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Old 05-21-2020, 02:55 AM   #1
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Ayo,

I'm a child of the corn,
Who's glorious writtens stand out in rap form
Red rose with black thorns,
The shinin' armour & sword all came along
Movin' on,
Put on earth before birth & church said,
"You're the first'
Stop the omens curse,
Carry his carcass back home in a hearse
It's us versus them on a verse,
As skeleton daggers stuck up from the dirt
Prove to you what words are worth,
We disconnect necks from they shirts
The stories kinda private,
But I heard that both can turn water into cider
Fightin' dragons from the Bible
On the Great wall of China, with a lighter
Half man, half God's technique
Have about as much sense as he's got physique
& his tone of speech,
Is the reason women wear they cleaveges deep
I'm a mic athlete,
You peons can't even connect on bare feet
Obey my sword tip,
When your cords lit & your mic dropped in the moshpit
With science & panzers in your closets,
But it's Rawness from the claw fist
Witty & clever tips,
That's Biblical like writtens in Sanskrit
It's like your assholes stitched since you can't do shit
Don't bother with this,
I use styles & modern patterns
Write rhymin' letters,
Shinin' a light like Green Lanterns
My two cents & truckloads of ideas in my think tanks
Teach kids Mickey's a big fag & Disney's the ballbags
"How racist, he's all black!"
Shut the fuck up, now y'all mad
Like black creatures on PSP screens with eaten features
It's just a pixel,
Fetus & people really are talkin' feces
No needs for a hypothesis,
Go & see the black Jesus
He'll Butt your Head talk & act like Beavis
Rise like yeast,
I possess intellect yet still a street beast
I'm knee deep & this jail bed makes me need sleep
Use multiple schemes to confirm rights of free speech
& if you hear & read this,
You've reached the fifth style switch
I write Biblicals & can flip scripts to multi syllables
Spread Hip Hop's vitamins & minerals, add some Tyllenol
For the buzz & kill 'em all,
Let's clear the field to minimal.

You want to summon my attention? Then paint the pentagram
'What's the point?' There's 5 stupid! Come and get these legend's hands!
Regressive, insecure, witness the full reversal
6'll stay aggressive while they're trapped in a circle
Regret their birth too, I play Ouija boards for laughs
Call your grandma's ghost a bitch, leave her in that portal, trapped
I hit backflips with my pen, trying to reach those greater heights
Made a collect call to hell to ask Satan for advice

"Turn the rocks into bread, turn the sand into water
Lead followers to the dessert like lambs to the slaughter
For forty days and forty nights sit in deep meditation
Slip into a trance stronger than sleep medication".
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Old 05-23-2020, 02:42 PM   #2
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First verse, you found the right balance between simplistic and too heavy. I aim to do the same when Im writing so the format
here works for me. Otherwize pretty effortless free flowing without going
overboard with anything. The thematics and vocab you play with here indicate that you are a man of culture, like myself. Overall nice and easy read, would read again if you dropped something similar.

That's Biblical like writtens in Sanskrit
It's like your assholes stitched since you can't do shit



Second, I dug the opener line.
Overall the verse had the right amount of sinister to it, comes off technically soundand fitted the theme. A bit short compared to other perhaps but I guess you said your piece with less bars.

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Old 05-31-2020, 10:35 PM   #3
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Gracias bro...My bad, didn't say who's verse first & shit, just assumed every nigga here knew my wack style...Johnny went second.
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