07-09-2017, 01:15 AM | #1 |
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Far Side
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skimming the surface. purgatorial love we're more or less a message in a mirror in blood always hated how your Estee Lauder smeared when we touched now it's what i miss the most. wind and dust ruby rust, autumn ashes, apprehensive assumption aromatic rush. tell me something of substance. post-traumatic discussion, make me sit for a while once we coexist my sickness is a state of denial open trial. open casket. staring openly now give a mouse a meter and he'll hope for a mile asked you for a favor and you threw me a bone did Ricky only make a sound when Lucy was home? cubic zirconium, mutant chromosome, reclusive, alone new name Jupiter Rome. futurist misusing his orders confusion-prone, heartache meditation wondering how i become most claustrophobic when there's nothing around what a feeling. holy entropy. it's fluid as time static as the manifold we use to describe views event anticipation beauty refinement tools of the trade / signs of the times, they're 2 of a kind stupid as I am. clinging onto already gone wineglass crack. Mazel Tov. flamethrow yarmulkes off molotov the industry. re-market, recall we're the problem. as it stands, nobody wants to be solved chupacabra, human fossils eating dinner and lunch pour out this sauvignon until you're ready to fuck our moment's up, inhale release recline. romantic, reluctant we exaggerate to co-create these massive productions via question sans subject. far side, greener the grass i would've stayed if you had only asked. deadman
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07-09-2017, 12:36 PM | #2 |
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dope. you're pretty much the only writer on here nowadays, well the only write who writes well and tries. i always enjoy these, and always take time to read it several times. note to anybody: if you write well, i will copy how you write. until then i will mimic deadman forever. if you suck, then i won't copy you. anyway this was littered with crumbled balls of flaming ash, emanating fluidity. the lucy line was delicious. i loved how you recreate tree/sound idiomatic assumptions into pop culture references, usually a gloomy combustion with an opposite field of view. depth is always there, but there's always slight contrasts that you delineate with large open gaps thrown into small pools of volume. it's your usual par of work, but with a loose swag type that is loosely lined with apathy and disgust over nostalgic shortcomings. also, didn't know you would use zirconia, jupiter and these are just coincidences. :) good job man. thanks |
07-09-2017, 04:28 PM | #3 |
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"I become most claustrophobic when theres nothing around"
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09-18-2017, 08:40 AM | #4 |
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this is my favorite one in a while. I, too, love how you use pop culture references idiomatically, not just in the Lucy line but also the give a mouse a meter line. very few writers - and I don't mean just on NC - have that ability to psychically lead you where they want you to go while at the same time allowing you to believe that it's your mind doing the exploration, and I think you pulled off that maneuver really well here. more, por favor.
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10-04-2017, 04:41 PM | #5 |
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This is ill. The estee lauder was dope
And this segment.. tools of the trade / signs of the times, they're 2 of a kind stupid as I am. clinging onto already gone wineglass crack. Mazel Tov. flamethrow yarmulkes off molotov the industry. re-market, recall Loved that shit. Brilliant eriting. Looking forward to your verse in black august. Im rdy when you are btw Went 30. Lmk
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