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Old 01-11-2014, 09:34 AM   #1
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Ridiculing little imps
think their ways of wise
these tricks magic!!!
like a gay surprise
but hey...
Que Sera Sera
with me they ain't getting far
I ain't gay but with their ways
they'll talk shit some more...
honestly the stuff they spit
is like fried raging bore
so I leave them
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record it while I strangle them with the cable cord
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Old 01-11-2014, 11:54 PM   #2
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nice little poetic drop i guess lol..the structure makes it seem that way lol wasnt feeling the first part but it picked up more towards the end.
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Old 01-12-2014, 09:24 AM   #3
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Who gives a fuck what you think lol
can I get some real feed here thanks...
exidick.. I mean little bitch....exocunt?... no no I mean exodouche thats it thats got to be your name? maybe you have an alias?

Hey if I was cool I would change my name like everyday... an be a total sell out... but I guess I'm not... dam
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Old 01-12-2014, 09:29 AM   #4
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Last 3 lines were okay. i don't like your structure or wording. idk if you were taking a shot at Wise Ways, but it was pretty weak as a punch or as a concept. "fried raging bore" didnt make sense to me.

most of your verses would be better as cypher posts. they are short and freeform and dont have a strong sense of direction. it might be why you dont get too much feed.

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Old 01-12-2014, 09:44 AM   #5
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Last 3 lines were okay. i don't like your structure or wording. idk if you were taking a shot at Wise Ways, but it was pretty weak as a punch or as a concept. "fried raging bore" didnt make sense to me.

most of your verses would be better as cypher posts. they are short and freeform and dont have a strong sense of direction. it might be why you dont get too much feed.

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I was not taking a shot at anyone. I was trying to joke around.
I was simply writing on the scene you see in the video. I like comedy... I guess I could have added more too it. Thanks for the feed!

the fried raging bore was a play on words. The spit being what they cook a boar or pig on.
also you could read it more like this

"honestly the stuff they spit is like fried
raging bore"
It could also mean that it is boring

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