WEEK 9: Fraze 1-2 VS Ispaz 4-3 ISPAZ WINS

[UPN Zuch]

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Good luck, gentlemen

[fraze]

Lets get it Spaz. 14 ok?

[iSpaz]

Yoo.. that's cool.

[fraze]

Wait… who are you again?

Impatient, waiting on edge. Am I off base? Guess I’ll lead with tha steel first.
Fuck leaving ya feels hurt. After my blades ‘interim’… they’re gonna put in some REAL work.
Such a failure with the ladies. They can’t stand to see this creep up close.
You don’t link with hos. You couldn’t get inbox if girls joined the league and needed votes
Bitch, you’re a Karen. I know ya not the gunner type.
If we meet on the street… you’ll be terrified, grasp your purse tight and walk to the other side

Wanna see me hang? Jealous from counting ways I’m better?
Go get a klansman…English lit major from Grambling...and pay him cheddar…
Bet you still can’t string a fraze together…

I’m a beast enclosed in the square, circling close to bring heat to your dome
Can’t compete blow for blow... you couldn’t land a haymaker touring a farming machinery show
Bulletproofed the red rover. And I’m sweeeervin’, cause I’m not sober.
Even if you ‘link with your arms connect it’ won’t stop me from running your squad over.
Got no time for patients. So I’m quick to put shots in your frame.
Not here to nurse your pride, so fuck your name/brand… these generics will fix you the same.

[iSpaz]

I'll end this quick cuz I'm supposed to be home
Just pull the 9 back and let it off like a rotary phone
Mob shit. I'm aimin for your head the way you speakin.
I'll shoot ya in ur living room.. landlord can't stop ur roof from leakin.
You the hardest to please nd you gettin people emotional
Guess u could say ur 'marked fraze' but none of ur shit is quotable
We all trash in comparison to you plz grace us now for views
Bro... I'ma go to this parallel universe you live in and slap the shit out of you.
You a clown. Aint got it down cuz you walk a Tight Rope surface
If we say you performed well its just cause we tryna find u a circus
A fighter. I'm only a writer part time you don't want to fist off
I'll throw u up against the chains so much ppl thought it was disc golf
And when I send a dog to your face we already know thats killer
When u send a dog to your face you got ur phone up w/ a snapchat filter.

[UPN Zuch]

Ispaz got this


Wording was smooth amd concepts better than normal this time around. You improved a lot over the season.

Disc golf dope

Closer was cool.

Fraze

Wordplays were too simple. I’m not a fan of wordplay so they have to be fresh.


Everything else a little statementish like the haymaker and Karen bar

[fraze]

Originally Posted by UPN Zuch

Ispaz got this


Wording was smooth amd concepts better than normal this time around. You improved a lot over the season.

Disc golf dope

Closer was cool.

Fraze

Wordplays were too simple. I’m not a fan of wordplay so they have to be fresh.


Everything else a little statementish like the haymaker and Karen bar

Pretty much expected this. No hard feelings tho.

[fraze]

...

[Scout]

Originally Posted by fraze

Pretty much expected this. No hard feelings tho.

That's how it goes
I haven't read the verses yet, so you might've just lossed. Nothing here surprises me though


Fraze

The opener was your best worded wordplay idea, but it's a bit forced
String a fraze together & red rover bars had potential, but wording killed them

Spaz

I'll end this quick cuz I'm supposed to be home
Just pull the 9 back and let it off like a rotary phone

Almost quoted parallel uni.
As for disc golf, what chains are you throwing him against? Creative but nah. Doesn't work for me
You won though

Voting iSpaz

[UPN Zuch]

Originally Posted by fraze

...

I saw this.


You’re probably top 5 most important people to the league. You vote on everything and you vote fair. Why in the WORLD would I act in spite against that. I need you.

EDIT: Actually, Scout is incredibly important too, because like you, he is active, votes fair, and gives a fuck. I need BOTH of you.

[Wanderer]

Fraze

I can’t quote one here.. too much that was played/corny to me and then not executed well enough to stick; Karen, haymaker, patients for example.. u had some interesting ideas, for example the opener, but it just lacks something on execution

Keep it coming though

Ispaz

Rotary phone I’ve seen done before but this was a fresh take
Marked Fraze was cool
Snapchat filter was ok.. just

Vote ispaz

[Eviction]

@fraze

not feeling anything from your verse, your lines are also a little long than usual, need to keep it short and sweet.

@iSpaz
none of your shit is quotable
parallel universe
snap chat filter

The bars spaz had over fraze was nothing special, I think he did enough to secure this win, fraze needs to use his normal shorter style that I seen in previous weeks.

v/ spaz

[evaD]

Impatient, waiting on edge. Am I off base? Guess I’ll lead with tha steel first.
Fuck leaving ya feels hurt. After my blades ‘interim’… they’re gonna put in some REAL work.
I like this. Only criticism is bar length but internal rhymes make it worth
Such a failure with the ladies. They can’t stand to see this creep up close.
You don’t link with hos. You couldn’t get inbox if girls joined the league and needed votes
This is cool
Bitch, you’re a Karen. I know ya not the gunner type.
If we meet on the street… you’ll be terrified, grasp your purse tight and walk to the other side
This is basic and statementish to me
Wanna see me hang? Jealous from counting ways I’m better?
Go get a klansman…English lit major from Grambling...and pay him cheddar…
Don’t get it sorry
Bet you still can’t string a fraze together…
I’m a beast enclosed in the square, circling close to bring heat to your dome
Is there something going on here I’m missing other than saying different shapes?
Can’t compete blow for blow... you couldn’t land a haymaker touring a farming machinery show
Oh I see these aren’t formatted like normal text couplets.. haymaker I’ve seen done a lot tbh
Bulletproofed the red rover. And I’m sweeeervin’, cause I’m not sober.
Even if you ‘link with your arms connect it’ won’t stop me from running your squad over.
Don’t get it
Got no time for patients. So I’m quick to put shots in your frame.
Not here to nurse your pride, so fuck your name/brand… these generics will fix you the same.
Don’t get it

