John Dillinger (1-0) vs Dynomight (1-0) - Dynomight wins

[Hush]

NBL Season 11
Week 2

Due SUNDAY 9/02/18

Minimum - 10 lines
Max - 20 lines

- NO BITING
- NO FEEDING
- NO SWAYING
- AGREE ON LINE LIMIT
- IF NOT AGREED, MUST MATCH 1st VERSE


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2nd person to post can't edit after the 1st vote comes in.
Don't be an idiot.
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May God have mercy on your souls!

[Dynomight]

***a robed man appears on a black steed, a pale red moon looms in the sky


... “there will be blood , whispers the cloaked figure” ***

[John Dillinger]

You're weird as hell.

14.

U not the best kid, tryna figure out who you messed with
Give em the hands... have you seeing more stars than your fruity check in
You a junky, ur girl tweakin & she slurp me like mad pasta
Shawty gave me some Crystal Head, you day drink alone w/ that vodka
Cuz out in public? You dont seek 10's, you meet men
& your Tindr aint the only time we'll find fags in a DM
Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
Came thru w/ the fully auto cuz Dyno always flexin wealth
For fun I'll switch it to semi & leave u in worse shape than Exis health
U can bitch all you want, name me a league this whore bossin
You a Lil Baby, we're only replying Yes Indeed in support of your losses
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear

[Dynomight]

Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
never seen the winners circle. 2nd rd ina. Tourney u dunno what it felt like
The “L” brackets your home... which ironically is really hurting your shelf life
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
I kill the whole team then shoot the boss straight in his center
Cap the leader of the squad too bad won’t nobody be there to avenge ya
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane
Two shots for everybody’s face.. til the paint and the brains blend
This murder sprees a scooby doo season u all get the same end
Trying to commit suicide by battling me is pretty unhealthy
Guess John was feeling kamikaze way before he heard one track on the Lp

[For Battling]

U not the best kid, tryna figure out who you messed with
Give em the hands... have you seeing more stars than your fruity check in
nah, dissing his check in isn’t gonna cut it
You a junky, ur girl tweakin & she slurp me like mad pasta
Shawty gave me some Crystal Head, you day drink alone w/ that vodka
nooo
Cuz out in public? You dont seek 10's, you meet men
& your Tindr aint the only time we'll find fags in a DM
Super played bro
Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
this was cool
Came thru w/ the fully auto cuz Dyno always flexin wealth
For fun I'll switch it to semi & leave u in worse shape than Exis health
ok, you could’ve definitely capitalized on the Exis concept for something doper though
U can bitch all you want, name me a league this whore bossin
You a Lil Baby, we're only replying Yes Indeed in support of your losses
cool
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear
alright

Vs


Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
lol nice
never seen the winners circle. 2nd rd ina. Tourney u dunno what it felt like
The “L” brackets your home... which ironically is really hurting your shelf life
decent
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
pretty cool
I kill the whole team then shoot the boss straight in his center
Cap the leader of the squad too bad won’t nobody be there to avenge ya
nice
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane
lmao ok
Two shots for everybody’s face.. til the paint and the brains blend
This murder sprees a scooby doo season u all get the same end
nah
Trying to commit suicide by battling me is pretty unhealthy
Guess John was feeling kamikaze way before he heard one track on the Lp
decent



Cool battle here, JD started off pretty slow then picked it up a bit after the third bar. Dyno only had 1 clear miss, definitely think this is a Neighbor alias lol. Anyways fun read here, I got Dynomight pretty comfortably though.


Vote Dynomight

[~RustyGunZ~]

Tuba player was flames

Rest of the battle was even I’ll drop more detail when I’m on PC but dyno won

[Ryno]

Originally Posted by John Dillinger

You're weird as hell.

14.

Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear

These were ur most effective quotes. everything else was eh tbh. nothing eye catching.

Originally Posted by Dynomight

Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane

I generally liked ur concepts a lot more and thought the tuba line was ur best. some wording was iffy or bland but decent drop. props

v/DYnomight

[Clout]

Originally Posted by John Dillinger

Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear

Originally Posted by Dynomight

Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane

I got dyno by a bar, i seen john come crisper than this. Felt like dyno had more lands here. Depending on peoples perspectives on what they see as dope, this could go either way. Good battle fellas keep up the good work.

v/ dyno

[Hush]

This deserves more votes

[Score]

Originally Posted by John Dillinger

You're weird as hell.

14.

