01-24-2018, 04:32 AM | #1 |
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Infiltration vs. Problumatic - INFILTRATION WINS
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Check ins are encouraged but not mandatory. Also, swaying/biting/recycling is a DQ FAILURE TO VOTE ON 3 BATTLES IS A DQ. NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE!!! YOU WILL BE DISQUALIFIED. VOTE ON 3 BATTLES OR YOU LOSE. SIMPLE! THERE’S BEEN A LOT OF COMPLAINTS ABOUT VOTING RECENTLY, IF THERE IS SOMEONE WHO YOU DON’T WANT TO VOTE IN YOUR BATTLE YOU MUST STATE THEIR NAME IN YOUR CHECK IN. IF IT’S A CRAZY AMOUNT OF PEOPLE THEN SORRY YOU’RE JUST A BITCH AND ALL VOTES WILL COUNT. AS PER ORC @Infiltration @Problumatic |
01-24-2018, 04:37 AM | #2 |
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01-25-2018, 01:50 AM | #4 |
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See, your TASK FOR WINNINGS BASIC, ya’ TACTICS WILL LIMIT GREATNESS/ ATTACKING FROM DISTANCE .. damn .. what a ‘PASSIVE INFILTRATION’/ got the MASK THAT FITTED JASON, get ‘wrecked’ ‘OVER PASSIN’ LIMITATION /(overpass) So he ‘skipping the next drive’ like a MADDEN SIMULATION/ Claiming this SOWN UP, but you couldn’t leave ‘AERO WINDED’/ Ya not ‘dynamic’ don’t ‘BOW UP’ cause’ AERO DID IT’/(Arrow) Soon as this CHUMP CALLED it’s ‘border’ death, its ‘civil hatred’/ cause I don’t need TRUMPS WALLS just to END INFILTRATION/ Get ya FLESH RIPPED WIDE like I’m a PETRIFIED ROTTY/ I don’t need FORENSIC FINDS, to IDENTIFY this BODY/ Get ELECTRIFIED and ya INTESTINES FRIED PROBABLY/ you the type to ‘steal lines’ .. thats a TECH DEVICE ROBBERY/ You a “King”? Nah a “Pawn” and tonight(KNIGHT) I might KICK IN HIS TOOTH/ His “Queen” get SLIPPED WIT the ‘ROOF’ like she was “BISHOP” IN JUICE/ I’m QUICK to INTRUDE, VICIOUS and I’m MISSIN’ A SCREW/ That’s why i’ll end his life chapter like RELIGIOUS DISPUTES/ Last edited by Problumatic; 01-25-2018 at 01:52 AM. |
01-25-2018, 10:54 PM | #5 |
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THOSE ODD LINES STRETCHED, & the agreement was NOT QUITE MET/
Trollin this nerd, thx for the verse.. but I aint went THAT far back in the ARCHIVES YET/ P QUICKLY FAILS, begged to be ina newb tourney, lol I WISH EM WELL/ Die INA SPELL..& after you passport'll be what I give you on ya TRIP TO HELL/ Fuck that I'm on a mission.. draw a piece for ya set; that's a composition 100 round thompson bangin til ya skin on the drum, shit's a conga session Ya bae? had it wit her pal...my boys sandwich'd at the house Bitch was being dugout between two bodies longer than the panama canal We pissed on your slut, sticky as fuuuck, all over her ass Since she had the mouth of a sailor we gave her a peacoat to match Call it camp hazing fam, aim the can & you take flight son For thinkin u an imaginary monster trustt this'll be no fake snipe hunt Dont believe in gun violence? u see mine & turn ghost, faggot It's soo tragic how livin in black & white got u dying from achromatic. Influx in now Inf lucks out. dogg u show NO typa skill to me Ya chances of winning is zero &&& chalk that up to low probability.
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01-26-2018, 12:09 AM | #6 |
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Problumm.. I aint seen a verse in that format since long bar sites back in '08 lol. still tho.. for what its worth that trump wall/end infiltration shit was actually dope. problum is thats all I was rlly feelin..
Infiltrate u had sum good hits.. the panama line was nice, opener was cool.. n thats all u rlly needed for this one. V/infiltrate |
01-26-2018, 12:37 AM | #7 |
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Prob,.liked the way you used your multis mixed with the punch lines, and using word play also. The Trump line was cool, the passive line was nice too,.decent name.flips thru out.
