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Old 03-02-2021, 10:31 PM   #1
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In the words of Kurt Cobain before he gave his shotgun a taste...
"They laugh at me because I'm different; I laugh at them because they're all the same"
You drop letters, great... just make sure they are a lot better paced
Cuz you can get scarred Overeem-marks like Brock Lesnar's face
I'll stoop to your level like a staircase, you left in a stupor
You droppin' fast, oxygen masks... I increase the cabin pressure like Uber
I guess future me saw a disaster and did some recon after
Don't know if I fly by the seat of my pants or just have my jeans on backwards...
Now we've established some ground rules - Stay the course on the double bitch
Cuz only thing around the necks bend is the rope I hung you with
Insignificant vets, you couldn't make waves with a boat engine that revs
It's so simple and yet... I'll smack ya boy-n'-see a slow ripple effect
Knock ya dentures loose for years, who compares to the most ruthless here?
Won by skin of your teeth, but I'll keep those new veneers as souvenirs
The teacher's now the student, weird; I should speak on how you lose bitch
But when it comes to that shit? Catfish - I can't bring myself to do it
You got a cool sig in store... tragic you can't call it humidor nothing...
Believe me buddy, I don't have to be intuit to see it coming...
Some figures of speech are unheard of; I can't recall my statements off-hand
But compared to you I'm more of a physicist than a shaken pop can
You flake out on me like dandruff, seasoned vets think confetti just fell
Now I bet you'll speak out of turn like a GPS redirecting itself
Hang tight like BTK's victims, the story's told when you're down and out
But you're not privy to that whole phallus, see? Like a glory hole in an outhouse
Loud mouths... Give us a topic and you'll find it awfully quiet
I'll just drop the knife in 'til you pulsate like a zombie's diet
"Nothing shocks me these days" Silence. I'll hit ya with a taser zap
Too bad punchlines are lost on you like generation alpha with paper maps
We sift through everything you're a Borat... Topicals, technique, the battle scene
You're the black face of Halloween - That's an Ali G analogy
Gun bars? Capital idea... At least that's the agreement
I get lowercase smacking the keys quick - You get lower case I actually mean it
You could do an about face like a pic battle and still clone bars instantly
You just another awful mini me with thin range like close proximity
I lockdown hierarchies; You use an El Camino to hunt in the streets
But to me, one elk a mean no hunger for weeks
In the throws of a fit like judo gi's, frail bones will break when the arm sets
And throwing down the gauntlets... me concentrate on the large threats
Used to command respect, but I know you lost all your fight bro
Cuz in retrospect you're all Jaded... just like The Tonight Show
You can put your neck on the line like tracheostomy valves on a phone...
But I just don't think being humble abode well... like a home
This is no game, my art craves attention - I'm making it known
You mad? Gotta be Stark raven though if you see yourself taking the throan
Hate to break it to you like a shiv... Although you might deceive most
We on netcees know you're a downright square upstart like a cheat code
That's how your relationship broke... man you damaged it good
Now you wait on her hand and foot like how half-shipped mannequins stood
At a standstill and shook; I can't compete with what your bipolar mind delivers
I can tell you all the reasons that I'm sicker but melting polar ice is quicker
That split personality shows your lack of talent's in question
Then your duality's mentioned... Either way y'all co-worst like invalid confessions
Dig in ya heels like wrestlers; Showing up every week in a season's rare
You could fix a broken steering wheel and still couldn't say ya be-prepared
I hear you chomping at the bit like Pacman for whatever I may reveal
I take in all your bull, dozing off... but still can't level the playing field
Had it up to here with your daily speils, none of them with a shadow of truth
I'm up on my pedestal with a chateau view... that's how I shat over you
Now you're stuck in a rut, Snyder cut, I won't just clown on you once
Based on where I left your carcass, you SHOULD be down in the dumps
I'll buy a vowel; I have a consonant stutter when my mouth doesn't shut
Don't know if I took my talons down south or an owl just lunged...
I Mother Earth? I'm OTHER earth - All you nerds eat my dust
All that terror-forming mars your work quicker than Elon Musk
Delivery's not up to snuff, like a still born one month shy
Enough's enough; Y'all can't rhyme unless you build toward a punchline
Layouts barely align, bars are paced with no rhythmic signs
Lines aren't clearly defined, like a parking space in the winter time
Your pre-writtens are in high demand? Ehh, maybe on paper
But these victims of mine I hide 'em and... save them for later
That's staying in your favor... What I tap into ain't that simple
Each line has more panes-taking detail than stained glass windows
Been washed since I met you; Droplets are forming, all of it's normal
You got ya head in the clouds, brainstorming... Sorry I have no taller-rinse for you
All the bravado on this forum is not something I have to retort to
Cuz when standing before you all you have to say is, "Small world"...

