04-04-2016, 06:12 AM | #1 |
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Artifice 0-1 vs Joe Boston 0-0 - ARTIFICE WINS
NBL Season 9 Due THURSDAY Minimum - 10 lines Max - 20 lines Line limit can increase if both agree NO biting NO swaying NO feeding NO recycling You must check in Don't edit after your opponent has posted 2nd person to post can't edit after the first vote comes in Don't be an idiot You MUST vote on all battles & post your links in the Voting Thread Don't use your opponent's pic unless it's a pic battle Agree on a line limit May God have mercy on your souls @Artifice @Joe Boston |
04-05-2016, 08:31 AM | #3 |
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check... let's go 12.
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04-05-2016, 12:19 PM | #4 |
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sent my 12 to Orc, good luck...
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04-05-2016, 05:58 PM | #5 |
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Your chick said Joe i hate when you drink your voilent and dont act the same
Gave her two choices get a nice Buzzer Beater then bitch spoke to me during the Villanova game You never tame pussy so smashing theres not a shot in the dark After i pop a Cork, Screw you call ur wife to tell her your having a blast at the Six Flags Theme Park No sparks flying out the barrel of the gun can tell you the type that never shoots Searching for Prey? Only call yourself a Hunter cuz you'd probably rock the fuck out a pair of Womens boots Broke as fuck hes been taking commutes on public transportation for years If someone asked if he loved the new Metro look fag would trim his eyebrows and fix his hair Not a care in the world if i slapped him i bet America would love to witness an open hand Go ahead and tell everyone he fights for his Country fag has proof from all his pictures of the Zach Brown Band Funny how u plan ur living conditions and sex life dumb fuck aint doing logical thinking When ur desperate think "X gon gonna give it to ya" thats cuz she looks like Melissa Mccarthy lip syncing @Orc @Artifice open for votes |
04-05-2016, 07:30 PM | #6 |
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u got a David Spade steez, i rock Chris Farley the whole verse
put u below turf with the Tommy Boy... it's a joy to show Joe Dirt this place of text makes u vexed, u straight up stressed dude at times more of a whiner than North Carolina... lettin' the Paige upset u some sage advice, u think u throw heat but u ain't that nice 3 strikes Boston's out, my shit's money like David... cuz J paid the Price JB's starves for a win but only stomachs more defeat cuz A&W sounds better... plus it's another place he can't afford to eat Rip Torn's what i've done to u, take u back to school again & teach this Average Joe like Dodgeball legend Patches O'Houlihan on thin ice, Boston Bruin awful shots tryin' to win it but once the gloves drop u're put in a box for a lot longer than five minutes |
04-05-2016, 08:41 PM | #7 |
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Your chick said Joe i hate when you drink your voilent and dont act the same
Gave her two choices get a nice Buzzer Beater then bitch spoke to me during the Villanova game mm nah man this wasn't good You never tame pussy so smashing theres not a shot in the dark After i pop a Cork, Screw you call ur wife to tell her your having a blast at the Six Flags Theme Park that wp was forced here and hurt the potential of this No sparks flying out the barrel of the gun can tell you the type that never shoots Searching for Prey? Only call yourself a Hunter cuz you'd probably rock the fuck out a pair of Womens boots meh, wording needs fixing here and this is kinda stretched Broke as fuck hes been taking commutes on public transportation for years If someone asked if he loved the new Metro look fag would trim his eyebrows and fix his hair alright I'll give you this one Not a care in the world if i slapped him i bet America would love to witness an open hand Go ahead and tell everyone he fights for his Country fag has proof from all his pictures of the Zach Brown Band cringed here Funny how u plan ur living conditions and sex life dumb fuck aint doing logical thinking When ur desperate think "X gon gonna give it to ya" thats cuz she looks like Melissa Mccarthy lip syncing idk man this wasn't good either imo Vs put u below turf with the Tommy Boy... it's a joy to show Joe Dirt idk why the first line didn't paste but this line was solid this place of text makes u vexed, u straight up stressed dude at times