillborn line from earlier in the tourney if I’m honest.

Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin
You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen

lmao

She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square
Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer”

Nah I wasn’t so keen on this one, I get the idea but the execution was lacking for me

& look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest
I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest

I wasn’t keen on this one at all personally, felt a bit lazy if I’m honest.

I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon
Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him

Nice idea, not seen this done before.

My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud
Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too

This one missed for me, just seen too many similar to this I guess but not necessarily bad, I just thought it wasn’t the most original concept

Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard
Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard

This is almost the complete opposite of the line above, worded well and a great idea. Very strong

People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it
If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents

Ehhhh I was kind of indifferent about this one, not entirely sure if I caught it or not to be fair.


Overall I think Dave had a very strong showing here, Dom also had a banger in MasterCard which was arguably LOTB for me personally, Turn Down For What was good also. Aero had that anus line which completely caught me off guard and I thought it was hilarious, Fresh kind of had ideas I half-liked but his wording took away from the payoffs pretty heavily to the point where I felt like they were back to back light jabs not really doing much damage to their team at all. I think that’s what lead me to my decision here, Aero/Dom kind of had a consistency to them where I felt they did better as a team overall than Dave/Jayson did here. Dave and Dom were prob the strongest two overall but I think Aer/Dom did the best as a cohesive unit here.

Vote - Aero / Dominate

[Blue Bayou]

Jay and Dave

Opener a decent meta.. talk game with lesser stars is a cool swag concept to me.. multi lazy af tho
Bulletin wp been done a bunch but I thought this was still cool with the np flip
Nanny is a big miss.. I'm someone who usually likes these kind of lines but I don't think the concept is strong enough here
Castaway was ight but could've been cleaned up
Wordle is a cool and pretty dece current event concept.. they "yellow" worked well as delivered
Weak in the knees is a hilarious short bar
Is straya a common phrase used for AUS? feels a bit forced conceptually but maybe I'm wrong... wp is cool
Ayers rock is a cool concept but I think maybe I'm missing the wink and skip reference to it?


Vs.

9mm is funny and a pretty solid start
Keep her circle small is hilarious. Fire concept
Fresh Aer nah.. light np
Dead to rights is played... the wording is really good on this bar but it's a played idea as is the arrest tie in
Turn down for what is a banger.. lmao... lotb probably, great delivery
Arm out is pretty good for an avy punch.. not a fan of them in general really unless it's a pic diss but this was pretty creative and well delivered for an indirect gun bar
Mastercard is flames. Dope concept
Hooray is an okay wp.. chuckle worthy



Good read guys. Pretty good battle overall. Both teams I think were pretty consistent with a couple misses from both, but some very enjoyable concepts as well
Pretty close to me but I loved the Mastercard and Turn Down for What bars so the strengths of the highs edge this to Dom and Aero for me

Props to all

[Ghost1]

Originally Posted by evaD

Look,

we ain't in the same class fellas. skillwise I eclipse these 2 m'fuckas
beyond me to 'talk game with lesser stars' than an angry yelp review of Dave&busters.

were u preparing to battle ur teammate if things went unexpectedly lol. the punch is ok.

while evaD got dat sniper scope , my silencer's aimed to your marrow
shiiit we can present with a List of ways to have our bulletpoint to an >>

I guess

& every punch i throw guarantees u cant withstand me
my fists connect like happy marriages while urs r caught sleepin with the nanny

lol liked this

yet when it comes to reputation I'm something of a famed author
Doms been castaway for sooo long. survives off spear fishing & plastic tarps for fresh rainwater.

ok

More generic gun bars from these nerdy kids n it’s about to be a murder bitch
Throw A and D in the wrong place and you’ll see that they yellow like a wordle quiz

liked this

Dave gets around w/ the chicks, they’re always down to bounce on my tip
You don’t make girls weak in the knees Aer, they just get tired of crouching to kiss

boring

& Dom claims gangsta from down under, what the fuck is your problem?
Yell out ‘strayaaa n you can catch one while I’m buckin at Austin

ok

The way his Aussie pride is manifested is sicker than you’d assume
Dom told me Ayers Rock hard and huge.. then winked and skipped off to their room

wack

Originally Posted by Dominate

No faking or bluffing - I take aim & get straight to the bucking
Going innnn with the 9mm. Jay does the same when he’s fucking

this must be aero gay shit lol

Anxious about who your girl sees - you never stop w/ the cappin
You’re trying to keep her circle small. I’m looking at her anus & it’s not gonna happen

gone lol

She wants me to choke you to death – says she likes you less & less, square
Kicks YOU out the house … But tells ME “get that breath of Fresh, Aer”

drip

& look, we could spar to the death… But you’ll get taken apart at the chest
I’ll land some lefts then have you dead to rights when I put your heart in arrest

tough

I’m in the club getting loud. Rounds of shots - Sambuca then bourbon
Dave’s yelling TURN DOWN FOR WHAT … at the 100th woman to curve him

lmao

My hired guns know what the guap bout. One call & it’s an all out feud
Fuck a soccer avvy. If there’s a name & a number w/ MY shooter, he got an arm out too

dece

Your girl is insecure and says she wants these fingers fast & hard
Takes three digits in the back for validation – she in my contacts list as MasterCard

lol fresh spin on an old approach

People cheer when they see me & say I’m the greatest to air it
If YOU hear hoorays in this bitch.. someone threw shade at your parents

idk tbh

if Im being honest I had dom an aer by a landslide. the wording and delivery alone just makes for such a better experience. conceptually they were probably more creative as well. dave an fresh were really dry an the wording made it a chore.

v dom an aero

[Answer]

I've got 5 - 1 in favor of Dom and Aero who advance to the finals