"Time Now" - Latest track.

sacrifice · 01-23-2014, 03:21 PM

https://soundcloud.com/sacrifice/time-now-1

Beat: Me
From the new album currently in progress.

Distracted with pain, passing in vein,
Or a minor disturbance with words.
Rhyming with urgent concern:
I'm collecting state bread to make head way in this wasteland.
A fate stamped in the plains, no answering faith and,
I stay damned, no belief in a Beast,
only serpents on the surface burning freedom for peace.
I mean I'm diseased, out of focus and balance.
Still chasing. No Truth, no Opus allowed.
Still racing, feet to my knees. Hope in the clouds.
Still pacing, permanent patience, perfectly broken and proud
This return is just a desperation, I'll never make it to term.
With nobody to blame but the Herd.
That's what I continue to say, no difference.
We are just a complex reflection of ignorance.
It's wishful to pray, I'm obsessed: dismissing the frame,
without seeing what the image in the picture portrays.
Finished today. But I'll never stop.
The paradox of the addictions we face is measured not,
in the calculus of doubt and pity. Put down your fist,
turn the volume up and take an ounce of this...

It is time now, this is progress
There is no time to lose,
Open your mind, show them your fire,
they will see your truth.

This is soul confusion,
this is home to hope controlling music, a frozen blueprint,
an architect with partly sketched arches and a broken tool set.
I aim high but I can't create a stable floor
lamenting not inventing while my government is waging war.
Stay the course, I didn't set sail to let fail,
Every ambition I've scripted within my head... well
I suppose this is just another go at it.
Time is growth, and change is the pace that you keep,
no static matrix to feed, go have your way with the beat
then maybe they'll see, and pay you some heed.
I've got a baby to feed, I've got a family to nourish,
What's the use of complaining then going to stand in a furnace.
This is greater than any land you could purchase.
This is pain on a canvas for merchants of greatness and manic exertion.
Ex-stasis from panic and hatred and phantom disgracefulness,
Earn it!

It is time now, this is progress
There is no time to lose,
Open your mind, show them your fire,
they will see your truth.

NYCSPITZ · 01-23-2014, 03:29 PM

10/10

Exis · 01-23-2014, 07:31 PM

Dope shit...you have a sick voice, thought delivery was tight as fuck...I'd cop this joint without question.

Stay upwards.

PancakeBrah · 01-23-2014, 08:19 PM

Feeding the audio.

Hate the beat. It sounds like a rejected late-era Eminem beat. The chorus sounds like late-era Eminem. The first verse cool. The second verse a lot better. The lyricism throughout was cool but it gets kind of drowned out, a little. If that makes sense. Delivery was really good, though. Delivery and flow were the best aspects of this, lyrics were dope but they weren't accentuated.

sacrifice · 01-23-2014, 08:36 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Pancake

Feeding the audio.

Hate the beat. It sounds like a rejected late-era Eminem beat. The chorus sounds like late-era Eminem. The first verse cool. The second verse a lot better. The lyricism throughout was cool but it gets kind of drowned out, a little. If that makes sense. Delivery was really good, though. Delivery and flow were the best aspects of this, lyrics were dope but they weren't accentuated.

Thanks for the feed on the beat. I'm still in the mixing stage and re-mixing stage with all of my beats, so I definitely will take your comments into consideration. The final will probably be something similar, but I am looking to make it stand out more.

Geno · 01-23-2014, 09:01 PM

this was dope, didn't like the beat with these lyrics. although i did like the beat and i did like the lyrics -just don't think they meshed well together.

thought you slated your verses. quality was fairly good.

i just feel like you could have chosen a better instro to deliver your emotion better over.
not a 10/10

more like a 7/10 for me just because of those things i spoke of above. aside from that, i really dug this dude. your flow is bonkers at times. well done

dead man · 01-23-2014, 10:19 PM

whatup fice it's black. good to see you brother.

definitely felt the track and the writing alike. definitely clipped and adjusted to a more metronome friendly version of what I'm used to reading from you but thats the nature of song i suppose. i would be interested in a more free verse spoken word reading of a work of yours. emphasis would be on delivery and pacing but it could be pretty immense of done correctly..

