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Old 11-22-2020, 09:04 PM   #1
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Old 11-23-2020, 04:46 AM   #2
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Old 11-23-2020, 04:04 PM   #3
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The schism; FOCUS -- riPPING OCEANS -- KISS tHE NOTION
RIPPING DOPE SHIT..ONLY TIME EVICTION -- NOTICE -- IS A SHOTGUN BLAST FROM THE LAND--LORD--
I'm coming with dopest free's; the hopeless seas; soaken dreams --
FOCUS PLEASE -- I'll 'BREAK BREAD" -- to ''TEAR/TEAR'' apart your broken dreams
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DESPAIR AND GRIEF -- only time 'you grew' is wheat and MEAT/
I'm coming with hopeless dreams; the hopeless dreams --
SOAP AND CLEAN; EVACUATING EVICTION -- LIKE MOVING HOUSES --
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Old 11-23-2020, 04:26 PM   #5
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Oh shit Sinacog hit ‘em with the flow switch up on this one
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hey Aj The Menace,

You don’t even get to the low hanging fruit, I had classics and buried the top.
So it’s funny when I get the clean sweep cuz ur people usually carry the mop.
I hope he realizes it’s fucking over, I never want to see this autistic text again.
If you want your verses to be the enchilada they have to be authentic, mexican.
Fuck punches, that w/p will go over your head, and have you looking envious.
He doesn't have either, instead of a diss this idiot will quote the book of genesis.
You can’t take care of yourself, accepting this battle is the craziest penance.
Zuch must think I’m George Wilson, the way he’s making me babysit menace.
You said you're dope as fuck but like your fuckin religion you’re full of empty lies.
How did I draw this match? You put me in the gutter and I ate this kid like pennywise.
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Old 11-24-2020, 11:31 AM   #7
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Eviction

Opener and closer were your best attempts but nothing blew me away. Nicely written verse though man

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Old 11-26-2020, 04:44 AM   #8
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The schism; FOCUS -- riPPING OCEANS -- KISS tHE NOTION
RIPPING DOPE SHIT..ONLY TIME EVICTION -- NOTICE -- IS A SHOTGUN BLAST FROM THE LAND--LORD--
doesn't rhyme but at least you attempted something similar to a punch. technically a gunplay bar even.
I'm coming with dopest free's; the hopeless seas; soaken dreams --
FOCUS PLEASE -- I'll 'BREAK BREAD" -- to ''TEAR/TEAR'' apart your broken dreams
break/tear wp is pretty sad but its something.
I'm coming with dopes frees; the hopeless seas; hopeless dreams --
DESPAIR AND GRIEF -- only time 'you grew' is wheat and MEAT/
those are things that grow. cool story bro
I'm coming with hopeless dreams; the hopeless dreams --
SOAP AND CLEAN; EVACUATING EVICTION -- LIKE MOVING HOUSES --
i don't think you understand how evictions work tbh
I'm the cutest mouse kid -- the shooting spout mist
THE COOL OF OUNCES -- only time I need 'EVICTION' is moving HOUSES --
at least your referencing your oponent and using related concepts.
So sinacog seems to be attempting to merge his troll writing style with basic battling concepts. I could see this being humorous if there was some cleverness mixed in but for now its painful to read. Less painful than the sword of destiny tho, so an improvement.


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You don’t even get to the low hanging fruit, I had classics and buried the top.
So it’s funny when I get the clean sweep cuz ur people usually carry the mop.
very light. you sweep with a broom btw
I hope he realizes it’s fucking over, I never want to see this autistic text again.
If you want your verses to be the enchilada they have to be authentic, mexican.
this is stretched to me/wording is off
Fuck punches, that w/p will go over your head, and have you looking envious.
He doesn't have either, instead of a diss this idiot will quote the book of genesis.
statement. need more wit or a flip.
You can’t take care of yourself, accepting this battle is the craziest penance.
Zuch must think I’m George Wilson, the way he’s making me babysit menace.
bad wording. ok concept.
You said you're dope as fuck but like your fuckin religion you’re full of empty lies.
How did I draw this match? You put me in the gutter and I ate this kid like pennywise.
this is ok. you should have set up the IT reference, i had to look this up. who the fuck remembers that clowns name
This feels like you were phoning it in vs sinacog, but this a pretty light verse. closer was decent.