more of a whiner than North Carolina... lettin' the Paige upset u ehh decent at best here some sage advice, u think u throw heat but u ain't that nice 3 strikes Boston's out, my shit's money like David... cuz J paid the Price wording all over the place here JB's starves for a win but only stomachs more defeat cuz A&W sounds better... plus it's another place he can't afford to eat nah Rip Torn's what i've done to u, take u back to school again & teach this Average Joe like Dodgeball legend Patches O'Houlihan haha this was cool on thin ice, Boston Bruin awful shots tryin' to win it but once the gloves drop u're put in a box for a lot longer than five minutes ok not bad, some might not get it tho Alright. Joe you been dropping some good stuff in the 1-2 over at RB but seems like you lost it all in the verse tbh, I know you have better shit than this and I've seen it first hand. This week wasn't your best verse and it definitely hurt you. Art had a few good ones, the opener was tough, average joe was good and the closer was too. Not a bad verse, much better than you dropped last week. This is pretty much one sided here. Also one more thing, Joe if you shorten your lines a little I think they'd have a harder impact, cause reading a stretched line is always gonna take away from the sting, maybe that's just me idk. Vote Artiface
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04-06-2016, 09:05 AM | #8 |
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Your chick said Joe i hate when you drink your voilent and dont act the same Gave her two choices get a nice Buzzer Beater then bitch spoke to me during the Villanova game -wtf You never tame pussy so smashing theres not a shot in the dark After i pop a Cork, Screw you call ur wife to tell her your having a blast at the Six Flags Theme Park -u need to shorten ur lines up man its taking away from ur punches significantly. Crisp wording can make a semi good punch beat a good punch with horrible wording. No sparks flying out the barrel of the gun can tell you the type that never shoots Searching for Prey? Only call yourself a Hunter cuz you'd probably rock the fuck out a pair of Womens boots -ehh not diggin this Broke as fuck hes been taking commutes on public transportation for years If someone asked if he loved the new Metro look fag would trim his eyebrows and fix his hair -this is really weird Not a care in the world if i slapped him i bet America would love to witness an open hand Go ahead and tell everyone he fights for his Country fag has proof from all his pictures of the Zach Brown Band -jesus christ the shits long bro lol. not diggin it either Funny how u plan ur living conditions and sex life dumb fuck aint doing logical thinking When ur desperate think "X gon gonna give it to ya" thats cuz she looks like Melissa Mccarthy lip syncing -ehh this was okkkk i guess. Artifice u got a David Spade steez, i rock Chris Farley the whole verse put u below turf with the Tommy Boy... it's a joy to show Joe Dirt -nice this place of text makes u vexed, u straight up stressed dude at times more of a whiner than North Carolina... lettin' the Paige upset u -sorry but i don't get this. I'm assuming paige is someone from north carolina who whines and u did a double entendre with her name and this forum. If thats the case it's okay. some sage advice, u think u throw heat but u ain't that nice 3 strikes Boston's out, my shit's money like David... cuz J paid the Price -again i don't get this JB's starves for a win but only stomachs more defeat cuz A&W sounds better... plus it's another place he can't afford to eat -nah bro not diggin this Rip Torn's what i've done to u, take u back to school again & teach this Average Joe like Dodgeball legend Patches O'Houlihan -lite on thin ice, Boston Bruin awful shots tryin' to win it but once the gloves drop u're put in a box for a lot longer than five minutes -its not often i see wordplay in the opener enhance the punch. i wasn't diggin this v - artifice Easy win for artifice. Joe boston punches are bland and his lines are so long that you can almost tell before readin that his verse was gonna be trash. Sorry Joe but u need to tighten up ur wording big time |
04-06-2016, 01:10 PM | #9 |
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An aight battle, but Joe u're wording's way too stretched, I guess u're rusty, but get ya shit across more clearly & concise next battle. As for the concepts, a couple had potential, but again that wording ruined 'em. DELIVERY IS EVERYTHING. Whether it be actually spitting, recording, performing or writing.
