Week 2: Frank (1-0) vs. Sammy (0-0) - FRANK WINS 5-0

Razah · 01-01-2017, 01:49 PM

sammy, first verse i've read from ya I think.

crying for blood; it was a war torn anthem
Johan stood face to face with a one sword Sampson

that was so smooth. the rest was cool, stuck to the topic well, and the sporadic rhyme schemes kept things interesting. cool verse

Frank, typical verse. Kind of impressed you kept the 'same' rhyme scheme through out the whole verse. Even though you switch up syllable counts every now & then, it comes back to be the 'main' rhyme scheme. Hope that makes sense. Narrative was cool too.

Sammy had a great beginning, and it kind of fell apart or wasn't up to par, and Frank was pretty solid over all. Both nailed the topic but Frank's verse was a little more solid to me.

vfrank

01-01-2017, 01:49 PM	#1
Razah rockkFresh Join Date: Apr 2015 Location: Chicago. Posts: 1,088 Battle Record: 8-10 Champed - Art of Writing League Rep Power: 11328542	sammy, first verse i've read from ya I think. crying for blood; it was a war torn anthem Johan stood face to face with a one sword Sampson that was so smooth. the rest was cool, stuck to the topic well, and the sporadic rhyme schemes kept things interesting. cool verse Frank, typical verse. Kind of impressed you kept the 'same' rhyme scheme through out the whole verse. Even though you switch up syllable counts every now & then, it comes back to be the 'main' rhyme scheme. Hope that makes sense. Narrative was cool too. Sammy had a great beginning, and it kind of fell apart or wasn't up to par, and Frank was pretty solid over all. Both nailed the topic but Frank's verse was a little more solid to me. vfrank