... of course dude.
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Old 03-05-2021, 03:16 PM   #2
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 03-05-2021, 05:25 PM   #3
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so this is what you’ve been up to


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Old 03-06-2021, 11:24 AM   #4
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If mentioned in a discussion its who'd still use wordy lines and act all dope
Then again hes had this schtick so long he like bb da bb da bb thats all folks
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Old 03-08-2021, 07:54 PM   #5
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Super impressive imo. Bb plz say the bb hating

It ranged from really dope/clever wordplay to very cringy bad wordplay. But there’s literally no way to write something this long without a few misses. Bravo dude.
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Old 03-08-2021, 09:12 PM   #6
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In the words of Kurt Cobain before he gave his shotgun a taste...
"They laugh at me because I'm different; I laugh at them because they're all the same"
nice opening

Knock ya dentures loose for years, who compares to the most ruthless here?
Won by skin of your teeth, but I'll keep those new veneers as souvenirs
this was nice to me

Some figures of speech are unheard of; I can't recall my statements off-hand
But compared to you I'm more of a physicist than a shaken pop can
haha. kinda corny but i like it

You flake out on me like dandruff, seasoned vets think confetti just fell
Now I bet you'll speak out of turn like a GPS redirecting itself
GPS is nice

"Nothing shocks me these days" Silence. I'll hit ya with a taser zap
Too bad punchlines are lost on you like generation alpha with paper maps
cool concept

Used to command respect, but I know you lost all your fight bro
Cuz in retrospect you're all Jaded... just like The Tonight Show
cool

This is no game, my art craves attention - I'm making it known
You mad? Gotta be Stark raven though if you see yourself taking the throne
nice

That's how your relationship broke... man you damaged it good
Now you wait on her hand and foot like how half-shipped mannequins stood
wording is a little rough but cool concept

At a standstill and shook; I can't compete with what your bipolar mind delivers
I can tell you all the reasons that I'm sicker but melting polar ice is quicker
ok

I hear you chomping at the bit like Pacman for whatever I may reveal
I take in all your bull, dozing off... but still can't level the playing field
ok

I'll buy a vowel; I have a consonant stutter when my mouth doesn't shut
Don't know if I took my talons down south or an owl just lunged...
haha. this is cool

I Mother Earth? I'm OTHER earth - All you nerds eat my dust
All that terror-forming mars your work quicker than Elon Musk
this is forced but i still like the concept

Delivery's not up to snuff, like a still born one month shy
Enough's enough; Y'all can't rhyme unless you build toward a punchline
Layouts barely align, bars are paced with no rhythmic signs
Lines aren't clearly defined, like a parking space in the winter time
Your pre-writtens are in high demand? Ehh, maybe on paper
But these victims of mine I hide 'em and... save them for later
That's staying in your favor... What I tap into ain't that simple
Each line has more panes-taking detail than stained glass windows
shade

All the bravado on this forum is not something I have to retort to
Cuz when standing before you all you have to say is, "Small world"...

... of course dude.
cool closer
Interesting styleblending. Some of the wp was forced but generally clever punchlines and some creative concepts. Cool seeing you do a battle style verse.
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Old 03-13-2021, 10:01 AM   #7
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Thiswas pretty fun to read. Real creative man. Props
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Old 03-15-2021, 12:15 PM   #8
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lots of good drops of names places taht sort of thing general rhyme dope dude i liked the length it really fit in my mood i got bi-polar so its def my ish man thanks dude keep it up
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