THE OFFICIAL S.T.I DISCUSSION THREAD! - Page 7

Ghost1 · 09-07-2016, 11:53 PM

I have read some of the feedback given and I feel out of place to be honest

I could offer my HUMBLE opinion on the pieces submitted but I FEAR it may be rather RUDIMENTARY (literally unsure if I used that word right) in comparison to other critiques offered thus far

Let's just call it a wash here

I'll agree not to vote and you all will agree that you are happy having me not do so.....

Ghost1 · 09-07-2016, 11:59 PM

Also let the record show cimm squeaked by w a measly 5-1 robbery.

I maintain my topical glory.

Eŋg · 09-08-2016, 12:03 AM

a harvard alum should thrive alongside all these pretentious fucks.

Ghost1 · 09-08-2016, 12:11 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eŋg

a harvard alum should thrive alongside all these pretentious fucks.

LOL I see u owl

PancakeBrah · 09-08-2016, 12:13 AM

Rudimentary was a correct word choice.

For what it's worth, I enjoyed your verse. Cimmerian's style of uber short, laser precise verses present a problem to even the best in the game, in my opinion. Hard to pick apart.

Eŋg · 09-08-2016, 12:14 AM

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Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

Cimmerian's style of uber short, laser precise verses present a problem to even the best in the game, in my opinion. Hard to pick apart.

most of the old guard rate him as one of the best. i've read like three verses - can't imagine he always wrote like that.

Ghost1 · 09-08-2016, 12:18 AM

I wanted to do alot more w that verse ..... only had the one day to really work on it

I'm ashamed

Some really inspiring writing tho

Legit makes me want to have done better

Awesome first round

Ghost1 · 09-08-2016, 12:18 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Eŋg

most of the old guard rate him as one of the best. i've read like three verses - can't imagine he always wrote like that.

Knock it off

Certain · 09-08-2016, 12:23 AM

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Originally Posted by Eŋg

most of the old guard rate him as one of the best. i've read like three verses - can't imagine he always wrote like that.

I've been reading him for 15 years. He's pretty much always written like that, to some degree.

This is from 2002:

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Sip time out of bottled role models, watchful lips’ll bathe,
Crafting hourglass sand castles, and watch‘em drift away,
On a whim of waves, no tidings, riding on the foam float,
My broken homecoming, crystalline adobe’s stone throw,
Twice homicidal, fowl play cliché, cross their own road,
A fork's in it, we meet deep, to feel the bones poked,
Whoa!… settle the stallions round mountainous sunspots,
Plow the forest for my porous Trojan horses in one chop,
Can’t hack it, but I’ll tell the tale with a lumberjack twist,
Clash with, titan cymbals, tremble till the thunderclaps rip,
Easy as a freethrow, Atlas, snap wrist, skydive Icarus backflip,
Saunter pass go, collecting shadows in a licorice black twist,
That’s a peter panoramic view for the few who never knew this,
Luck of St. Patrick, marching in madness, underdog, new tricks,
Can’t teach this, breathe then apply, rubbing the bare skin,
Damn speechless when it seeps in... now that’s cimmerian.

http://www.urbanprowlers.net/vb/showthread.php?t=438

All of his pieces were 12 or 16 or no more than 24 lines, with tight rhyming and unique phraseology.

Eŋg · 09-08-2016, 12:26 AM

well, shit. that's cool.

Certain · 09-08-2016, 12:28 AM

Yep. He was considered the best Open Mic writer on these sites when I was still new.

Cimmerian · 09-08-2016, 12:40 AM

I predict I lose to dead man in the next round. There is a sort of melancholy underdog tone with unique phrasing, imagery, and good flow that is intertwined is his verses. How can you not root for that?

PancakeBrah · 09-08-2016, 01:52 AM

Strong STRONG pre anti-sway. You're above that.

sral · 09-08-2016, 07:35 AM

ENG VS PINOT AND ONE OTHER BATTLE STILL UP FOR VOTES!

