03-02-2021, 01:15 AM | #1 |
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PLAYOFFS ROUND ONE: #3 PHARAOHS ARMY vs #14 EVAD DAVE WINS VIA NS
AOWL Season IX PLAYOFFS ROUND ONE
@evaD @Pharaohs Army Verse Due: SUNDAY MARCH 7th @ 11:59 PM EST Line min: 10 Max: 60 Rules:http://www.netcees.org/showthread.php?t=145451[/b] Topic: GOOD LUCK |
03-02-2021, 05:25 PM | #2 |
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Any child of mine is damned, a lamb lead right to the slaughter
following in the footsteps of A man who spent his life treading water Pick any ladder to cling to, they all take you nowhere nice Just choose one that looks furthest from All the snakes and roll the dice Don’t believe when all the teachers try and push you to the top When half the reasons for academia’s to put you in a box A seat at the table, in your cubicle, settle down with a wife emails all day every day will change your Outlook on life Think of all things lost with the innocence of kids And Consider this, The greatest lesson learned in life: ignorance is bliss
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03-06-2021, 11:00 AM | #3 |
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03-07-2021, 09:18 PM | #4 |
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can i take a 24 hr ext?
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03-07-2021, 10:20 PM | #5 |
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03-09-2021, 01:12 PM | #6 |
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Well Dave I know you signed up as a favor to me but unfortunately you’re moving on to the next round lol
I really liked your piece, albeit it’s a little short (know you’re busy with the Retort league and what not it’s all good) the first four lines were a perfect start and really resonated with me a lot. One of the biggest things in topicals is being able to put your audience into your story and I felt like I was in the main characters shoes here. Thought the biggest fault here was that you didn’t flesh it out more as I stated before, it was great, great and then suddenly ended, obviously you’ve got some prowess for topical writing, never seen you do it so I was pleasantly surprised great work here |
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Overall, I enjoyed reading this. It was quick, compacted, and filled with solid wordplay.
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