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Old 01-19-2021, 02:31 AM   #1
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Her ego took a hit when I up and left
She thought the world of me and nothing less
Would have gave her all for love and yet...
Her favorite reaction was to rush a text
Dial my number, hang up, and call again
Never knew the problem she was falling in
Checked Facebook and her Twitter following
Her Insta numbers, Onlyfans, then called again
The voicemail is full, too many IM's to the inbox
All I ever hear is her crying over this THOT
That thought, whatever comes to mind is lost.
My issue with her is her lying through lipgloss
Making up irrational tales trying to save face
Imagine the actions entailed when she gave chase
How she rationed & scaled unconditional weight gain
Pursued fashionable fails claiming the game changed
She knew it didn't but had her mind twisted online
Blogging pictures getting her highs lifted off hype.
It's easy whenever there's a line with it drawing lies
Every thirsty fool will be quick to try quipping on like....
"You so sick with it" "She a boss, damn she the hottest thing"
Bada boom, bada bing but for me she's always dropping in
She's gotta think how to keep my attention on the brink...
Of insanity or is it vanity? Who has time to process that?
All I know is she's hoping that she'll get that ol' thing back
She'll be able to live well and will let the day continue
All she might want is attention but is that what J's into?
Nah. But how do you avoid a broad that waits and waits
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Saying she will miss you
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Old 01-21-2021, 11:46 PM   #2
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Sound like you got a maniac on your hands ole boy. Good luck with that. Those are hard to get rid of even once youve decided to. Real shit. Pz bruh
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Old 04-05-2021, 09:32 AM   #3
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this was pretty good. more than anything there was a bit of topical (not writing to topics 'topical') wisdom in this. you don't know what you've got 'til it's gone and all that. good rhythm, ain't feel too forced, some immediately relevant commentary. props.
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Old 04-13-2021, 12:44 AM   #4
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Dope.

Dial my number, hang up, and call again
Never knew the problem she was falling in
Checked Facebook and her Twitter following
Her Insta numbers, Onlyfans, then called again

Effortless, really. Solid execution sir
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Old 04-18-2021, 10:40 AM   #5
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U don’t need that h0
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