I stay damned, no belief in a Beast,
only serpents on the surface burning freedom for peace.
I mean I'm diseased, out of focus and balance.
Still chasing. No Truth, no Opus allowed.
Still racing, feet to my knees. Hope in the clouds.

this was a dope line if not a bit contradictory on the surface.

the hook was cool too. kept a decent melody can't say much for your singing chops though lol.

this felt like a self-aware motivational anthem of sorts. i dug it man. again, good to see you around and creating still.

thanks

1

01-23-2014, 03:21 PM	#1
sacrifice Member Join Date: Jan 2014 Posts: 47 Battle Record: 1-3 Rep Power: 0	"Time Now" - Latest track. https://soundcloud.com/sacrifice/time-now-1 Beat: Me From the new album currently in progress. Distracted with pain, passing in vein, Or a minor disturbance with words. Rhyming with urgent concern: I'm collecting state bread to make head way in this wasteland. A fate stamped in the plains, no answering faith and, I stay damned, no belief in a Beast, only serpents on the surface burning freedom for peace. I mean I'm diseased, out of focus and balance. Still chasing. No Truth, no Opus allowed. Still racing, feet to my knees. Hope in the clouds. Still pacing, permanent patience, perfectly broken and proud This return is just a desperation, I'll never make it to term. With nobody to blame but the Herd. That's what I continue to say, no difference. We are just a complex reflection of ignorance. It's wishful to pray, I'm obsessed: dismissing the frame, without seeing what the image in the picture portrays. Finished today. But I'll never stop. The paradox of the addictions we face is measured not, in the calculus of doubt and pity. Put down your fist, turn the volume up and take an ounce of this... It is time now, this is progress There is no time to lose, Open your mind, show them your fire, they will see your truth. This is soul confusion, this is home to hope controlling music, a frozen blueprint, an architect with partly sketched arches and a broken tool set. I aim high but I can't create a stable floor lamenting not inventing while my government is waging war. Stay the course, I didn't set sail to let fail, Every ambition I've scripted within my head... well I suppose this is just another go at it. Time is growth, and change is the pace that you keep, no static matrix to feed, go have your way with the beat then maybe they'll see, and pay you some heed. I've got a baby to feed, I've got a family to nourish, What's the use of complaining then going to stand in a furnace. This is greater than any land you could purchase. This is pain on a canvas for merchants of greatness and manic exertion. Ex-stasis from panic and hatred and phantom disgracefulness, Earn it! It is time now, this is progress There is no time to lose, Open your mind, show them your fire, they will see your truth.

01-23-2014, 03:29 PM	#2
NYCSPITZ SYRACUSE Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 4,033 Battle Record: 31-37 Champed - Write Night II - Alias Topical Tournament Rep Power: 4743544	10/10 __________________ UNIFIED THEORY

01-23-2014, 08:19 PM	#4
PancakeBrah SOBER Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 13,052 Battle Record: 2-5 Champed - AOWL Season 2 Rep Power: 85899406	Feeding the audio. Hate the beat. It sounds like a rejected late-era Eminem beat. The chorus sounds like late-era Eminem. The first verse cool. The second verse a lot better. The lyricism throughout was cool but it gets kind of drowned out, a little. If that makes sense. Delivery was really good, though. Delivery and flow were the best aspects of this, lyrics were dope but they weren't accentuated. __________________ If I ventured in the slipstream Between the viaducts of your dreams Where immobil steel rims crack And the ditch in the back road stop Could you find me?

01-23-2014, 09:01 PM	#6
Geno White Earl Join Date: Jan 2013 Location: Philly Cat. Posts: 12,328 Battle Record: 10-15 Accomplishments - Open Mic HOF (4x) Champed - Netcees Writers League - Write Week I - Write Week 8 Rep Power: 50036758	this was dope, didn't like the beat with these lyrics. although i did like the beat and i did like the lyrics -just don't think they meshed well together. thought you slated your verses. quality was fairly good. i just feel like you could have chosen a better instro to deliver your emotion better over. not a 10/10 more like a 7/10 for me just because of those things i spoke of above. aside from that, i really dug this dude. your flow is bonkers at times. well done __________________ *-A.bove T.he R.est*

01-23-2014, 10:19 PM	#7
dead man living Join Date: Jan 2013 Posts: 3,468 Battle Record: 33-18 Accomplishments - Hall of Fame Champed - AOWL Season 1 - Art of Writing League - AOWL Season 4 - Write Week V - GWL Season 1 Rep Power: 77606676	whatup fice it's black. good to see you brother. definitely felt the track and the writing alike. definitely clipped and adjusted to a more metronome friendly version of what I'm used to reading from you but thats the nature of song i suppose. i would be interested in a more free verse spoken word reading of a work of yours. emphasis would be on delivery and pacing but it could be pretty immense of done correctly.. I stay damned, no belief in a Beast, only serpents on the surface burning freedom for peace. I mean I'm diseased, out of focus and balance. Still chasing. No Truth, no Opus allowed. Still racing, feet to my knees. Hope in the clouds. this was a dope line if not a bit contradictory on the surface. the hook was cool too. kept a decent melody can't say much for your singing chops though lol. this felt like a self-aware motivational anthem of sorts. i dug it man. again, good to see you around and creating still. thanks 1 __________________ Zack Wicks for president

01-23-2014, 07:31 PM	#3
Exis ............ Join Date: Jul 2013 Posts: 3,938 Battle Record: 3-3 Rep Power: 0	Dope shit...you have a sick voice, thought delivery was tight as fuck...I'd cop this joint without question. Stay upwards.