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Old 01-12-2021, 10:42 AM   #1
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Old 01-12-2021, 11:35 AM   #2
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You’re always the last in competitions until I close your casket.
As far as value? I’m mint condition and you’re open plastic.
Blue light, the way I’m cooking him, it’s like I see him as fresh meat.
Cuz after I spend the night w/ his girl he’ll have to use one of those on the bed sheet.
He keeps acting hard, but he’s softer than cloth you can sew in a fabric.
Because blue constantly stinks up the place like mold in the attic.
We ain’t in the same pedigree, you beating me would be a true shocker.
Fuck evictions I barricade doors, that’s a fucking blue, blocker.
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Old 01-12-2021, 10:31 PM   #4
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Do you mean a black light you fat fucking loser??


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still livin’ w/ mom & dad because of “debt repayment”
on NC you’re a Low Level Boarder. in real life you rent the basement
Dia wasn’t a dumb enough name to come out of ya mouth?!
cool alias tho, perfect for when they finally kick you outta the house
too embarrassed to have ppl over for some chow & grub
when it comes to feeding frenzy’s never able to stop eating around his chums
nothin’ but a slimy swamp guy with a tiny cock size
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Old 01-12-2021, 10:41 PM   #5
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Eviction I say this sincerely but I didn’t think this verse was good. Along with mixing blue light up with black light that punch didn’t say shit. Mold in the attic was some generic shit and after that nothing was really noteworthy

Can tell Blue went pretty easy here feeding frenzies was a decent wp opener was decent and though the Eviction line is low hanging fruit but I enjoyed it overall Blue got this and it wasn’t even close imo

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Old 01-12-2021, 10:44 PM   #6
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Eviction was easy reading, blue light line was decent, gonna give you a pass on calling it blue instead of black because I get what you meant. Everything else was super simple and light, and the closer was a no.

Blue had a nice key. Basement was cool and kicked out of the house was a nice play on the name. Feeding frenzy’s isn’t my cup of tea and rock climbing was lol. Nice key right there

Blue got this comfy.
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UV and blue light lamps enable crime scene investigators and forensic labs to see fingerprints that were developed with fluorescent materials. When exposed to UV or blue light sources, bodily fluids and fluorescent-treated blood samples glow brightly and become easy to view.

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Fair. Used to the term black light. But I gave you a pass either way because I understood it fam.
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Old 01-12-2021, 10:52 PM   #9
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blues opener was enough
why would he use any light on the sheets?
stink up the place was horrible, just no
how many times do you think he’s seen blue blocker?

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Fair. Used to the term black light. But I gave you a pass either way because I understood it fam.
both is used in forensics black light just produces more light or whatever, thanks for voting though.
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Old 01-12-2021, 11:07 PM   #12
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Blue's opener destroyed.

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You’re always the last in competitions until I close your casket.
As far as value? I’m mint condition and you’re open plastic.

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Blue light, the way I’m cooking him, it’s like I see him as fresh meat.
Cuz after I spend the night w/ his girl he’ll have to use one of those on the bed sheet.

Blue light is good concept but wrong approach here.. could have been better with some other execution

He keeps acting hard, but he’s softer than cloth you can sew in a fabric.
Because blue constantly stinks up the place like mold in the attic.

Metaphors there just not hitting

We ain’t in the same pedigree, you beating me would be a true shocker.
Fuck evictions I barricade doors, that’s a fucking blue, blocker.

I'm not getting this here

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still livin’ w/ mom & dad because of “debt repayment”
on NC you’re a Low Level Boarder. in real life you rent the basement

Cool

Dia wasn’t a dumb enough name to come out of ya mouth?!
cool alias tho, perfect for when they finally kick you outta the house

Eh

too embarrassed to have ppl over for some chow & grub
when it comes to feeding frenzy’s never able to stop eating around his chums

Ok

nothin’ but a slimy swamp guy with a tiny cock size
ex let him down gently but it takes the whole staff everytime he rock climbs

Oka

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Fuck evictions I barricade doors, that’s a fucking blue, blocker.


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if you're talking about blue blocker, those are those glasses that are suppose to protect your eyes or whatever, and they're supposed to help people that have trouble sleeping, they block blue lights from screens and shit so if your on your computer/phone all day if you wear them an hour before bed time it should help you sleep better.

congrats blue you got me.
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Eviction -

opener was cool, kinda statementy, blue light was cool, wasnt a fan of much after that, but it read well, i dont wanna short you on that - multi's were there, rhyme scheme was good, just didnt HIT for me.

