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Old 10-15-2013, 03:40 PM   #1
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Plausible cruelty, what would the carpenter do
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Old 10-15-2013, 05:44 PM   #2
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Old 10-15-2013, 05:55 PM   #3
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dead man, I liked this:

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But really, this was great. I don't have much to add at the moment. I'll give it another read later. But you both were in full gear for this one.
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Old 10-17-2013, 03:51 PM   #4
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how does this have NO feed. ppl intimidated or something? this was just awesome again. 2 of the best right here, unbelievably polished and smooth (i stole ur scheme there). whenever i read black i think of beer commercials talking about easy drinking.. black all ur shit is easy reading. pretty impressive for someone to keep up with geno right now while hes been on fire. also rarely see black collabing with anyone that can stay with him. u guys nailed this, should collab more, great stuff. proper proppers for this one
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Old 10-17-2013, 07:45 PM   #5
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This was a dope collab, seems like the thing to do these days
regardless I felt Black's verse was pretty slick, the flow was sick
and some lines really stuck out to me, this is my second time reading this
decided to come back and spread some love on the butter
Geno, the way you play with words and keep your flow going is dope
it seems like you never let up when you get that stride going
tbh I feel like you're the only one to keep up with me once I'm in that zone
you can shout out to Split & maybe we could bring back the ol' vibe
keep it up breh's you always got me here waving pom pom's
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Old 10-17-2013, 10:02 PM   #6
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same syllables throughout, pretty cool guys. The topic was stellar
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Old 10-17-2013, 11:48 PM   #7
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i feel like Genocide was sober or at the perfect drunk for writing for his verse
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Old 10-18-2013, 08:20 AM   #8
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My, my gentlemen. This was quite the piece of work here. Alot of people do not understand how much skill it requires to carry one multi through a verse. And then to make two verses that hold a semblence of direction? Thats talent. The flow, as I interpreted it, was very smooth from both writers. The first verse slightly more so than the first. As far as lyricism, I liked the first verse a little more. Just more suited to my preference as far as style. But the second verse did a great job following up, and I really think you did a good job tying this piece together with your final line. On a whole, the chemistry here was nice. Great job guys.

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Old 10-18-2013, 02:44 PM   #9
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genocide is really smart. really liked this. idk what to add.
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Old 10-23-2013, 08:04 PM   #12
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political mastermind, mostly moderate views
i stand to make corrections with a competent few
to flash like orange alerts on metropolitan news
apostles, aloof
plague-resistant, conquering flu
common cold coughing mucus into concepts to puke
from Wisconsin to Utah, 600 block to the Dunes

apartments are an alternate roost
Watched them crash into tunnels that were carpal, and bruise


this was a dope collaboration that didn't disappoint... two writers with 2 different styles exhibiting the same style and you could see still the distinction in differences. black is more passive and introverted with his reflections while adolf is more active extroverted in his phrasing. the same rhyme scheme through out. well done.

i loved that rhyme scheme............
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sick. I love this piece. black altered his style ever so slightly, like just a fraction of a millimeter to match genocides usual swag. the result was incredible. the two best OM writers on the site teaming up. im nominating this piece for the HOF
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Grooviness.

our planet may plummet as comets accrue
but we'll finally be home, y mi casa es su
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^dope, and good wordplay in the last line.

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^this opening section kilt it.

I was satisfied with this production.
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You farfinewgans should have let me in dis manggggg

Felt the ending's from both of you's stood out.
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Felt the ending's from both of you's stood out.
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Thanks, everyone. Dope verse btw, @dead man
Always a pleasure conspiring w/you
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