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Old 02-16-2020, 03:48 AM   #1
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Ayo...

I feel like I'm wastin' my time,
Hate rises & my status revises
To large to debate sizes,
Tired of consolation prizes
My eyes are cold & silent,
A soul raped & deprived
Exhausted from lies,
If sumthin' good were to happen it would surprise me
You guys know I rep when I speak,
Respect is effortless when your the best with technique
Life is like sex,
You either explode & left on a cheek or your stuck in the sheets
That's why I don't fuck with the streets,
Day job layoffs quick to grab Cain
No more paths of chaos,
Breedin' the sick is leavin' lads slain
Imagine a rap game without draggin' chains or contract cages
I blame popularity,
Masked talent coppin' out for better wages
It doesn't matter,
'Cause the way these gauges keep splatterin' faces
Leads me to believe no one cares about these corporate ladder racists
Resultin' evidence has shown these big wigs provokin' the terrorists
Leaves me sulkin' with techs,
So when I fire I'm insultin' intelligence
This social ladder sucks,
We might as well have toxic gasses or that Midas touch
Ex's mind's a rush,
I contemplate my given situation & just get mad as fuck.
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Old 02-16-2020, 04:43 PM   #2
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I enjoyed this one bud, i liked the way you stayed on course throughout the piece and had some pretty insightful bars, brought a freshness to a subject that's been done before. You could feel that you took more time on this one than you have on previous verses, and it was actually a pretty entertaining my verse, my challenge to you would be to start branching out and stepping away from just normal rap subjects, keep your mind on and get creative buddy you're on the right track!
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Old 02-27-2020, 09:44 AM   #3
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Gracias...

Some more feed would be appreciated & returned...Well I've fed everyone lol.
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Good work roscoe
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Transmute the anger.

Dont let it burn you.

Anyway. I liked parts of this, a couple phrases, a couple rhymes here and there.

Disliked most if it though tbh.

Not the essence of it. But the expression of it.

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Old 04-24-2020, 10:26 PM   #6
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Yeah I have trouble with anger, it's channeled thru rhymes as I'm not a people person...which I hate.I carried this chip on my shoulder with Black D for like a decade, then reality kicked in...just get over shit Ex is what I said to myself.

Appreciate the feed Ox.
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