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Old 02-02-2020, 07:13 PM   #1
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Neglected autist manners. Couldn’t get to ‘proper rapper’.
Calling, “Abha, father!”, but I never got an answer.
Wretched, pauper dancer without an audience.
Convinced of what the problem is.
And so he’s chosen solitude instead any solve or fix.
But still he needs a lot of hits, broken as junk.
Posting habits of a lonesome addict shown in his stunts.
Pretends that his intent is just a notion of fun.
Indeed, it’s just a breed of dope, he tokes on the blunt.

He warmed up to a girl, but still there’s background discomfort.
“You’ll just be weak and vulnerable attached to another.”
Perhaps the juggling act he had with his mother
And the lack of a father at his pad made the matching up stutter.
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Old 02-03-2020, 12:49 AM   #2
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I like this, it isn't your best or most thought provoking piece by a long shot but it was still relatable and not bad in my eyes. Sometimes a simple piece is effective for a topic like this, good job dude
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Old 02-16-2020, 07:58 PM   #3
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Yeah word...I've def seen better from you but this was cool man.

He warmed up to a girl, but still there’s background discomfort.
“You’ll just be weak and vulnerable attached to another.”
Perhaps the juggling act he had with his mother
And the lack of a father at his pad made the matching up stutter.

^^Really liked that...

Stay doin' you bro.
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