Vote: Eviction. You could have tried harder tbh but its cool. Don't let Sinacog catch you sleeping bruh.
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Old 11-26-2020, 06:22 AM   #9
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Vote eviction


Menace line was cool. Penny wise was a nice little reference.

Did what you had to do.

Sin. God bless you buddy.
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Eviction got this

Sinacog getting better tho I am shocked
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Old 11-26-2020, 03:36 PM   #11
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First... @fraze.... Practically everyone knows who pennywise is. If he set up the line anymore than that hed be dumbing down the verse too much


Eviction wins. No real stand outs but he organized thoughts. Which is more than I can say for sinacog. The decent eviction nameplays were surrounded by lines like you were having a stroke

Eviction... Keep on keeping on. There's potential here. I can see that from the roast lines alone. Kind of a soft verse here but i imagine its uninspiring battling someone we arent even sure is being serious
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Old 11-26-2020, 04:04 PM   #12
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Eviction got this
Nothing really stood out but way better attempts.. opener was all right but the sweep/broom thing's been done a ton..
Sin always got them multies.. but they're never delivered with a punch.. keep going though dude you'll get it one day.. as for this though my vote is definitely too eviction
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Old 11-29-2020, 02:22 PM   #13
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The schism; FOCUS -- riPPING OCEANS -- KISS tHE NOTION
RIPPING DOPE SHIT..ONLY TIME EVICTION -- NOTICE -- IS A SHOTGUN BLAST FROM THE LAND--LORD--
I'm coming with dopest free's; the hopeless seas; soaken dreams --
FOCUS PLEASE -- I'll 'BREAK BREAD" -- to ''TEAR/TEAR'' apart your broken dreams
I'm coming with dopes frees; the hopeless seas; hopeless dreams --
DESPAIR AND GRIEF -- only time 'you grew' is wheat and MEAT/
I'm coming with hopeless dreams; the hopeless dreams --
SOAP AND CLEAN; EVACUATING EVICTION -- LIKE MOVING HOUSES --
I'm the cutest mouse kid -- the shooting spout mist
THE COOL OF OUNCES -- only time I need 'EVICTION' is moving HOUSES --


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You don’t even get to the low hanging fruit, I had classics and buried the top.
So it’s funny when I get the clean sweep cuz ur people usually carry the mop.
Kinda funny
I hope he realizes it’s fucking over, I never want to see this autistic text again.
If you want your verses to be the enchilada they have to be authentic, mexican.
Ehhhh
Fuck punches, that w/p will go over your head, and have you looking envious.
He doesn't have either, instead of a diss this idiot will quote the book of genesis.
This made me lol
You can’t take care of yourself, accepting this battle is the craziest penance.
Zuch must think I’m George Wilson, the way he’s making me babysit menace.
I get the dennis reference, but maybe im missing menace wp. As written its ok
You said you're dope as fuck but like your fuckin religion you’re full of empty lies.
How did I draw this match? You put me in the gutter and I ate this kid like pennywise.
Ok


This was a bye week so i'm not gonna truly judge your verse. 5.5/10

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Fuck punches, that w/p will go over your head, and have you looking envious.
He doesn't have either, instead of a diss this idiot will quote the book of genesis.


Vote: Eviction


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Old 11-29-2020, 06:31 PM   #14
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Voting just to vote.

Eviction won. I think he’s got a solid writing style, when he pushes it. The pennywise closer was solid. Opener was well worded too.

Sinacog is hilarious. He’s also not a real person.
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