I'll end this quick cuz I'm supposed to be home
Just pull the 9 back and let it off like a rotary phone
Fireeeee
Mob shit. I'm aimin for your head the way you speakin.
I'll shoot ya in ur living room.. landlord can't stop ur roof from leakin.
Ok
You the hardest to please nd you gettin people emotional
Guess u could say ur 'marked fraze' but none of ur shit is quotable
Wording could be better
We all trash in comparison to you plz grace us now for views
Bro... I'ma go to this parallel universe you live in and slap the shit out of you.
Nothing much going on here
You a clown. Aint got it down cuz you walk a Tight Rope surface
If we say you performed well its just cause we tryna find u a circus
No
A fighter. I'm only a writer part time you don't want to fist off
I'll throw u up against the chains so much ppl thought it was disc golf
Ok
And when I send a dog to your face we already know thats killer
When u send a dog to your face you got ur phone up w/ a snapchat filter.
No


Interim
Inbox

Vs

Rotary phone

I’ve got fraze here I’m a close one

[Swerve]

Everything fraze had was consistent, but nothing really hit because the wording was long and awkward and just lacked. No real misses though.

vs.

I'll end this quick cuz I'm supposed to be home
Just pull the 9 back and let it off like a rotary phone
A fighter. I'm only a writer part time you don't want to fist off
I'll throw u up against the chains so much ppl thought it was disc golf

TBH, I thought Ispaz was going to take it easily after reading Fraze's and not hating or not liking anything, but he made it close with some big misses. Disc golf and rotary phone were fire though, so I gotta give it to him.

V/ Ispaz

[UserName]

Fraze -

Impatient, waiting on edge. Am I off base? Guess I’ll lead with tha steel first.
Fuck leaving ya feels hurt. After my blades ‘interim’… they’re gonna put in some REAL work.
Got no time for patients. So I’m quick to put shots in your frame.
Not here to nurse your pride, so fuck your name/brand… these generics will fix you the same.

I legit liked the opener, i'm being a little generous with the generics line, but i enjoyed it personally, i can see others not. Not the best I've seen from you. Kinda seems like a style thing, the hits aren't translating well here. Still, cool verse man, glad you showed.

Spaz -

I'll end this quick cuz I'm supposed to be home
Just pull the 9 back and let it off like a rotary phone
Mob shit. I'm aimin for your head the way you speakin.
I'll shoot ya in ur living room.. landlord can't stop ur roof from leakin.
You the hardest to please nd you gettin people emotional
Guess u could say ur 'marked fraze' but none of ur shit is quotable

Opener was easily your strongest, and I've seen a few rotary lines before - but this was still good enough for me. quotable line was a good nameplay jab as well. Overall, second half of your verse was wildly lacking, but you made up for it with the first 4-6 or so.

V - Spaz

[Mac]

Wait… who are you again?

Impatient, waiting on edge. Am I off base? Guess I’ll lead with tha steel first.
Fuck leaving ya feels hurt. After my blades ‘interim’… they’re gonna put in some REAL work.
this is decent, not fan of the execution though

Such a failure with the ladies. They can’t stand to see this creep up close.
You don’t link with hos. You couldn’t get inbox if girls joined the league and needed votes
not feeling this bro, too simple and lacks sting

Bitch, you’re a Karen. I know ya not the gunner type.
If we meet on the street… you’ll be terrified, grasp your purse tight and walk to the other side
ok I see where you were heading with this but the wording is off

Wanna see me hang? Jealous from counting ways I’m better?
Go get a klansman…English lit major from Grambling...and pay him cheddar…
Bet you still can’t string a fraze together…
stretched approach to a np

I’m a beast enclosed in the square, circling close to bring heat to your dome
Can’t compete blow for blow... you couldn’t land a haymaker touring a farming machinery show
not fan of these kind of bars tbh

Bulletproofed the red rover. And I’m sweeeervin’, cause I’m not sober.
Even if you ‘link with your arms connect it’ won’t stop me from running your squad over.
okk

Got no time for patients. So I’m quick to put shots in your frame.
Not here to nurse your pride, so fuck your name/brand… these generics will fix you the same.
nope

overall fraze you got an unique style, I wouldn't change it, but bars sometimes get too wordy and I normally expect some witty to counter the line length, I probably would work on executing your concepts more cleanly so it lands smoothly in the reader's mind. I dig your style though but some more time battling and getting feed will definitely help you shape your style, atleast that's what happens on my side

vs.

I'll end this quick cuz I'm supposed to be home
Just pull the 9 back and let it off like a rotary phone
are we gonna pretend this isnt played.. smooth approach tho

Mob shit. I'm aimin for your head the way you speakin.
I'll shoot ya in ur living room.. landlord can't stop ur roof from leakin.
okk

You the hardest to please nd you gettin people emotional
Guess u could say ur 'marked fraze' but none of ur shit is quotable
okk

We all trash in comparison to you plz grace us now for views
Bro... I'ma go to this parallel universe you live in and slap the shit out of you.
nah

You a clown. Aint got it down cuz you walk a Tight Rope surface
If we say you performed well its just cause we tryna find u a circus
nah not feeling this

A fighter. I'm only a writer part time you don't want to fist off
I'll throw u up against the chains so much ppl thought it was disc golf
ok

And when I send a dog to your face we already know thats killer
When u send a dog to your face you got ur phone up w/ a snapchat filter.
nahh bro not feeling this


I got ispaz, with one or two more hits