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Old 07-11-2019, 12:12 PM   #1
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I stopped posting for a while. Didnt stop writing though.
This was yesterday. Much love...

Melting pheonix. Felt is thinking.
Spell it. Breathe it.
Maybe we all get some rest when hell freezes?
But the mind constantly moves.. Telekinesis
Myyy, we're all getting used to a skeleton's freedom
Monster colossal, lol they wanna block apollo
Pop the bottles.. Light in skin, it lies within
It's not just hollow
Groovy fluid wings to beat- should see my flock of swallows
Now the question is how foolish does foolish get?
Plucking love me's subzero cool is bliss
Ice-tide pool of webs that group in crystals
Pond of ghosts.. On the float. You think you're on a boat..
Wanderglow.. You wanna go
Praying to get a sail
You already do.
You're not in a maze. You're already through
Trying to grow some wings you already grew
Trying to find yourself but youre already you
It's as natural as magick.
What are they keeping in place with their cast of disaster?
A planet of actors. Abracadabra
Vanity is sweet..Treaty breech on planet Me-tv
Trying to channel existence admist sabotage-witches with camoflauged interests
Mirror-dream of echoes..like what's the meteor special
Took the me from your schedule, guess it's all so easier to let go
I pluck em with paint upon an easel of petals
Words are swords and I teethe on the metals
Chipping me. Liquid-heat hidden beat symphonies
Gaze in the glitches. Days of infinite
Ancient exquisite. Only battle? Thought
Lonely astronaut who doesn't know what to do with space when he gets it
Way of the mystik, tonguing blueprints to your labia's physics
Safe of clit'iss. You got the password. Yeah sure, I'll be your angel to burn
But it's grave concern when the tables have turned and halos emerge
Holy? Blow me. Police are Not-sees
Robots on leash.. Cop...ies
Their whole has died. Polarized
Polar eyes that won't ascend
They try to climb the pole and slide bc their poles are ICE
Never-looking on plethra
Better reach for ya weapon, pussy
Splashin' Tinker for the real inside rapid thinkers..
Here's my psychic applaud. Wanna write with a god to feel alive?
They call me magick-fingers, I AM MASSAGE
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Old 07-13-2019, 12:22 AM   #2
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Old 07-13-2019, 02:42 PM   #3
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this is really good. read it a few times already. lots of creative idiom flips and wordplays that worked with the concept as a whole. specifically the pop the bottes.. Light in skin and fluid wings and flock of swallow were interesting. pluck me's sub-zero and pluck'em with paint were also cool turn of phrase.

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that was nasty.

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Their whole has died. Polarized
awesome.

very awesome read my man.

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