BlackHoleFlow - BeEgEe

[beegee]

im the sunlight through the keyhole, the perfect evil
wake up, breathe air, spit bars, and murder people
worse then lethal, no regret for past actions
on the beat ya know the flows gotta have traction
last assassin, i'm sure theres some of you left
imma see you when I see you when I come for ya neck
half-man.. half-machine.. covered in flesh
the flows futuristic, I never cover my steps
i walk above Hades like the devil in his prime
stand up so straight I must have metal in my spine
never went thru evolution, just intelligent design
too advanced ya thoughts just ain't relevant to mine
way too many attribute points spent on rhyming
strength level also thru the roof, i'm bendin iron
event horizion, where light, space, and time meet
anti-binary, ain't a motherfucker like me
if that aint the truth, god reach down and strike me
until that day I leave em kneel'n on they right knee​

[Zen]

This was a pretty dope short little piece here. But I do have some complaints.

worse then lethal, no regret for past actions
on the beat ya know the flows gotta have traction
^^Ironically on this bar that talks about flow the flow was a little off to me. It's not that big of a deal as I do the same from time to time but try to match the syllables together for a good flow.

Besides some minor hiccups here and there on the flow I enjoyed this. Cool little story fella. Go drop some feed on other posts if you expect more feed for yours, and welcome.

[Wise Wiggles]

Post moar, feed less..

Don't disappear this time.

[zygote]

Very interesting you have a strong understanding of the multiple rhyme scheme and how to use it a good effect. The event horizon - bending iron - spent on rhyming was a good highlight. Enjoyed the mixture of references moving from hades to video games etc. It was all pretty laid back and self-referential while staying aggressive.

[Pakistani Hand Cannon]

you have a strong understanding of the multiple rhyme scheme and how to use it a good effect

its shit like this ^^ which makes this site not worth loggin on for shit no more lmfao what a joke

this was aiiight though bG, just some cool effortless shit, thats how it comes off to me anyway...
alot of the shit was just weightless, but not offensively so, only one line i really liked

never went thru evolution, just intelligent design

like i said, this was aiiight, nothing more, nothing less

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[Mr. J]

Someone is foaming because he gets no love
poor lost soul...




regardless this was quite the piece had a nice flow to it
the vibe is familiar to me. Either way I believe you understand what you are going for
and this shines a bit of light on what is yet to come. Nice drop
keep writing

[PancakeBrah]

I will give feed on your pieces when you don't format it weird.

[Pakistani Hand Cannon]

Originally Posted by Mr. J

Someone is foaming because he gets no love
poor lost soul

lmfao

keep your generic insults to a nigga it might actually apply to holmes

[Mr. J]

Temper temper

You show me nothing worth reading to prove your skill set

[Pakistani Hand Cannon]

lool

i think i missed the part where you became someone i needed to prove my skill set to.

evidently you overestimate your importance.

[Mr. J]

Naive child...carry on...it seems I've touched a nerve because you have no skill...

[Pakistani Hand Cannon]

the weak always try & project they insecurities on other people.

im comfortable with mine...dont act like you know when clearly you dont

edit - my bad on fuckin up the thread bG,

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[Mike Wrecka]

this was light hearted. it didn't take itself too seriously. and was kinda refreshing to read. I liked it for what it was.

[beegee]

Originally Posted by zygote

Very interesting you have a strong understanding of the multiple rhyme scheme and how to use it a good effect. The event horizon - bending iron - spent on rhyming was a good highlight. Enjoyed the mixture of references moving from hades to video games etc. It was all pretty laid back and self-referential while staying aggressive.

thank you Zy.
haven't heard from you in a while.