10-05-2015, 12:04 PM | #1 |
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This My I Love You Then Get Fucked Piece
Ayo,
Until the globe isn't down for spinnin' or time freezes over and we cannot count the minutes I'll continue to leave you astounded princess show you that with love there's no bounds or limits I'd move mountains some clouds few rivers just to prove this to you is all, 'less I'm hand in hand with what's beautiful then it won't make an ounce of difference as I don't care what the future holds if my arms ain't around you in it I'll keep you close in manoeuvre mode as we together move from the moment blissfully coast on emotions to where only us two can go, a place for the truly devoted... Well how things have changed thru the ulterior usage of motives what once mattered has faded shit's vacated all rapid, bitch I'm givin' you back all the crap that your fake ass has gave me maybe in time that'll prevent you from creatin' a pattern, As it's now fuck my life that I say on the daily really wanna touch my wife but she's havin' a baby to another man wants me to understand how her love for me's shady while nursin' this skull in my hands your words are nothin' but bulldust whenever you've sumthin' to share the relationship's caved in we failed to maintain it we've become strangers you cruel slut done drifted let's face it, there's been distance for ages really thought it would kill upon break up 'til I replaced I miss you with hatred after not makin' it last, you were always considered an angel now those feelings are ancient bitch I constantly wish you were strangled maybe disfigured all heinous, or get minced up overtakin' as you stray out and fatally crash I may just hope that your figure's disabled for bein' played in the past yeah, I'll be prayin' for that. |
10-07-2015, 08:23 PM | #2 |
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hahahaha heinous!
"Especially Heinous" - Law an order DUN DUN dah dah dah dah daaaa daaaaa lol eh ex sup homie. this was cool. nice to see somethin different from u. outta ur comfort zone a little so it didn't feel quite up to ur full power but still deec. i know u wrote this pretty fast so im not gonna nitpick, but just wanna say one thing. i think this had good potential but coulda been a lot more dope if the vocab was a little better. just felt a lil basic to me is all. i know the feeling though. u havent written in probly a long time so sometimes it takes a bit to get back into it. i havent been around either and found my first few posts were pretty weak, doesn't take much to get outta the zone, and prob doesn't take much to get back in either. keep posting man, and hit up the cypher too
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10-09-2015, 04:21 AM | #3 | |
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It's always appreciated when you feed bro.. I'll send you sumthin' shortly to collab on yeah...if you wants. I'll also get @ the piece you bumped lol. Stay up Mr. Mapleleaf. |
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10-18-2015, 10:38 AM | #4 |
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Lol I always heard Canada better than America. Never seen or been anywhere in Canada but That's what I've heard....don't know I grew up in northeast, ya know, da baystate
Anyways sorry for posting to copypat when I should be posting feed for exis. Yeah anyways this piece was splendid with a cool approach I thought as well that the vocabulary was high grade and there needs more pieces like this in the open mic
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10-30-2015, 05:57 PM | #5 |
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Great poetry, I love how deep it is, very complex. I love it
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11-01-2015, 05:13 AM | #6 |
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The height of my love for you was Pass Unreachable
The fight to keep it Alive? Marked Unbeatable, So Unique when it came to sex we could make it an Art thats Teachable, Your tempting breasts and butt were so Soft and Squeezable, Indented a couple bite scars on times I Thought they were Raw and Eatable, My face was an open book so Charm and Readable, Always gave you the won when we would quarell Calm and Agreeable, For us to be apart from each other was Not Forseeable, What you did to me was Mad Unbelievable Sad Dispicable Damn Unforgivable, The punishment didn't fit the crime a Charge Unreasonable, No satisfaction in mind Swap UnPleasable a relation Flogged as Seasonal, But I moved on a Path Redeemable so For you to repeat those actions is a Task Unachievable, The ways were parallel equal you Should have known that my Heart is Freezable, Now you are happy with another man while these Dudes are Grinning, Don't bother I'll gladly Seek a New Beginning... |
11-01-2015, 06:28 AM | #7 |
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You know what...your rhymes are dope, not sure why you add onto my shit tho lol...this the second time you've run up in a thread of mine & ain't leave no feed nigga.
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11-01-2015, 09:32 AM | #8 |
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This was a good read and flew was good too..
Good shit mayne. Looking forward to reading more
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11-05-2015, 02:39 PM | #9 |
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Yea shit was nice my G...like the wway you rhyme thru rhymes.. that 1st verse was the best for me.. good shit G
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11-06-2015, 03:04 AM | #10 |
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Gracias...I will return the favor when I is able too.
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