10-15-2013, 03:40 PM | #1 |
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dead man & Genocide: Far From Human.
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the final mohican in moccasin shoes composite i drew a sketch, violet and blue our planet may plummet as comets accrue but we'll finally be home, y mi casa es su political mastermind, mostly moderate views lived to witness evils that accomplishments do consistence often construed as an impossible proof i stand to make corrections with a competent few iAm Gawdian, flossing as a gaudy excuse to flash like orange alerts on metropolitan news knowledge is useless once you're following suit indoctrinated fully as apostles, aloof aphoristic, plague-resistant, conquering flu common cold coughing mucus into concepts to puke from Wisconsin to Utah, 600 block to the Dunes only taking lives to find a better coffin to use.. Geno.. Transylvanian apartments are an alternate roost Lethargic for you, parasite until the carcass consumed Harvest the moon, rite before a charlatans doom Exhumed, for bathing in a touch of garlic perfume I've seen the awfullest news, carvings on tombs The fall of platoons, amused, that they all were subdued Flying saucers, confused, cautious of truths Watched them crash into tunnels that were carpal, and bruise Seen partially prooned, crop circles startle bafoons That were targets for groups in the market of fruit Smoke screens nothing short of arsonist proof Crosses and screws, hung kings sing songs of exhaustion, and puke From Holocaust for the jews, to dre sampling a parliament tune Plausible cruelty, what would the carpenter do Harken the blues, eyes wide shut while its dark in the room When all's said and done, we're the farthest from human
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10-15-2013, 05:44 PM | #2 |
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dead man, I liked this:
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10-17-2013, 03:51 PM | #4 |
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how does this have NO feed. ppl intimidated or something? this was just awesome again. 2 of the best right here, unbelievably polished and smooth (i stole ur scheme there). whenever i read black i think of beer commercials talking about easy drinking.. black all ur shit is easy reading. pretty impressive for someone to keep up with geno right now while hes been on fire. also rarely see black collabing with anyone that can stay with him. u guys nailed this, should collab more, great stuff. proper proppers for this one
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10-17-2013, 07:45 PM | #5 |
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This was a dope collab, seems like the thing to do these days
regardless I felt Black's verse was pretty slick, the flow was sick and some lines really stuck out to me, this is my second time reading this decided to come back and spread some love on the butter Geno, the way you play with words and keep your flow going is dope it seems like you never let up when you get that stride going tbh I feel like you're the only one to keep up with me once I'm in that zone you can shout out to Split & maybe we could bring back the ol' vibe keep it up breh's you always got me here waving pom pom's
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same syllables throughout, pretty cool guys. The topic was stellar
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10-17-2013, 11:48 PM | #7 |
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i feel like Genocide was sober or at the perfect drunk for writing for his verse
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10-18-2013, 08:20 AM | #8 |
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My, my gentlemen. This was quite the piece of work here. Alot of people do not understand how much skill it requires to carry one multi through a verse. And then to make two verses that hold a semblence of direction? Thats talent. The flow, as I interpreted it, was very smooth from both writers. The first verse slightly more so than the first. As far as lyricism, I liked the first verse a little more. Just more suited to my preference as far as style. But the second verse did a great job following up, and I really think you did a good job tying this piece together with your final line. On a whole, the chemistry here was nice. Great job guys.
My Favorite Lines - i stand to makecorrectionswith a competent few iAm Gawdian, flossing as a gaudy excuse to flash likeorangealerts on metropolitan news knowledge is useless once you're following suit
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genocide is really smart. really liked this. idk what to add.
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political mastermind, mostly moderate views
i stand to make corrections with a competent few to flash like orange alerts on metropolitan news apostles, aloof plague-resistant, conquering flu common cold coughing mucus into concepts to puke from Wisconsin to Utah, 600 block to the Dunes apartments are an alternate roost Watched them crash into tunnels that were carpal, and bruise this was a dope collaboration that didn't disappoint... two writers with 2 different styles exhibiting the same style and you could see still the distinction in differences. black is more passive and introverted with his reflections while adolf is more active extroverted in his phrasing. the same rhyme scheme through out. well done. i loved that rhyme scheme............
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sick. I love this piece. black altered his style ever so slightly, like just a fraction of a millimeter to match genocides usual swag. the result was incredible. the two best OM writers on the site teaming up. im nominating this piece for the HOF
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Grooviness.
our planet may plummet as comets accrue but we'll finally be home, y mi casa es su political mastermind, mostly moderate views lived to witness evils that accomplishments do ^dope, and good wordplay in the last line. Transylvanian apartments are an alternate roost Lethargic for you, parasite until the carcass consumed Harvest the moon, rite before a charlatans doom Exhumed, for bathing in a touch of garlic perfume I've seen the awfullest news, carvings on tombs The fall of platoons, amused, that they all were subdued ^this opening section kilt it. I was satisfied with this production. |
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You farfinewgans should have let me in dis manggggg
Felt the ending's from both of you's stood out.
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Felt the ending's from both of you's stood out.
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