Artifice u had quite a bit of played material, but the opener & Patches were the standouts. Avoid the obvious flips as much as possible, like all of the sports referances u made. Plus his name's Joe Boston I'm pretty sure that shit's been flipped in every matter possible, so that didn't do much damage. Overall despite the flaws in each of your verses I'm giving it to ARTIFICE, JB the wording just really fucked u up here. |
04-07-2016, 12:14 AM | #10 |
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Joe:
Your chick said Joe i hate when you drink your voilent and dont act the same Gave her two choices get a nice Buzzer Beater then bitch spoke to me during the Villanova game - See what you were going for but just didn't think it was that cool, plus was just a standard word play, nothing personal or hard hitting. You never tame pussy so smashing theres not a shot in the dark After i pop a Cork, Screw you call ur wife to tell her your having a blast at the Six Flags Theme Park - Ehhh No sparks flying out the barrel of the gun can tell you the type that never shoots Searching for Prey? Only call yourself a Hunter cuz you'd probably rock the fuck out a pair of Womens boots - It's aight. Broke as fuck hes been taking commutes on public transportation for years If someone asked if he loved the new Metro look fag would trim his eyebrows and fix his hair - Nah. Just ain't hitting Not a care in the world if i slapped him i bet America would love to witness an open hand Go ahead and tell everyone he fights for his Country fag has proof from all his pictures of the Zach Brown Band - Kinda see the angle but didn't feel it. Funny how u plan ur living conditions and sex life dumb fuck aint doing logical thinking When ur desperate think "X gon gonna give it to ya" thats cuz she looks like Melissa Mccarthy lip syncing - Decent. Your best bar Art: u got a David Spade steez, i rock Chris Farley the whole verse put u below turf with the Tommy Boy... it's a joy to show Joe Dirt - Cool opener this place of text makes u vexed, u straight up stressed dude at times more of a whiner than North Carolina... lettin' the Paige upset u - It's alright some sage advice, u think u throw heat but u ain't that nice 3 strikes Boston's out, my shit's money like David... cuz J paid the Price - Ehh JB's starves for a win but only stomachs more defeat cuz A&W sounds better... plus it's another place he can't afford to eat - Okay-ish Rip Torn's what i've done to u, take u back to school again & teach this Average Joe like Dodgeball legend Patches O'Houlihan - I like it to be honest. on thin ice, Boston Bruin awful shots tryin' to win it but once the gloves drop u're put in a box for a lot longer than five minutes - Nice closer imo Art took this pretty convincingly in my book, Joe, I think you would benefit more from taking a more direct attack approach. I think you get so caught up with trying to think up original concepts that you get too outside of the box and it becomes a reach. You just got to focus more into nameplay and personals as opposed to what you've been doing. Keep doing your thing though, good bout fellas. Vote - Art |
04-09-2016, 02:56 PM | #11 |
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Your chick said Joe i hate when you drink your voilent and dont act the same
Gave her two choices get a nice Buzzer Beater then bitch spoke to me during the Villanova game Buzz or beat her works for me but the punch itself is kinda light You never tame pussy so smashing theres not a shot in the dark After i pop a Cork, Screw you call ur wife to tell her your having a blast at the Six Flags Theme Park see what you're going for but delivery is off No sparks flying out the barrel of the gun can tell you the type that never shoots Searching for Prey? Only call yourself a Hunter cuz you'd probably rock the fuck out a pair of Womens boots ok idea, delivery was wordy and not to strong Broke as fuck hes been taking commutes on public transportation for years If someone asked if he loved the new Metro look fag would trim his eyebrows and fix his hair really liked the idea but delivery hurt it Not a care in the world if i slapped him i bet America would love to witness an open hand Go ahead and tell everyone he fights for his Country fag has proof from all his pictures of the Zach Brown Band This is borderline longbar Funny how u plan ur living conditions and sex life dumb fuck aint doing logical thinking When ur desperate think "X gon gonna give it to ya" thats cuz she looks like Melissa Mccarthy lip syncing funny idea, delivery wasn't there u got a David Spade steez, i rock Chris Farley the whole verse put u below turf with the Tommy Boy... it's a joy to show Joe Dirt like it, the Tommy boy bit makes it work really well imo this place of text makes u vexed, u straight up stressed dude at times more of a whiner than North Carolina... lettin' the Paige upset u nice some sage advice, u think u throw heat but u ain't that nice 3 strikes Boston's out, my shit's money like David... cuz J paid the Price see what you're going for but it didn't come together well for me JB's starves for a win but only stomachs more defeat cuz A&W sounds better... plus it's another place he can't afford to eat straight up don't get it Rip Torn's what i've done to u, take u back to school again & teach this Average Joe like Dodgeball legend Patches O'Houlihan too many Joe flips been done on him, this is light either way on thin ice, Boston Bruin awful shots tryin' to win it but once the gloves drop u're put in a box for a lot longer than five minutes simple but effective Joe got the rust. Artifice had harder hits. Good shit V/Artifice |
04-09-2016, 03:12 PM | #12 |
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vs opener was dope, north Carolina and closer were enough to take the win Boston one rusty as hell, I don't know, I don't think I've ever read his shit before v/art |
04-10-2016, 11:57 AM | #13 |
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Wow Joe was super wordy, gotta try and cut some of that down bro. Didn't like much more than the cork, screw concept.. coulda worked with better wording.
Didn't feel a lot of Arts verse, prolly coz Im not an American, but I got the opener and the Dodgeball lines so they hit, plus it was a better put together diss-verse. So-Art gets this one. |
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