Infiltrate...talking about g.f lines are old as fuck. The composition line was ok. Not much popping with multis or anything that really caught my eye. Punch's- prob Multis-prob Word play-prob Personals - n/a VOTE=Prob. His verse was.actually.geared toward his opponent without generic lines that can be used on anyone. |
01-26-2018, 12:41 AM | #8 |
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I’d actually agree with El, both sides were a lil meh, structure, flow, multis a lil shaky on both sides.. the panama canal line was I guess the best line out of the battle but the set up and content of the punch killed it, too generic.. Prob at least geared his verse to his opponent and had some decent nameflips, trump wall line was decent but could of been worded to rhyme better and flow smoother.. overall slight edge to Prob..
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All this capitalization and slashes and shit is just a distraction from your verse.. if your rhymes are solid, then you shouldn't need to caps them to point them out -- it'll have more effect on your reader if the rhyme comes together naturally as they read it. On the same note -- explaining your wordplay in brackets at the end of the line shows that the wordplay ain't good in the first place. The wordplay should speak for itself -- it be more effective as I read it and see how you constructed it. You never see battle rappers wshipering their wordplay into the mic after they spit their bar. It's just amateur. As far as content goes, your passive infiltration line doesn't make sense. Madden line sounds cool but I don't get how "skipping the next drive" is a diss to your opponent. Arrow line.. I mean, I get that a bow and arrow go together, but I don't follow the context. Trump's Wall line was actually really cool. I don't like the identify body line, seems like a throwaway. Steal lines is played. Bishop line is cool. Closer is a throwaway. Couple cool lines, but overdone execution and a lot of filler. Inf The opener clowning on his style coulda been a lot funnier -- could've really got outlandish and made it look stupid. Conga session is a cool opener -- a lot at work in it. Panama Canal is dope. Peacoat is sickening lol but cool. Fake snipe hunt -- not hitting for me, I loved the setup though and was expecting a harsh punch and it was a bit of a letdown for me. Achromatic is cool wp. Low Probability is a dope name flip Vote -- Inf
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Yo are we in the ez board days again? That format. Jesus Christ. That verse was horrid. It reads old it’s hard to read. It’s played. Wow this is 2018 Inf. Opener and Panama Canal were nice. Panama Canal was sickkkk Vote inf easy
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@Problumatic I can tell you've got skill as that verse was well crafted in the style that it's in. If you want to make the transition into short bar effectively then just have a set up and punch in each couplet. Replace the carried on schemes with internals and have the set up relate to the punch. Drop the caps and explaining. You'll be winning here in no time. Hit me up if you want any help transitioning. Skipping the next drive was a clever twist and the trump line was cool -- needs to be worded harder. Make the most out of your concepts.
Inf, conga line was nice. Pea coat line was funny as fuck. Closer was cool. Panama canal made me do the screw face. Overall pretty damn fire verse. Well done. Overall Inf wins |
01-27-2018, 01:46 PM | #13 |
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01-27-2018, 04:27 PM | #16 |
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Probl has alot of potiental. Alot of what your doing is outdated in ref to image. we will catch your multis w.out having to Cap them. the slashes at the end for people can be a breaker as well. U had a few decent punches, but many were not passable tho. very outdated. Read some verses & take some advice, u'll get it. trust.
Infil panama canal line was fiya. I usually don't quote too many bish violation bars but u & bar dropped 2 that made me not dred so much reading them now & days. mvgt- @Infiltration |
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THOSE ODD LINES STRETCHED, & the agreement was NOT QUITE MET/ Trollin this nerd, thx for the verse.. but I aint went THAT far back in the ARCHIVES YET/ P QUICKLY FAILS, begged to be ina newb tourney, lol I WISH EM WELL/ Die INA SPELL..& after you passport'll be what I give you on ya TRIP TO HELL/ Parody so i'll say its cool Fuck that I'm on a mission.. draw a piece for ya set; that's a composition 100 round thompson bangin til ya skin on the drum, shit's a conga session Graphic Ya bae? had it wit her pal...my boys sandwich'd at the house Bitch was being dugout between two bodies longer than the panama canal Leave this nigga alone inf We pissed on your slut, sticky as fuuuck, all over her ass Since she had the mouth of a sailor we gave her a peacoat to match Lol Call it camp hazing fam, aim the can & you take flight son For thinkin u an imaginary monster trustt this'll be no fake snipe hunt Eh Dont believe in gun violence? u see mine & turn ghost, faggot It's soo tragic how livin in black & white got u dying from achromatic. Eh Influx in now Inf lucks out. dogg u show NO typa skill to me Ya chances of winning is zero &&& chalk that up to low probability. Solid V bitch ass infiltration Your not trash prob but some of it was reaching. |
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