08-12-2014, 04:02 PM | #1 |
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Pic battle: Suth vs Vulgar [Vulgar WINS]
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08-14-2014, 08:44 AM | #2 |
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08-18-2014, 01:36 PM | #3 |
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@Suth
Prentice's a tough customer, ain't it? He cut up his mother in basements & now he wants ur ugliness tainted if I let the banter rise, I might just trip and clip this pantomime Suth's grill will need repairs that the R2D2's on his man's shirt simply can't provide No golden tickets for this rematch...I pity this is it fam You're both wearing corny shirts. At least he isn't wearin a Willy Wonka wrist band It's obvious u attend nerd conventions, tellin your girl "let's text after" if I threw a Pokeball at ur head, it'd bounce off with the subtext: "Dark Geodude deflects capture" Wow, look at all the flashing lights! The Crest White smile, I hope this is respect naaa cuz u a Brooklyn vampire. U grew ya fingernail long enuff to poke em in the neck |
08-19-2014, 03:37 PM | #4 |
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@Vulgar
This pic is a blatant win. Total trash thas embraced in wind Your pops got his hands on waist.. lookin 4 a dumpster 2 place it in Lookin like the past & future Vulgar. Pull out ya ruger, bitch.. Now do us the favor of killin yourself. Yea.. b on some Looper shit 1, 2, 3, 4, 5.. know what comes next? Well, guess it w.me Continue 2 mock the count.. already got d 1's haircut from Sesame Street Face of a homeless Dracula w. no type of life highlight offers This pic's d most sparklin move by a vampire.. muthafuck a Twilight Saga Ya fashion sense hasn't been fashion since alil after fight d power & your high jeans isn't a Urkel issue.. Ya look dirty & in need of a shower Last edited by Suthaveli; 08-21-2014 at 09:15 AM. Reason: minor miss wording |
08-23-2014, 06:53 PM | #5 |
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Prentice's a tough customer, ain't it? He cut up his mother in basements & now he wants ur ugliness tainted Lol if I let the banter rise, I might just trip and clip this pantomime Suth's grill will need repairs that the R2D2's on his man's shirt simply can't provide Dope No golden tickets for this rematch...I pity this is it fam You're both wearing corny shirts. At least he isn't wearin a Willy Wonka wrist band Ok It's obvious u attend nerd conventions, tellin your girl "let's text after" if I threw a Pokeball at ur head, it'd bounce off with the subtext: "Dark Geodude deflects capture" Lol Wow, look at all the flashing lights! The Crest White smile, I hope this is respect naaa cuz u a Brooklyn vampire. U grew ya fingernail long enuff to poke em in the neck Nice --- This pic is a blatant win. Total trash thas embraced in wind Your pops got his hands on waist.. lookin 4 a dumpster 2 place it in Lol dope Lookin like the past & future Vulgar. Pull out ya ruger, bitch.. Now do us the favor of killin yourself. Yea.. b on some Looper shit Sick wording coulda been better 1, 2, 3, 4, 5.. know what comes next? Well, guess it w.me Continue 2 mock the count.. already got d 1's haircut from Sesame Street Ok Face of a homeless Dracula w. no type of life highlight offers This pic's d most sparklin move by a vampire.. muthafuck a Twilight Saga Blah Ya fashion sense hasn't been fashion since alil after fight d power & your high jeans isn't a Urkel issue.. Ya look dirty & in need of a shower Alright Close battle... Honestly this is a toss up Mvgt - vulgar
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08-24-2014, 08:59 PM | #6 |
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Vulgar:
Prentice's a tough customer, ain't it? He cut up his mother in basements & now he wants ur ugliness tainted LMAO. I like how you used the guy on the right's facial expression against Suth here. Paints a funny scenario in the heads of us readers. "Ugly" jokes can get old, but you did it nicely here. if I let the banter rise, I might just trip and clip this pantomime Suth's grill will need repairs that the R2D2's on his man's shirt simply can't provide ^ Very creative. At first, the line seemed like a plain bar based off of just one-dimensional observation, but anyone who is aware of Star Wars at all can see the complexity in this. Dope punch. No golden tickets for this rematch...I pity this is it fam You're both wearing corny shirts. At least he isn't wearin a Willy Wonka wrist band ^ Decent. That "golden ticket" connection gave this bar enough of an edge to remain relatively enjoyable. Nothing too hard-hitting, but it's okay. It's obvious u attend nerd conventions, tellin your girl "let's text after" if I threw a Pokeball at ur head, it'd bounce off with the subtext: "Dark Geodude deflects capture" ^ Lmfao. Funny. Wow, look at all the flashing lights! The Crest White smile, I hope this is respect naaa cuz u a Brooklyn vampire. U grew ya fingernail long enuff to poke em in the neck ^ LOL. Nice closer as well. Just some enjoyable shit. Suth: This pic is a blatant win. Total trash thas embraced in wind Your pops got his hands on waist.. lookin 4 a dumpster 2 place it in ^ Ouch. That hits hard, lol. I wasn't feeling the "embraced in wind" rhyme, but other than that, you connected well. Took a nice observation and flipped it well. Lookin like the past & future Vulgar. Pull out ya ruger, bitch.. Now do us the favor of killin yourself. Yea.. b on some Looper shit ^ Kind of played. I've seen the "Looper" concept get used many times... 1, 2, 3, 4, 5.. know what comes next? Well, guess it w.me Continue 2 mock the count.. already got d 1's haircut from Sesame Street ^ Ok... Face of a homeless Dracula w. no type of life highlight offers This pic's d most sparklin move by a vampire.. muthafuck a Twilight Saga ^ Not really feeling this either. Isn't really saying much or impacting as hard as it could. Ya fashion sense hasn't been fashion since alil after fight d power & your high jeans isn't a Urkel issue.. Ya look dirty & in need of a shower ^ Lmao, nice closer. Could've connected better, but I like it. Vote: Vulgar. Far more consistent and impacting. |
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i felt that both verses had incredibly sound structure, flow, and rhyming.
when i read Vulgars a tiny bit slower than Suth's (or Suth's a tiny bit faster than Vulgar's), they are both excellent timing&phonetics, with the lone exception being Suth's final line..which was not as smooth as all of the preceding ones. content-wise, both had nice punches-- straightfoward disses about appearance mixed with imaginative insults. vulgar's closing line i felt was the best punchline of the match. quality verses &i enjoyed both. close match. i don't usually do this but the closers decided this entirely for me. vulgar's was great and suth's was not. vote Vulgar |
08-27-2014, 04:59 AM | #8 |
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Vulgar wins 3-0
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