Yes

Geno · 08-06-2021, 12:58 AM

..its simple once you figure it out
That bone crunch and torn ligament sound
Throwing punches, fist whistle -kapow!
Temper tantrum, not sure what this ones about
Collectible handgun his son picked up from the ground
Target practice, lives plucked from the crowd
The shoulder holster so swaggy, one tucked in his trousers

The boy dont monkey around, his gun swing from the hip
Silencer on the tip, safety off, talk with the clip
Weightless words get lost in the wind, floating away
Actions speak louder anyway, so observe what im saying
Poppin off, shock and awe, verbs, action words, entertainment

Ungh

Objective · 08-07-2021, 06:29 PM

Now record it. You know that's what gotta happen next

Ouch · 08-15-2021, 11:30 PM

lucy was 7 and wore a head of blue barrett

Geno · 08-17-2021, 04:59 AM

City born into this world
With no knowledge and no regrets

Adverse · 08-22-2021, 04:11 AM

Smooth flow as always. Enjoyed some of the sensory bits you included in the opening bars, heard the sounds you were conveying like they were in my ear. Love a piece that can do that. Content wise it wasn’t super deep or nothing but just a smooth ride through and through

08-06-2021, 12:58 AM	#1
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	Yes ..its simple once you figure it out That bone crunch and torn ligament sound Throwing punches, fist whistle -kapow! Temper tantrum, not sure what this ones about Collectible handgun his son picked up from the ground Target practice, lives plucked from the crowd The shoulder holster so swaggy, one tucked in his trousers The boy dont monkey around, his gun swing from the hip Silencer on the tip, safety off, talk with the clip Weightless words get lost in the wind, floating away Actions speak louder anyway, so observe what im saying Poppin off, shock and awe, verbs, action words, entertainment Ungh __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est* Last edited by Geno; 08-17-2021 at 05:00 AM.

08-07-2021, 06:29 PM	#2
Objective ( ͡º ͜ʖ ͡º) Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,787 Battle Record: 17-32 Rep Power: 52474189	Now record it. You know that's what gotta happen next __________________ I'm not a slave for entertainment, I'm entertainments personal slave, So deep into writing I'm concerned bout the text on my grave. www.youtube.com/watch?v=gV8ozGcGJ6o

08-15-2021, 11:30 PM	#3
Ouch Senior Member Join Date: Sep 2019 Posts: 5,684 Battle Record: 1-5 Accomplishments - Lost to Kill Spree Champed - Wall Talking Rep Power: 4052252	lucy was 7 and wore a head of blue barrett __________________ I just figured out how to change this.

08-17-2021, 04:59 AM	#4
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,325 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	City born into this world With no knowledge and no regrets __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

08-22-2021, 04:11 AM	#5
Adverse low tide in serotonin bay Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 2,739 Battle Record: 37-28 Champed - GWL Picture Challenge - Guerrilla Writing League - Black August II Rep Power: 15446142	Smooth flow as always. Enjoyed some of the sensory bits you included in the opening bars, heard the sounds you were conveying like they were in my ear. Love a piece that can do that. Content wise it wasn’t super deep or nothing but just a smooth ride through and through