Cimmerian · 09-08-2016, 07:40 AM

Quote:

Originally Posted by PancakeBrah

Strong STRONG pre anti-sway. You're above that.

Just being honest since there was a call for predictions.

Diode · 09-08-2016, 12:49 PM

hey.

Certain · 09-08-2016, 01:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Diode

hey.

Would you do your topical pals a favor and vote on Frank vs. big baby?

Frank · 09-08-2016, 01:35 PM

Add my season 6 championship banner while you're at it

sral · 09-08-2016, 02:33 PM

ONCE FRANK VS BIG BABY IS FINISHED, WE'LL GET THE QUARTER FINALS BATTLE THREADS SET!

I'm working on the QF mag as I type!

Ghost1 · 09-08-2016, 04:16 PM

ay lars Id like to contribute a video for your mag, what ype of time frame am I looking at to have it to you by>?

09-08-2016, 12:13 AM	#125
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	Rudimentary was a correct word choice. For what it's worth, I enjoyed your verse. Cimmerian's style of uber short, laser precise verses present a problem to even the best in the game, in my opinion. Hard to pick apart. __________________ If I ventured in the slipstream Between the viaducts of your dreams Where immobil steel rims crack And the ditch in the back road stop Could you find me?

09-08-2016, 12:28 AM	#131
Certain Mad fucking dangerous. Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 12,072 Battle Record: 40-19 Champed - AOWL Season 3 - Art of Writing League (2x) Rep Power: 85899402	Yep. He was considered the best Open Mic writer on these sites when I was still new. __________________ I'm just swinging swords strictly based on keyboards, unbalanced like elephants and ants on seesaws.

09-08-2016, 01:52 AM	#133
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	Strong STRONG pre anti-sway. You're above that. __________________ If I ventured in the slipstream Between the viaducts of your dreams Where immobil steel rims crack And the ditch in the back road stop Could you find me?

09-08-2016, 07:35 AM	#134
sral Shrewd as evearthed Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: Wolverhampton, England Posts: 8,255 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899391	ENG VS PINOT AND ONE OTHER BATTLE STILL UP FOR VOTES! __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)

09-08-2016, 12:49 PM	#136
Diode PR's Finest Join Date: Aug 2013 Posts: 14,156 Battle Record: 12-7 Rep Power: 85899406	hey. __________________

09-08-2016, 12:03 AM	#123
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,146 Rep Power: 0	a harvard alum should thrive alongside all these pretentious fucks.

09-08-2016, 12:26 AM	#130
Eŋg rhyme capsule. Join Date: Sep 2018 Posts: 2,146 Rep Power: 0	well, shit. that's cool.

09-08-2016, 12:40 AM	#132
Cimmerian Senior Member Join Date: Dec 2013 Posts: 142 Rep Power: 2933495	I predict I lose to dead man in the next round. There is a sort of melancholy underdog tone with unique phrasing, imagery, and good flow that is intertwined is his verses. How can you not root for that?

09-08-2016, 01:35 PM	#138
Frank Senior Member Join Date: Oct 2001 Posts: 3,228 Champed - NWL Season 2 - Art of Writing League (5x) - Lime Green Poetry Association - AOWL Season 6 - AOWL Season 10 Rep Power: 3853343	Add my season 6 championship banner while you're at it __________________ *VETWORK*

09-08-2016, 02:33 PM	#139
sral Shrewd as evearthed Join Date: Aug 2014 Location: Wolverhampton, England Posts: 8,255 Battle Record: 28-3 Champed - Gimmick Battle League - The Winter Topical - Topical Martyrs - Lime Green Poetry Association - Lyric Olympics - Art of Writing League - Guerrilla Writing League (2x) - Black August II Rep Power: 85899391	ONCE FRANK VS BIG BABY IS FINISHED, WE'LL GET THE QUARTER FINALS BATTLE THREADS SET! I'm working on the QF mag as I type! __________________ - Netcees Rebuttal Tourney - Art of Writing League (x 4) - AOWL Season 11 Champion (Undefeated Season)