10-28-2013, 01:40 AM | #21 |
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I feel like there's not really much more to add, shit's already been said after scoping through most of the comments on this one already. This was definitely dope af and I could relate to some of the things in this shit which personally made the whole piece a lot better as well. Continue dropping that fire Dead.
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10-30-2013, 12:23 PM | #22 |
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haha thx bud, really dope. i've said it before and i'll say it again you whiny little bitch... jk
what ive said is that u are by far one of the smoothest out here, hands down. so so polished. so saying that again for this piece, clearly...also whats sick is that u make ur shit pretty relate-able for the most part, not only with content, (which yes usually is depressive, but its not hoooooriible im committing suicide bad, its promotions and jobs, cancer in the family, friends getting stranger, thats real talk, relate-able) but also with ur vocab, u don't alienate some readers by writing needlessly huge obnoxious words that nobody knows, or far reaching references . you keep ur shit on a level that people can vibe with and understand, but still keeping it, clever and fresh. so i've always appreciated u for that aswell. this was top notch work again. u have given darth a run for his money for OCT VOTM. props.
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10-31-2013, 11:17 AM | #23 |
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copy i played jr I'll backhand toedrag the fuck outta u...
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11-04-2013, 05:39 PM | #24 |
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thanks copy namedropping ftw
i got you guys sooner than later.. my focus is low.. but some of you are pretty great interpretive readers. apply that to other facets of your life and you will be better for it
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Whatsup man? Wheres your focus at?
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11-05-2013, 09:47 AM | #27 |
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nyc says, based on my writing, that i am slipping closer to nietzsche's abyss. i have since researched this concept and i feel he may be right.
focus is on crawling back into the light.
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11-05-2013, 11:53 AM | #28 |
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dawg i love it when u refer to me in the 2nd person
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11-05-2013, 09:34 PM | #29 |
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dead check my shit out
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props on hof
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I really felt the transitioning of your verse is what makes this great
the way you make this flow together so cohesively is perfect in my eyes truly an inspiration, I do felt like you could have left out Copy's name name drops don't usually work in most aspects of things, unless it's dissing this was more abstract/introspective/poetic....idk what else, it was smooth though now i'm drinking everyday before i head into work cancer in my family, we're genetically cursed so this toxicity is only doing destiny's work let it be known, let it be holy, let it be heard a legend was born. now every other legend disturbed a legacy in theory is a legacy earned there's nothing to teach and even less to be learned symmetrical, serum ventricle, dimensional curves ^^^^ from this point on I felt like it was perfection you always surprise me with how you structure your lines I don't know what your pattern is...but it works.. you did a great job my dude, congrats on the HOF
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