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idk who dia is, kinda learning as i go in this match but it seems like a real solid personal with the basement line from what I'm gathering here, feeding frenzy was ok, alias line was bang, closer was cool/but kinda lukewarm as an ending, i might've switched the order up a bit but that's just me dude

still, handily giving this to Blue
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Blue got it. Though that LLB concepts familiar, it still had impact here in this case
chums hit too
Evic you put bars together well enough, flips are light imo
Blue np was ok

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You’re always the last in competitions until I close your casket.
As far as value? I’m mint condition and you’re open plastic.
this is light but reads nice. Nothing really interesting, unexpected etc here
Blue light, the way I’m cooking him, it’s like I see him as fresh meat.
Cuz after I spend the night w/ his girl he’ll have to use one of those on the bed sheet.
'blue light' is so far removed from the punchline the bar feels a bit disjointed. Not a bad concept but execution isn't great
He keeps acting hard, but he’s softer than cloth you can sew in a fabric.
Because blue constantly stinks up the place like mold in the attic.
I'm all for ridiculous end rhymes but 'sew in a fabric' makes me wonder if anyone else reads setups. Feels like a complete waste. Could be used to prime the reader for the punch instead of being unrelated, existing only for the rhyme
We ain’t in the same pedigree, you beating me would be a true shocker.
Fuck evictions I barricade doors, that’s a fucking blue, blocker.
my understanding of blue blocker is that they're the glasses that block blue light? I don't see how it's related at all aside from blue and blocker being able to fit next to each other and make grammatical sense



Do you mean a black light you fat fucking loser??
well this doesn't feel kosher... I know you didn't mean anything by it but people have been dq'd for less

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on NC you’re a Low Level Boarder. in real life you rent the basement
considering I haven't read a dia bar in a minute I could be wrong, but this is a pretty fresh use of the personal angles
Dia wasn’t a dumb enough name to come out of ya mouth?!
cool alias tho, perfect for when they finally kick you outta the house
okay
too embarrassed to have ppl over for some chow & grub
when it comes to feeding frenzy’s never able to stop eating around his chums
this is light to me, but I respect the consistency within the verse of not doing a bar about him having no friends.
nothin’ but a slimy swamp guy with a tiny cock size
ex let him down gently but it takes the whole staff everytime he rock climbs
gone


Blue had stronger bars with the opener and closer. Props to dia for not making a stink about the blue light stuff

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Blue opener and 2nd bar sealed the W here. Sheesh, lol.
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You’re always the last in competitions until I close your casket.
As far as value? I’m mint condition and you’re open plastic.
setup is pure irony. punch is cool to me. nice comparison bar.
Blue light, the way I’m cooking him, it’s like I see him as fresh meat.
Cuz after I spend the night w/ his girl he’ll have to use one of those on the bed sheet.
its definitely a black light. i can kinda give u credit for the light itself being bluish black, but this is still a stretch
He keeps acting hard, but he’s softer than cloth you can sew in a fabric.
Because blue constantly stinks up the place like mold in the attic.
punch is ok, well worded. concept is very light. you stink like mold?
We ain’t in the same pedigree, you beating me would be a true shocker.
Fuck evictions I barricade doors, that’s a fucking blue, blocker.
nah on this
Quotes: opener
Close: blue light, mold

Being a little generous but I like the development I see in your verse. Not the greatest concepts but your writing has gotten better.

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on NC you’re a Low Level Boarder. in real life you rent the basement
haha. nice comp bar
Dia wasn’t a dumb enough name to come out of ya mouth?!
cool alias tho, perfect for when they finally kick you outta the house
initially hit light to me, but you did a good job setting up the parents angle in the opener. enough of a twist to make this work
too embarrassed to have ppl over for some chow & grub
when it comes to feeding frenzy’s never able to stop eating around his chums
see the wp, but ill pass on this
nothin’ but a slimy swamp guy with a tiny cock size
ex let him down gently but it takes the whole staff everytime he rock climbs
not feeling this one either
Quotes: opener, kick you out

You let off the gas in the second half but your opener was strong enough.

Vote: Blue Bayou Closer than I would have expected but in a 4 bar battle any misses hurt a lot. Blue has strong fundamentals and opened with a really well written bar. He didn't do a lot after that, but all of Evictions hits were light. Battle really boils down to opener vs opener and Blue's was better.
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