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Old 12-07-2018, 12:25 AM   #1
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NWL:Season I: Week VII



Verses ares due: FRIDAY(next week) at 11:59 PM EST

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Old 12-07-2018, 09:55 AM   #2
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Old 12-08-2018, 01:31 AM   #3
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Haunted by the corner of my eye
every time I take a glimpse, captured by surprise
situation got me drifting to the side
this anxiety, crash... I collide
dazed and confused forgotten memories
off the bridge drifting down the river, gone my serenity
clouds drown the moon shimmering across dark waters
dripping apparitions spur
reality got me perplexed lost in its stream
roll the boat life, I'm caught...but is it really a dream?
mind is lost and the thoughts are in between
while darkness is peering through daylight's seams
as though the destination is lurking, finalized by the direction that I go
yearning to engage in the celebration of life's carnival
the nightmare doesn't end, reaper clawing at my soul
the living doesn't seem perceive my presence nor acknowledge the direction in which I flow
I'm drifting through muted shadows that were once was considered whole
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Old 12-16-2018, 08:45 PM   #6
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Adonis' weak as hell for not posting.

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clouds drown the moon shimmering across dark waters
dripping apparitions spur
reality got me perplexed lost in its stream
roll the boat life, I'm caught...but is it really a dream?

I really like the imagery you have going through the piece. That segment was filled with it, it just didn't rhyme (the first couplet). It felt like a run on sentence, but the no rhyme threw off the flow for me there.

while darkness is peering through daylight's seams

I liked that line. Stood out to me


the living doesn't seem perceive my presence nor acknowledge the direction in which I flow

That was wayyy too wordy.

This was a good read. Very consistent. Imagery was on point, the whole haunted / ghost / dying / what seemed to be about the journey of death was pretty cool. Cool verse.

Adonis, you weak as hell.
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Any nigga that NS from now on should be banned...cats have a fuckin' whole week to post like 10 bars? Pathetic...

Obv V/ Master.
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Sorry guys. I had a hell of a time these past two weeks. I would say this is my third no show ever in like 100+ battles. Sorry rock, shit happens man. I'll be back sooner than later
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