U not the best kid, tryna figure out who you messed with
Give em the hands... have you seeing more stars than your fruity check in
Ok
You a junky, ur girl tweakin & she slurp me like mad pasta
Shawty gave me some Crystal Head, you day drink alone w/ that vodka
Not bad
Cuz out in public? You dont seek 10's, you meet men
& your Tindr aint the only time we'll find fags in a DM
Not bad
Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
Good
Came thru w/ the fully auto cuz Dyno always flexin wealth
For fun I'll switch it to semi & leave u in worse shape than Exis health
Nah
U can bitch all you want, name me a league this whore bossin
You a Lil Baby, we're only replying Yes Indeed in support of your losses
Ehhh ok
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear
Wasnt feelin tie dys old u didn't do enough with the flip for me

Originally Posted by Dynomight

Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
Not bad
never seen the winners circle. 2nd rd ina. Tourney u dunno what it felt like
The “L” brackets your home... which ironically is really hurting your shelf life
Ok
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
Fire
I kill the whole team then shoot the boss straight in his center
Cap the leader of the squad too bad won’t nobody be there to avenge ya
Ok
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane
Heat
Two shots for everybody’s face.. til the paint and the brains blend
This murder sprees a scooby doo season u all get the same end
Nah
Trying to commit suicide by battling me is pretty unhealthy
Guess John was feeling kamikaze way before he heard one track on the Lp

Not bad

Pretty even battle. But dyno had some bangers and dill didnt and thats the dif for me

Dyno

[Hush]

Originally Posted by John Dillinger

You're weird as hell.

14.

U not the best kid, tryna figure out who you messed with
Give em the hands... have you seeing more stars than your fruity check in
....lol fire
You a junky, ur girl tweakin & she slurp me like mad pasta
Shawty gave me some Crystal Head, you day drink alone w/ that vodka
....eh Iunno man idea was cool but it didn’t sting
Cuz out in public? You dont seek 10's, you meet men
& your Tindr aint the only time we'll find fags in a DM
....nah man two letter name plays ain’t the wave
Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
....dope
Came thru w/ the fully auto cuz Dyno always flexin wealth
For fun I'll switch it to semi & leave u in worse shape than Exis health
...simple but ok lol
U can bitch all you want, name me a league this whore bossin
You a Lil Baby, we're only replying Yes Indeed in support of your losses
...ok idea
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear
...cool

Originally Posted by Dynomight

Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
...nah
never seen the winners circle. 2nd rd ina. Tourney u dunno what it felt like
The “L” brackets your home... which ironically is really hurting your shelf life
...over worded to hell . Tf u talkn bout
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
...:ok
I kill the whole team then shoot the boss straight in his center
Cap the leader of the squad too bad won’t nobody be there to avenge ya
....ehhh simple
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane
... lol that’s dumb
Two shots for everybody’s face.. til the paint and the brains blend
This murder sprees a scooby doo season u all get the same end
...almost kinda maybe
Trying to commit suicide by battling me is pretty unhealthy
Guess John was feeling kamikaze way before he heard one track on the Lp
...ok

I got John here tho

[Kill Spree]

U not the best kid, tryna figure out who you messed with
Give em the hands... have you seeing more stars than your fruity check in
This was basic but cool. Light
You a junky, ur girl tweakin & she slurp me like mad pasta
Shawty gave me some Crystal Head, you day drink alone w/ that vodka
Decent but nothing hard here tbh.
Cuz out in public? You dont seek 10's, you meet men
& your Tindr aint the only time we'll find fags in a DM
This was cool
Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs
This was dope
Came thru w/ the fully auto cuz Dyno always flexin wealth
For fun I'll switch it to semi & leave u in worse shape than Exis health
Meh... you needed more tie ins tbh. Miss
U can bitch all you want, name me a league this whore bossin
You a Lil Baby, we're only replying Yes Indeed in support of your losses
This was light... needed more sting
U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear
concept is nice... but the punch lacked sting
vs


Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty
Dope concept... wasnt feeling the punch tbh
never seen the winners circle. 2nd rd ina. Tourney u dunno what it felt like
The “L” brackets your home... which ironically is really hurting your shelf life
You Shelf life? i get what your saying but wtf is a shelf life?
Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player
Dope
I kill the whole team then shoot the boss straight in his center
Cap the leader of the squad too bad won’t nobody be there to avenge ya
This was cool i f uk with it
One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane
Dope
Two shots for everybody’s face.. til the paint and the brains blend
This murder sprees a scooby doo season u all get the same end
I see where your going... and this could be dope as fuck but this was a miss.
Trying to commit suicide by battling me is pretty unhealthy
Guess John was feeling kamikaze way before he heard one track on the Lp
[/b]No.. You quite here[/b]

