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Old 09-28-2017, 02:19 PM   #1
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Black August Round 1


SUMMARY OF RULES:

Verses are due October 4th
WEDNESDAY at 11:59 P.M. Pacific/West Coast or THURSDAY October 5th 3:00 AM Eastern / 6:00 AM THURSDAY October 5th Central European/London


Verses MUST be a minimum 10 lines or a maximum of 48 lines (or 650 words).

[color=red]Voting closes when a clear winner is voted for. Competitors must vote immediately on the other match. Failure to vote will result in being a faggot for a significant portion of ur life.

WHAT DOES THIS MEAN? You can technically start a life of faggoting immediately but its a slippery slope.

so....

All competitors must vote on as many battles as possible duh u bum ass idiots


Topic:: uh none wtf don't u know what this is?

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Old 09-28-2017, 04:43 PM   #2
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I fed myself misappropriated truths to use against my own self doubt and hatred
And if you were to strip away the smile I faked when I look at the photos I've taken
You would notice the emotionless scars that I left on my arms and I would be staring back at you fully clothed yet naked.
I have the gall to think you wouldn't be appalled at the first sound of "I love you" leaving my lips
Because you would know I chose to say it to you before I've said it to myself since I was a kid.
I mean shit!
Why would you believe a word that I said when all the verbs in my head couldn't describe the things I would do for you,
Even though you're absolutely beautiful...
It would be for my own self important enjoyment
Because the smile on your face means more than the fractured semblance staring back at me in the mirror each morning.
Why should you be a higher priority than the former me?
Reclaiming my boyish dreams of sports teams or rap labels adoring me!
It all seems so trivial now.
It took a lot of self diagnoses to figure ME out,
While I lack the gratitude, and get smacked with the attitudes of those same old pictures of me...wow....
I assume you realize that the facts are uglier than the acne covered middle school portraits,
Hidden in my mother's purse and tucked away inside the China cabinet cupboards,
I've used my smile to hide the hideous just to make you think that my eyes are gorgeous.
Because the lies i tell myself are just a form of avoidance.
But i expected you to care;
I expected you to care about somebody that hasn't cared about themself for years.
What kind of helpless, weird, selfish, teary eyed asshole would even count the amount of fears,
That he's hidden inside a mountain of peers;
And think that YOU wouldn't discount him like the rest?
It was never a test.
I just wanted to be the one that you didn't regret
But i regret even thinking that
Because for you to regret me means that eventually you would have left me.
So I guess indirectly I always knew that there was a chance that you would forget me
And me suggesting not regretting me only made the turn about come faster than if you had never even met me.
It hurts my soul to know that I can love other people easier than i can be true to the inner me,
Even when love is within reach
I grasp frantically until I push it away unwittingly
And I'm left here waiting willingly
Because this self loathing is my inner peace.
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Old 10-03-2017, 03:37 PM   #4
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"The Villain"


Ever post on a forum because you're upset
and have chose to ignore all the stuff that gets said?
You look into threads where they're constantly clowning
on Cry fucking your ex and you vlogging about it.
Your optical mouse blinks near to your hand
before logging you out quick and clearing the ***he.
You're not really that mad, though they think it's a lie,
just disappearing from Rapbattles to visit The Lime.
The thing is this time there's no way you'll be found
you've hidden the IP address to your latest account!
With Dagel around, the pizza thing would surface again
but this alias now could finally earn their respect.
So you return to the websites that hate you the most
determined to get at those who say you're a joke.
You're playing the role perfect, to hide in full view,
even make a few posts under the guise that you're new.
You sign up your username to compete in Black Autumn
while highly amused just to even be in Bags' forum.
You keep your trash talking back while biding your time,
& see this last tournament as a chance to finally shine.
The fact you're hiding your identity proves pivotal though
as on a site that's so biased, who'll give you a vote?
You click a few posts and as you scroll through it's pages
one begins to reload, and you get a new notification.
You "View Post" in amazement to see whats posted by Lars
& there's a huge opening statement thats wrote at the start.
It's clearly emotionally charged by how he has it in caps lock
but he's exposed who you are while laughing his ass off.
So you're sat at your laptop in the lucid light of it all;
like that faggots a wack troll that doesn't even write anymore!
You type for an audience not wanting to admit that you're angry
so you hit reply and withdraw to try and think of a Plan B.
The Villain-ous mask seemed to have slipped for a second
but you're not giving up that easy, this bitch is pathetic!
The same dickriders let him fuck with people the worst
plus they're always giving him credit he doesn't even deserve.
But something he should have learned when setting you up
is when you put your keyboard to work, you're second to none!
The thread he had unveiled you in's where he made his mistake
mentioning something about a tourney where he'd taken your place.
This places him straight into your sights for revenge
it only takes you like eighteen seconds to sign-up again! (LOL)
You fly through the questions as they've not changed on the page
in every time you've re-registered and had to make a new name.
Now you've created an alias there's no way this dude is winning
even named it Ocktavius after your favourite super villain!
You make a few additional posts, covering all possible tracks
then place a due subliminal vote that hopefully costs him the match...

MWAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAA!


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Old 10-04-2017, 06:49 PM   #5
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Good shit. Really fucking long on both ends but ill just go head and say fuck it...

Ydk.. Not my favorite read from you dog. It was reaaalllllyyyty long winded and imo that hurt you. Also the the content was kind of just the same old same. I mean it had its moment both in flow and content but for the most part i dont feel like you really took your time with this and just said fuck it. Lol. Idk. Ive seen and read much bettwr and kind of expectes a lot more from you

Diablo.. Thought your shit rwad a lot cleaner. Was pretty funny. The whole dagel topic has been lol lately. This pretty much summed it all up and thought it was written well. Smooth read. Uncanny topic. All around a much cleaner read than ydk.

I got diablo here.
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Old 10-06-2017, 12:35 PM   #6
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YDK's verse was a cool read -- you gave some life to a pretty well-worn topic.. the line about "rap labels adoring me" was cool.. I really appreciate those personal touches much more these days. I thought it was well-written. Only critique is that the topic is simplistic.

Lars really killed this topic -- it was funny and original. Thoroughly entertained throughout. I tip this match to Lars based mainly on creativity and then execution.

Vote -- Lars
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Old 10-07-2017, 01:00 AM   #7
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tough in a way, diablo was more consistent, but YDK's first five lines knocked this out the park for me, the problem is it started to slip.

mvgt YDK, only because the first five made me feel something
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Old 10-07-2017, 01:06 AM   #8
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Ydk your a good writer bro I just wish you wouldn’t alway right about this depressing shit my nigga. It gets boring. I’ve been reading your stuff for a while now and it’s always a variation of this type of stuff aside from s few verses. Again this was good and well written but Lars blew you out the water with sheer creativity. And tbh if any one else would of wrote that verse Lars wrote it would of been cringe worthy lol. Any way ydk dropped another a verse was a good but lacked impact while diablo played off a current event and made the verse worth the read.
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