TBH this was a cool read. felt Dyn had more hits. JD had some nice bars to but he had a few more misses. I like JD's style just think he needs more attack/aggression in her bars and he could be super dope. But I got DYn edging this

[Jabari Black]

U not the best kid, tryna figure out who you messed with
Give em the hands... have you seeing more stars than your fruity check in

(Ehh not a strong start. Dissing the check in isn’t the best angle. It prob woulda been more effective if he directly mentioned stars in the check in)

You a junky, ur girl tweakin & she slurp me like mad pasta
Shawty gave me some Crystal Head, you day drink alone w/ that vodka

(This feels forced because you wouldn’t call good head “crystal head” lol so the punch only works one way. I also thought he end of the punch coulda had a stronger tie in than ‘you say drink alone with that vodka)

Cuz out in public? You dont seek 10's, you meet men
& your Tindr aint the only time we'll find fags in a DM

(This was okay. It’s a bit weird shortening his name to DM because his name is one word. The flip itself was fine)

Only scary part about kid's his smell, walk around u w/ my nose plugged
Cause you don't get under our skin Might, ur just as nasty as those bugs

(This was cool. Might/mite flip is pretty good. Idk the best way to explain this but directly referencing your wp in the punch feels like a bit of a cop out to me - kinda lazy writing. Idk if it’s personal preference but i think it takes more skill to tie it in smoother. Idk if that makes sense but I tried lol)

Came thru w/ the fully auto cuz Dyno always flexin wealth
For fun I'll switch it to semi & leave u in worse shape than Exis health

(Lol, this made me laugh. The flip itself wasn’t crazy but all around this was a good line)

U can bitch all you want, name me a league this whore bossin
You a Lil Baby, we're only replying Yes Indeed in support of your losses

(Cool concept and cool reference. I think the execution was lacking a bit though)

U beating me is funny, nobody thinks D against Dill's fair
Best you can ask for is a Tie Dy, & not those gay shirts that u still wear

(This prob woulda been better but I’ve seen Tie Dy flips. This was okay to me)



Last week you caught Aids .. me I caught a body
Get me pissed and it’s John in a box . Turn you to a port a potty

(Lol this is funny and a good np. I think ‘turn you to a portapotty is lengthy and you could condensed the wording but I like the punch)

never seen the winners circle. 2nd rd ina. Tourney u dunno what it felt like
The “L” brackets your home... which ironically is really hurting your shelf life

(This was just okay. Slight stretch because you wouldn’t call a losers bracket a “L” bracket. Then I don’t think L bracket ‘hurting your shelf life’ is that good of a tie in because the word ‘shelf’ is really the only thing that ties in)

Dentist chair ..put this metal in ya mouth an a tool to spray ya
This dude a hater ... mess wit the bull and get the horns in ya chest like a tuba player

(Hmm this is is somewhere between eh and okay. You took two played concepts but elevated them a bit. Dentist, metal in your mouth is played but the tool to spray you elevated it. I wanna like the second line. I’ve heart metal/trombone/tuba flips. I haven’t heard horn flips but I also think you made that up lol. Could be wrong but I don’t think a horn is a thing...pm me or call me out when this is close if it is lol)

I kill the whole team then shoot the boss straight in his center
Cap the leader of the squad too bad won’t nobody be there to avenge ya

(This was pretty cool. You kinda fumble he wording at the end. The concept carries this though. Cap the leader is good.)

One pistol in each hands .. so u and all the homies can share pain
I’m Running up.. arms out on each side like little kids playing airplane

(Lmao this was basic but I’m giving you this. This landed)

Two shots for everybody’s face.. til the paint and the brains blend
This murder sprees a scooby doo season u all get the same end

(Lol I think this is a bit basic but also an element of creativity to it. Prob needed to do a bit more or have one or two more tie ins. This isn’t bad)

Trying to commit suicide by battling me is pretty unhealthy
Guess John was feeling kamikaze way before he heard one track on the Lp

(Once again this was basic. Needed a bit more to the flip. I don’t think it was bad though - this is okay)


Good battle. JD is witty and had a lot of creative concepts. I do think he had some bars where the execution coulda been a lot smoother and he coulda tied the punch into the wp better.

Dyno had a variety bars. Some stuff came off as basic but he understands how to craft a punch. I don’t think he has the cleanest pen but he had some stand out and memorable punches.

Good battle but I think Dynomight took this

Mvgt Dynomight